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Old 03-12-2009, 12:18 PM   #26
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I haven't been posting for very long and most of the feedback I get is short. There are a few posts that make me smile when I see them though.

My stories are full of tons of unbelievable situations and this guy complains about the slut in my story kneeling while blowing a guy and calling it bullshit

Stop the madness!
Why would Carmen get on her knees in a bathroom when she could sit on the toilet and finger her pussy while blowing the guy? Bullshit, man!

I also like this one.

Hilarious
Dude, what were you smoking when you thought this chapter up? Brilliant!

This next guy hated my story premise but liked the sex writing. I like it because usually people like my premise better than the sex descriptions. I also like that he called my characters turds.

Sad little dickhead
Teenager or not, it's a sad little wimp that peeps on a friend's wife and then takes pictures and sends them to another doper. The sex writing was fairly enjoyable, but the story premise sucked. That shit may be cool in California, but in the midwest we put a whuppin on turds like that.

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Old 03-12-2009, 12:41 PM   #27
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[quote=Donkeepuncher;30351304]I haven't been posting for very long and most of the feedback I get is short. There are a few posts that make me smile when I see them though.

My stories are full of tons of unbelievable situations and this guy complains about the slut in my story kneeling while blowing a guy and calling it bullshit

Stop the madness!
Why would Carmen get on her knees in a bathroom when she could sit on the toilet and finger her pussy while blowing the guy? Bullshit, man!


That is fucking hilarious! It seems like this guy has it all planned out in his mind and if your writing disagrees with him then he gets angry.
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Old 03-13-2009, 11:42 AM   #28
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I'm new to this so I haven't gotten that much feedback. BTW, my story is Cum to Mommy. Most of the feedback was great but then I got this:


"Yes, the story is well written but really for this I think that you can do of better.

Suggestions:

More dialogues, create spicy but realistic situations, once created the correct environment you push more than you are able the fantasy. The dream of all the teen-agers is "mummy out, whore inside" you make more neighbor his mother to the erotic fantasies of his child even also with lingerie, high heels, stockings, etc. You make the repressed desires of both to explode.

It has to go in growing but you have departed well, you can make your story really hot.

Bye"


Can ANYONE decipher that for me?
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Old 03-14-2009, 01:39 PM   #29
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Just wanted to say that I LOVED that particular story! I love stories and fantasies about parents submitting to domination from their kids, especially their sons, and the bit where they were on their knees together for him was awesome!

The troll comments at the end were like a humorous dessert.
I'm glad you liked it as it seems to have been pretty divisive. I've got some of my best comments from that story (some scarily keen ones), but also plenty more like this:

DISGUSTING FILTH
Your story was the most disgusting piece of trash I have EVER had the misfortune to read. If this story is any indication of your normal sexual fantasies then that causes me to wonder why people that know you haven't had you committed. Then again people with this kind of filth roaming about in their head probably don't have anyone that close to them.


Just imagine if everyone who had ever had a kinky incest fantasy did get committed! There'd be no room to deal with people with serious mental problems. I'd also add that maybe people whose idea of fun is trawling internet porn sites in order to find something they object to and then complaining about it may not have that many people close to them too. He says he's had the "misfortune" to read it like he accidentally stumbled into the incest section and unwittingly clicked on the one that said "Cuckolded By My Son". It must have been a terrible shock to him to find out what the story was about!


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Old 03-14-2009, 01:46 PM   #30
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In a similar "What were you looking for, then?" vein of thought, here is a comment I got for one of my stories in the Transsexuals and Crossdressers section.

Ugh!!! Sick shit!!!!
Those guys who long to wear a skirt and suck on a cock are fucking gay slobs. They need a foot and a dick up the ass, no make that a foot long dick up the ass. If my husband would do such stupid shit, I would start treating him like shit. I would go out and fuck real men and make that queer suck my lovers cocks and eat their cream pies. But my husband is a real man. He'd fuck me up if I came up with such sick shit! Thank heavens for real men.


What on earth was she expecting to read about in transsexual and crossdressing stories? I've got no problem with people not sharing my particular fantasies and desires but it does seem like if you found that whole crossdressing area to be "sick shit", you probably wouldn't go into the crossdressing bit of the site!

