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Home sweet home, I knocked the door. It is opened my little sister and she just squealed and hugged me, ah it's just heavenly the warmness, the love, the sweet scent you really need to feel it know it.
I don't even remember exactly what she did but suddenly I was a vampire.
I went to meet my friends in town had a little party but wait, what am I talking about this isn't my personal diary, its erotica .To the point - My sister.
"So you are a virgin?" Oops did I go too far.
"Is that a question to ask your sister, but yes I am a virgin."
That also helps. I had to google the author and find it myself.
I'm terribly inadept at navigating this website. Such is my crux.
I couldn't finish it. The tense change and errors were distracting.
How did it get past the submission editor? I found them to be real grammar Nazis and had all my stories rejected until I reworked the grammar.
Pick up a vampire book and see how the author uses commas, quotation marks and such.
Too much 'thoughts going through your head' is confusing. How you think and how you speak and read or at least should speak and read are different.
Small descriptions set scenes. Readers must be able to visualize your scenes not just imagine listening to a conversation in your head or with another.
If your paragraphs and grammar does not 'look' like a pros, you're in trouble. You can get away with being less descriptive and even have a poor plot, if it is written well grammatically.