SimonDoom
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That's weird, but I don't think it's second person. The emphasis appears to be on "she" as much as it is on "you", so it's not being directed inside "your" head. The narrator reads like an independent entity, so it's third person, surely? Pre-empting the future also makes it omniscient, since "you" can't do that. Whatever it is, it's so convoluted as to be unreadable.
It's off the cuff, so some lack of clarity is understandable, particularly because the assignment--2d person POV, future perfect tense--is such an absurd and difficult choice. Only a masochist would choose it.
I agree in the passage it delves too much into the third person woman's perspective to be clearly second person, but I think one can read it as the second person main character speculating about what the third person character is thinking.