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Old 03-14-2009, 02:58 PM   #31
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That is fucking hilarious! It seems like this guy has it all planned out in his mind and if your writing disagrees with him then he gets angry.
Well, yes, there are those, and there isn't much you can do about them. However, as a new writer I was just trying things out and I did take my characters where they hadn't been before. It was actually very hard for me to write and I was concerned that my set up was a little unbelievable. Whether it was believable or not is not what got commented on, but might or might not have had a lot to do with my substantially lower ratings on that chapter and the fact that posting that one chapter dragged all my ratings way down! Of course, it could have been that it was just poorly written, I'll never really know.

Lesson: don't take the characters too far from the readers expectations.

But, that comment about a BJ kneeling or sitting on the toilet! Funny! Seems it would actually be easier for her to finger herself kneeling than sitting on a cold toilet seat.
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Old 03-14-2009, 03:00 PM   #32
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I'm new to this so I haven't gotten that much feedback. BTW, my story is Cum to Mommy. Most of the feedback was great but then I got this:


"Yes, the story is well written but really for this I think that you can do of better.

Suggestions:

More dialogues, create spicy but realistic situations, once created the correct environment you push more than you are able the fantasy. The dream of all the teen-agers is "mummy out, whore inside" you make more neighbor his mother to the erotic fantasies of his child even also with lingerie, high heels, stockings, etc. You make the repressed desires of both to explode.

It has to go in growing but you have departed well, you can make your story really hot.

Bye"


Can ANYONE decipher that for me?
haha! Thanks for sharing, it was a good laugh trying to figure it out. I also had to do a serious translation on one private comment.

Good luck there!
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Old 03-14-2009, 03:06 PM   #33
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In a similar "What were you looking for, then?" vein of thought, here is a comment I got for one of my stories in the Transsexuals and Crossdressers section.

Ugh!!! Sick shit!!!!
Those guys who long to wear a skirt and suck on a cock are fucking gay slobs. They need a foot and a dick up the ass, no make that a foot long dick up the ass. If my husband would do such stupid shit, I would start treating him like shit. I would go out and fuck real men and make that queer suck my lovers cocks and eat their cream pies. But my husband is a real man. He'd fuck me up if I came up with such sick shit! Thank heavens for real men.


What on earth was she expecting to read about in transsexual and crossdressing stories? I've got no problem with people not sharing my particular fantasies and desires but it does seem like if you found that whole crossdressing area to be "sick shit", you probably wouldn't go into the crossdressing bit of the site!

Seems to me she had her own fantasy going on there in her telling what she would do if .... maybe she's trying to give you a strong hint of a story she wants you to write!!
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Old 03-14-2009, 07:15 PM   #34
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Cool Troll comments...

Some time ago, I wrote a story about two couples homesteading in Texa in the 1870s. An Indian raid of their ranch kills the two men and, after raping her, one of the women. The other woman is taken captive, living with the Indians for five or six years-first as a slave and eventually as wife to a brave. Below the story links are three troll comments about Emma 2.


http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=310700 PART I


http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=314459 PART II



Those who think that a rape tale should be EROTIC-
06/13/07 By: don-donna2
Are pretty God damn sick


boring!
06/13/07 By: Anonymous in Australia
BBBBBooooooooorrrrrrrrriiiiiiinnnnnnnnngggggggggg!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This story was about as erotic as a child's fairytale. So matter of fact, so ho hum. Sorry, but work on your style.



That was
06/13/07 By: Anonymous in UK
Horrendous. The graphic detail at the beginning was unnecessary and i find it hard to believe that anyone would want to harm a pregnant lady yet keep the other as a wife. It was disgusting plain and simple. I think u should give it up. VILE FILTH!!!
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Old 03-15-2009, 07:30 PM   #35
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06/13/07 By: Anonymous in Australia
BBBBBooooooooorrrrrrrrriiiiiiinnnnnnnnngggggggggg!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This story was about as erotic as a child's fairytale. So matter of fact, so ho hum. Sorry, but work on your style.
Actually, your stories sound very interesting to me!! I'm going to have to look them up.

But, my reason for commenting is about the 'boring' part. I got a PM about my boring story. It makes me wonder, do you think they read the whole 'boring' thing before commenting? Or do they give it up and skip ahead to comment? You just gotta wonder.

