interracial story idea ( tell me if its worth it)

[nsinyu]

hey guys,
am new on literotica , big on bw/wm stories
but a bit tired of how monotone the stories r becoming
so i came up with something different, tell me if its worth pursuing
a black girl n a white guy meet on an online chat site, he wants to get off n she just whats to talk
, they clash, he apologizes , start talking and then they exchange emails.
the main girl has self esteem issues because of her weight n has never had a bf , its only with the main guy that she is able to open up n be herself. he likes her humor n soon a year passes of them emailing back n forth
eventually he asked of a pic of her , n she panics like hell coz she's convinced if he sees her he'll stop talking to her. so she sends a pic n he doesnt reply for 2 days. she's convinced that he's probably decided to stop talking to her n she torn between deleting his emails n blockin him or emailing him again
this is just what i had planned for chapter 1
am still fillin in the details but i think its a quite interesting , its supposed to be a long distance friendship, not sure where he's from yet but am thinking the UK, she's african(like me)
no ideas on a title yet either
thnx
if u have anything u think cud make it better
suggestions r welcome

 

[Sean Renaud]

It's not a bad story the biggest problem is that it's long and people don't tend to like long. (Though if they do you have em for life).

 

[Euphony]

Man, how hard is it to type out the words in full?

Idea is fine but he switched gears way too fast. Hes hot to get it on then willing to wait out a courtship/possible long distance relationship?

 

[2981notrohrm]

It sounds like it could work; it's going to take a lot of editing and cleaning up the story. Also, more details on her insecurity - is she, by chance, a heavier girl? Can the timeline be altered a bit? Can there be sexual tension developed earlier on? If there's going to be no sex for most of a long story, there needs to be some kind of sexual spark there or it will never work.

By all means, try developing it a bit and see where it goes.

 

[rdl0330]

Hi. I am also new to the site. How about concentrating on the first part of your story (a black girl n a white guy meet on an online chat site). Maybe something like a Great Gatsby theme. Maybe no direct contact; no pictures. You will need to "build" up the tension... Good luck. Just a thought since I am new here, If you want to collaborate let me know

 

[loquere]

It's not a bad story the biggest problem is that it's long and people don't tend to like long. (Though if they do you have em for life).

I disagree, you just write shorter stories, Sean. Still great stories, better than I ever will.

-If you keep it interesting it'll be fine. Readers on here want , at minimum 2 lit pages, 6000 words.

 

[photobuff56]

I think it will work but agree keep it short. I think the should do the email picture thing too but not a year later, maybe 2 months 3 tops.