Two dudes, one pronoun. Issue

[OddLove]

I appreciate the all the advice here. I'm reworking/re-wording/rearranging some stuff to avoid potential confusion. It seems there's no simple guidelines for it, which I kind of suspected but this confirms. Outside of grammar and spelling, it's just creative writing. I just gotta keep practicing on breaking out of my typical formulaic writing and some of examples people gave here by rephrasing everything entirely is helpful.

As far as switching to first person, it's definitely not my preferred way of writing or reading. But adding 'me' into the story would fix most of the problems I'm working through. I might try writing a first person some day just to experiment with it. It would for sure be a challenge considering I almost exclusively read third person stories.

 

[OddLove]

I struggled with this in my new lesbian romance story (still pending since Friday), I don't think I solved it perfectly either, but I think I employed all of the suggestions made here at different points, other than switching to 1st Person.

I also did a lot of work to differentiate the two women from each other. One was small and petite (don't say a word, Emily), one was tall big and muscular. One was a pale blonde white girl, the other was a darker skinned, black haired Pacific Islander. One was a timid librarian, one was a confident custom parts fabricator. One cursed like a sailor, one was kind of Mormon-coded

Those differences were helpful in making some scenes less awkward, I hope!

That's really helpful, I actually need to work on that more, it could make narration and dialog much smoother. Having strong personality and/or physical traits could be used to solve so much of the 'he and he' type problems I'm trying to work through. This advice along with the rest makes me wanna go start from the beginning lol, do it gooder.

 

[getnakedgoswimming]

My most recent story features a non-binary character. I had an anonymous comment complaining that the "theys" made it hard to differentiate, so as an experiment I tried to go back and rewrite it as two women. That just made it worse! "She" and "she" is way more difficult than "she" and "they".

I'm working on a story for the summer lovin' contest that features mm and ff scenes, and as others have mentioned I found strategically using names has helped a lot.

 

[EmilyMiller]

One was small and petite (don't say a word, Emily)

Ample- oops that’s a word