I'm probably never going to be a 100% sex saturated story writer (except when I get inspired to pop out a stroker thing,) so I did have my qualms and still have them about posting here. I understand that most readers are looking for a fast thrill (but not too fast if my ratings are anything to go by on my stroker!) However, my sex is pretty graphic, so ...
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Old 03-16-2009, 12:30 AM   #36
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Actually, your stories sound very interesting to me!! I'm going to have to look them up.

But, my reason for commenting is about the 'boring' part. I got a PM about my boring story. It makes me wonder, do you think they read the whole 'boring' thing before commenting? Or do they give it up and skip ahead to comment? You just gotta wonder.

I'm probably never going to be a 100% sex saturated story writer (except when I get inspired to pop out a stroker thing,) so I did have my qualms and still have them about posting here. I understand that most readers are looking for a fast thrill (but not too fast if my ratings are anything to go by on my stroker!) However, my sex is pretty graphic, so ...
Yes, I often wonder too if they've bothered to read the whole story. I guess some people just get their rocks off tearing down the work of other people. Call it boring, vote zero, and all that hard work really takes a hit.

If you read enough stories on this site, you'll find that some are erotica of the romantic type with only a little, if any, explicit sex. They range from there to XXX material filled with little but explicit sex--stroke stories, mostly. I tend to write more of the latter because i's more popular with guys and I think it's much more difficult for males to write romantic type erotica--at least that's true in my case.. Gals seem to like the more romantic kind of ertotica. Some just like it all.

I've found one can't please all of the people all of the time. But, I've also found it's hard to please even some of the people some of the time! Good luck, but do keep writing.
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Old 03-16-2009, 05:37 AM   #37
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Cool lack of feedback?

I've only posted 2 stories and both of those in the last two weeks. So far, they have had over 15000 hits and get 4.30 and 4.5 stars respectively. Oddly, I've only had two comments posted. Both were positive, but I would like to know why I'm not getting more.
If anyone has the time, please have a look and give me your thoughts..........
Sorry if this is somewhat outside the thread.
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Old 03-16-2009, 11:27 PM   #38
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I generally try to avoid making negative comments on someone else's work. I can usually tell about 3-4 graphs in whether I'm going to like a story, and if I don't I simply back out and move on.

I will periodically read a new writer's stuff and if it has some mistakes, but the writer shows some promise, I'll offer some constructive criticism. I write for a living, and I've done this as a sideline for a LONG time (almost 7 years now), and I've accumulated a lot of red Hs (no brag, just fact), so I think I have some insights on good writing. If I can help a fledgling writer improve their skills then I like to do so.

I can think of only one occasion where I really trashed a story, and that was recently. Some clown basically lifted the whole plot of someone else's story, changed a couple of superficial things and passed it off as their original work without any sort of acknowledgment. That pissed me off. I mean, I've borrowed ideas from other writers, even taken other writer's stories and written sequels, but I've never failed to give credit and/or ask permission before I did. It's called common courtesy, and this person didn't exhibit that. I and others let them know about it, too.
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Old 03-17-2009, 12:32 AM   #39
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I generally try to avoid making negative comments on someone else's work. I can usually tell about 3-4 graphs in whether I'm going to like a story, and if I don't I simply back out and move on.

I will periodically read a new writer's stuff and if it has some mistakes, but the writer shows some promise, I'll offer some constructive criticism. I write for a living, and I've done this as a sideline for a LONG time (almost 7 years now), and I've accumulated a lot of red Hs (no brag, just fact), so I think I have some insights on good writing. If I can help a fledgling writer improve their skills then I like to do so.

I can think of only one occasion where I really trashed a story, and that was recently. Some clown basically lifted the whole plot of someone else's story, changed a couple of superficial things and passed it off as their original work without any sort of acknowledgment. That pissed me off. I mean, I've borrowed ideas from other writers, even taken other writer's stories and written sequels, but I've never failed to give credit and/or ask permission before I did. It's called common courtesy, and this person didn't exhibit that. I and others let them know about it, too.
Yeah, you learn really quick don't you when you start posting stories! I never was one to pick on a story when I was just an anonymous reader. I did always vote. I'm a lot kinder voter now, I must say! But I've only left one critique recently and only because the writer came over here to the BB asking for comments. He asked!! But, I personally, would rather get constructive criticism in a PM. I'm already pretty insecure about my writing, so honest, fair criticism is actually harder to take in the comments section. The foolish, nasty criticism is both funny and irritating only due to it effects on my fragile score!

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Old 03-17-2009, 08:31 PM   #40
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In spite of writing on Literotica for nearly 7 years now, I've gotten very little feedback. Most of what I have gotten is short and sweet, much of it praising my realistic dialogue.

The BEST I ever got was a few years back when a fellow Lit author in England spent Christmas day reading my stories and emailing me a detailed constructive critique of every single one of them! We wrote back and forth for awhile after that and I took a lot of what he said to heart.

The WORST was earlier this month when one of my most popular early stories received this posted comment: As eerie as the implications may be, this seems like it was written by a young teen. Badly written dialogue, poor grammar and layout. In the end, our protagonist is a common prostitute whose clients just happened to have 2 $50 bills in their pockets?? Haha. Loved the ex-angle, wish it had been better executed

My latest (# 49) is Darcy's Designated Driver at http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=411833
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Old 03-18-2009, 02:57 PM   #41
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I mentioned a little earlier a few of the negative comments I have received. One of the good comments was in relation to this story: http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=289803

In this story, we follow a young girl through her dating and "first time" expererience after prom night. The reader doesn't learn untill the final two paragraphs that the main character is actually eighty years old and has told this story to her favorite niece as a reuslt of the niece asking auntie what her first time was like. The lady reveals she has cancer and only a few months to live and wanted to get the story down for this niece before she (auntie) died.

Anyway, the point is that a reader commented something to the effect that he/she sure did like my story and hoped I could write a couple more before "the cancer gets you." Apparently, the reader really got into that story and identified with something or someone.
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I mentioned a little earlier a few of the negative comments I have received. One of the good comments was in relation to this story: http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=289803

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Anyway, the point is that a reader commented something to the effect that he/she sure did like my story and hoped I could write a couple more before "the cancer gets you." Apparently, the reader really got into that story and identified with something or someone.
Yeah, those comments/private e-mails always make me chuckle, some readers think the stories are actually written about yourself. A guy once asked me to send pics of my mom he thought I had lesbian incest with (I'm a guy and would never do such things with my mom).
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Old 03-20-2009, 08:23 PM   #43
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Here's some feedback I've received on my stories..some good and some not so good

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THE GOOD

darling, in your bio you dont talk about anal sex, but your stories certaunly show that you egnant...ui would have licked that. i have fucked two pregnant women besides my ex wife and they were great. i think pregnant women love to fuck. you also are a big woman. i go crazy with somethimg to hold on too. i would lick and suc k your cunt while ramming my fingers up your ass then suck all your cum. next, dig my tongue deep in your ass and fuck you with it until you give me another load. i would suck that into mty mouth and dribble it into your for lubrication to fuck your ass hard. you are very frank. you look great. i would like to fuck you just as you say. i would fuck you, drnk your cum, drink you golden champagne. i would love to take you to a theatre and watch guys pound you. i would like to see you dogged then lick all the cum out of mouth, cunt and ass. i want to see you with yiour mouth buried in another womans pussy. your words in your bio drive me crazy. you are pure sex. i thibk of nothing but sex, even after i cum. we belong together, fucking and sucking each other into ecstacy.


That is one FUCKING HOT story. I would like to meet you and do all of those nasty hot fucking things to you. I would stick my tongue so far up your cunt and asshole that you would think it is going to come out of your mouth, but that won't happen because my cock will be buried in there all the way to my balls.

This is a beautiful story. You had him fuck his sister and also fuck his mother. It got my cock hard. Of course, I played with it. That's why you wrote the story and why I read it: so I could play with my cock and cum. I did and it felt great. In your biography you said you loved to suck cock. I wish you could suck mine. Jacking off to your story is the next best thing. Thank you.

and now the NOT SO GOOD

Sorry, but yours truly did not enjoy your method of writing.
You write as if you are retelling each movement or detail.
'Diary like' would be an apt description.
Such a shame, for some of your story ideas are quite good.
When stories are written like this they lose their effectiveness in my honest opinion.


But i've gotten more positive feedback then negative. What I don't like I just delete hehe.

But I will say that it is the readers that love my stories that help give me the inspiration to want to write more. I mean after all, can't leave all those horny guys out there without anything erotically hot to jerk off too right.

So to my faithful readers I say thank you. And to the ones who don't like what I write, dont hate me because I like to write erotic stories. You don't have to read them you know. It is a free country after all.

Oh and if you want to read my stories just click here --->http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions

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Old 03-22-2009, 05:02 AM   #44
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You spelled it just like that and they all jumped in to either congratulate themselves or further substantiate their excellent disrespect?

No one noticed the joke? (Please tell me you mispewled it on purpose to be funney. Cuz that IS funny! If you didn’t? Then it’s not at all funny. It’s scary, instead.)
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Old 03-22-2009, 11:30 AM   #45
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Readers and comments.

Readers and comments.
Don’t get me wrong, I love my readers. They are half the reason I write. I also love to receive their comments (yes even the snide depreciating sneers of the anonymous), that a story I have written affects a reader to such a degree that he or she takes their valuable time to write and post a comment means the world to me.

Here it comes. Get ready for it.

But.

They drive me crazy. I have been bitched at because my characters do things that in the real world would have consequences (STD’s, scars, etc). I have been accused of being a horrible husband/father/person, or hating women/women bosses/gays/kids and for all I know puppies and kittens

Some examples:

{“Continue writing for your own pleasure, because reading the comments, you don't seem to give much pleasure to anyone else.”}

This was a story about an encounter in an adult movie house and a group orgy scene. Not many public comments but the most e-mail I have ever gotten on a story, mostly from women saying they had done something like that or that they wished they (and their husbands / boyfriends) had the guts to do it.


{“ To Dom I read your bio and unless that is a work of fiction you do like this sort of thing. As I said each to their own. Personally I would not write about this sort of thing mainly because I don't beleive in doing things like this, even as a fiction based fantasy. On last point the common wisdom about writing is that we all put something of ourselves in the stories we write. I know I do as people who know me can verify. I would say that you Dom put a part of you in your stories.”}

Of course I do. Much of my writing is based on 35+ years in the bdsm community. However while I occasionally inject where appropriate, comments on safe sane and consensual bondage this is the world of fantasy where the actors never get STD’s or pregnant or have to use rubbers or get arrested doing things that simply couldn’t happen outside a TV show or a work of fiction.


{“Get a divorce and seek medical help. Exposing someone to the possibility of STD's should be a criminal act. After all the men have no clue just what type of tramp your wife is. God and her doctor only know what she is carrying. Aside from that this was "really erotic" NOT!!!! “}

This one my REAL world wife responded too:
This is Domwoolf's wife. He keeps telling you that this is a work of FICTION and obviously you are not listening. <snap> <crack> All his work that he is writing is "FICTION", I love this man very much and he would never do anything like that to me for the most part. He loves to tie me up and use the whip on me (mmmmm I love that part), he also uses canes, but he never puts cigs out on me or hang me upside down, no bugs or spiders. Nothing that would harm me or if I don't want it. Always safe, sane & consensual. I only have him, no one else, and the same for him. He keeps me safe and loves me. Rest assured we are truly happy after 25 years of being together. Ladylion23

{“I'm not quite sure what I expected but this wasn't it. I get that Carol is your pet, I get that you want her to do these things. What I don't get is that she loves you for it, apparently. But then I don't really understand BDSM so if you both enjoy this sort of thing then have at it.”}

Again Carol and Rick and Donna and Heather and the rest of my cast of characters exist only in the electronic media of the written word.


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{“sick sick sick sick sick sick sick sick sick what kind of person would do that !??????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!”}

{“I thought I'd seen the worst in abuse after the donkey show in Havana in l955, and the two dog shows I witnessed in Asia. BUT, you, my sick friend, are the first human to make me sick to my stomach! My only wish would be to have you at my disposal for a couple of months, so as to be able to introduce you to JUST the pain you describe, inflicting. You should be ashamed to call yourself a human being, I know I'm ashamed of you!”}


{“I can tell you are a cruel man. I cannot tell you if I would read another installment of this story or not.”}


Granted that some of my stories get warning labels even on the supposedly hard core sex and sadism sites, I still get amazed at the visceral responses I get.


I suppose I shall have to include a disclaimer on my works from now on.

Disclaimer:
What I write is fiction/fantasy/fairy tales for adults. None of my characters are real, no one was injured during the production of my stories and just like on T.V., they all get up when the scene is over, have a beer, remove the makeup and go home, ready to return in the next chapter, all the boo boos healed.


Finally some comments in the (Some folks just don’t get it department).

{“When you switched from the vampire to the victim, it gave a bit of a mental whiplash, as you didn't bother to tell us you were changing point of reference.”}

Which was the point I was trying and I guess failing to make that vamp and victim share a lot of the same thoughts and world views.


(Spelling?
06/24/08 By: Anonymous in USA
It's spelled I-N-T-E-R-L-U-D-E. )


Some folks will never get it.
lewd
adjective
1. showing, or intended to excite, lust or sexual desire, esp. in an offensive way; lascivious.

inter•lude
noun
1. a short, humorous play formerly presented between the parts of a miracle play or morality play
a. anything that fills time between two events
b. intervening time or, rarely, space.

Interlewd
A play on words intended to combine both definitions.

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Old 03-22-2009, 12:17 PM   #46
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Favourite?

You spelled it just like that and they all jumped in to either congratulate themselves or further substantiate their excellent disrespect?

No one noticed the joke? (Please tell me you mispewled it on purpose to be funney. Cuz that IS funny! If you didn’t? Then it’s not at all funny. It’s scary, instead.)

Huh? Favourite? That's not a misspelling, that's how it's spelt. I understand that there are differences in American English spelling and regular English spelling, but that doesn't mean that one of them is wrong. On an international website like this then readers should expect to see either.

This goes back to what I was saying earlier about some readers complaining about my spelling as I use "mum" (the English variant) rather than "mom" (its American equivalent). For example, one comment said this:

Get things correct as the international dictionary uses these:

mum = remain quiet/silent

mummy = dead body for science study


Now, I don't know what the "international dictionary" is, but I highly doubt that this would be all it says if it is even vaguely "international". I can tell you that dictionary.com, the dictionary google uses, would say:

"mum – noun (Chiefly British) = mother.

mummy – noun, plural -mies. (Chiefly British) = mother."

Obviously, I'm not saying "mom" is the wrong spelling, I don't mind either in stuff that I read but I'm always going to spell how I was taught in school. If I try to adopt Americanisms they will end up coming out some times and not others, which will just be confusing for everyone.

Incidentally, dictionary.com also says "favourite" and "favorite" are both the regular spellings for that word.

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Favourite?

You spelled it just like that and they all jumped in to either congratulate themselves or further substantiate their excellent disrespect?

No one noticed the joke? (Please tell me you mispewled it on purpose to be funney. Cuz that IS funny! If you didn’t? Then it’s not at all funny. It’s scary, instead.)
Are you commenting on feedback you've gotten or are you commenting on the British English spelling of the word 'favourite'? Obviously this thread was posted by one of the many non-US writers and they are spelling it correctly.

Just in case that's what you meant.

Oops! Just realized britneyfan answered this and much better, too!

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Favorite feedback is when people let me know how much they enjoyed my story, and that they are very much so looking forward to the next chapter or the next story. They give me their email and tell me to email them when a new one's out. Such flattery.

Worst=when people are Anonyomous...and leave me comments that are creepy. Or when they give me their number and tell me to call. Without any comments on the story.
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Old 03-24-2009, 10:53 AM   #49
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LMAO at some of these comments...particularly the LW category ones.

I've held off posting anything there but just submitted my first...and yes, I made sure my flame-retardant gear is on and ready to see what it brings on, LOL. Loving Wives was the perfect place for the story, but feel it won't get the votes or comments it probably deserves, hehehe...but as has been mentioned, we write mostly for ourselves, and willing to share that with others, whether they enjoy it or not.


My personal favorite was the very first story I posted. It's amazing people on an EROTIC FICTION site take things to be as real as they are.. I even made the attempt to state this was all fantasy and got flamed for that. The first two postings lead to it so I've included them...
her finance NEEDS to drop this slut like a hot potato. She will be disease infested in no time and has in all likelyhood been screwing any and all at the college. She is pure trash, went dressed as trash to babysit, got drunk before going to babysit, and now lets teenagers bang her bare. Get real she will make lots of money as a whore. Her family already rented her out to the banker for his son and friend to use her. Dont need a second part to know where she is going!
My reply:
Obviously in today's world I would not condone unprotected sex with multiple partners. That being said, as these are works of fiction (gasp) there is some latitude where one can live out one's fantasies without the threat of disease, remorse, or even harm...and such is this story. The narrator/boyfriend enjoys seeing his fiance's needs satisfied...to his own enjoyment. The though of "cheating" on him is not even something he contemplates as he's comfortable with his and her feelings for each other...
And then the perfect reply from him:
the trick in fiction is to do it in such a way that it is really believable ---- from plot to characterization --- isn't it? of course, we KNOW "it is only a story"; that has never been argued by anyone (whether you authors realize it or not); our debates, ranting, criticisms, praises, what-not really are about whether the story is "good" or "bad".

"a good story" is one in which IN FICTION, in the mind of BOTH writer and reader, plots and characterization, HOWEVER FANTASTICAL THEY MAY BE!!!, come to, SOME HOW, resemble REALITY so much that whether the readers like them or not they start some heated DISCUSSIONS.

a "bad story" is one in which, EVEN IF YOU SAID YOU USED "real people [I just changed the names to protect the innocent," etc. ad nauseam], the readers still think it is nothing but horseshit, because the characters have, say, sex with all kinds of men/women, as they meet --- like, say, gays used to do in the 1970's and 1980's --- and STILL NO REPURCUSSIONS of any kind, either in marital discourse ("my husband loves to eat me afterwar! gosh, I was so surprised") or in terms of getting loads of highly vicious or even DEADLY germs, bacteria, and viruses... a "good story", then, usually gets the writer praises, both for his/her literary imagination (work) and as a writer (person).

a "bad story" (by which we readers usually take it as either an "insult" to our intelligence, decency, or a "waste of our time [as well as the author's time]" OR, oddly, an insult to CHARACTERS which readers have come to identify with... a condition which would normally indicate the author has achieved a certain levele of believability and yet has destroyed it maliciously? unwittingly?), ON THE OTHER HAND, also gets the author a real piece of the readers mind.

saying things like, "Well, come on folks, this is only a FICTION.... waht's the big fuss about?" misses the point; actually YOU THE AUTHOR are doing yourself a diservice to NEGATE your own creativity like that!
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LMAO at some of these comments...particularly the LW category ones.

My personal favorite was the very first story I posted. It's amazing people on an EROTIC FICTION site take things to be as real as they are.. I even made the attempt to state this was all fantasy and got flamed for that. The first two postings lead to it so I've included them...
her finance NEEDS to drop this slut like a hot potato. She will be disease infested in no time and has in all likelyhood been screwing any and all at the college. She is pure trash, went dressed as trash to babysit, got drunk before going to babysit, and now lets teenagers bang her bare. Get real she will make lots of money as a whore. Her family already rented her out to the banker for his son and friend to use her. Dont need a second part to know where she is going!
My reply:
Obviously in today's world I would not condone unprotected sex with multiple partners. That being said, as these are works of fiction (gasp) there is some latitude where one can live out one's fantasies without the threat of disease, remorse, or even harm...and such is this story. The narrator/boyfriend enjoys seeing his fiance's needs satisfied...to his own enjoyment. The though of "cheating" on him is not even something he contemplates as he's comfortable with his and her feelings for each other...
And then the perfect reply from him:


a "bad story" (by which we readers usually take it as either an "insult" to our intelligence, decency, or a "waste of our time [as well as the author's time]" OR, oddly, an insult to CHARACTERS which readers have come to identify with... a condition which would normally indicate the author has achieved a certain levele of believability and yet has destroyed it maliciously? unwittingly?), ON THE OTHER HAND, also gets the author a real piece of the readers mind.

saying things like, "Well, come on folks, this is only a FICTION.... waht's the big fuss about?" misses the point; actually YOU THE AUTHOR are doing yourself a diservice to NEGATE your own creativity like that![/i][/indent]
Your comments provoked some thoughts. First off, even though I'm fully conscious of the fact that I'm reading fiction, I too, join in the fun commenting with some series stories, adding my opinion of their characters, etc., much like everyone does on a tv show. It's a compliment to the writer that the readers are completely sucked into the story and characters. However, a line is crossed when a reader so loses grip on reality to the point that they blame a writer for a well-crafted nasty character.

On the other side of it, it blows my mind that a free reader sits in judgment on how well or consistantly a writer treats his characters. "... insult to characters which readers have come to identify with ..." Sometimes I don't think they realize, especially if you are doing a half decent job of it, that most of us are amateur writers, beginners even. I was accused of doing this very thing. All I could go was, "Ut-oh!" But then again, I got some of my very best, involved feedback from that same chapter, other readers loved how I did the unexpected and brought tension and emotion to the story. Go figure!

It's all great fun, huh? When it's not, it's time to stop.
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