time for me to whine

[MatthewVett]

I get plenty of feedback on plot, but nobody seems to notice when I try to inject humor into my dialogue.

example: A woman bartender confronts a heartbreaker to throw her out of the bar: "Get your money-grubbing ass out of my bar, little missy. I reserve the right to deny service to drunks and whores, and you ain't bought a single drink yet, so guess what that makes you? Now GIT!"

I cracked up when I wrote that, and it still makes me smile. I hope my readers enjoy it, even if they don't say so...

I feel like comments about specific lines like that are pretty rare in general, to be honest.

 

[glynndah]

I have two humorous stories that have been very well received and bits of humour in several others. No one's complained yet.

Of course, that probably just means they're not reading mine.

 

[legerdemer]

I hardly get any feedback.

*puts violins away*

I'll join you in a duet...

Very few writers actually make me lol. Janet Evanovich, Molly Watson, Mike Ripley (Angel series), and Carl Hiaasen are the only four I can recall off the top of my head.

I find David Lodge hilarious. Sometimes LOL funny.

 

[SamScribble]

I find David Lodge hilarious. Sometimes LOL funny.

David Lodge? Yes.

And the poetry of Roger McGough is generally good for a serious smile.

 

[8letters]

I get plenty of feedback on plot, but nobody seems to notice when I try to inject humor into my dialogue.

example: A woman bartender confronts a heartbreaker to throw her out of the bar: "Get your money-grubbing ass out of my bar, little missy. I reserve the right to deny service to drunks and whores, and you ain't bought a single drink yet, so guess what that makes you? Now GIT!"

I cracked up when I wrote that, and it still makes me smile. I hope my readers enjoy it, even if they don't say so...

The vast majority of the comments I have received are about the story in general. If I have a character that people dislike, I'll get comments about him/her. Then there are the comments were the person can't resist pointing out the one misspell in a five page story

The one story that I meant to be humorous (My Daughter Interrupts My Work) received by far the worst reception of any of my stories.

 

[SikFuk]

....The one story that I meant to be humorous (My Daughter Interrupts My Work) received by far the worst reception of any of my stories.

I see why this story didn't do well. It's lighthearted and interesting, with a surprise ending. See what you get for putting some thought into your work?

 

[ScouriesWorld]

here's another of jims stories that has produced some nice comments...

Gym Member Ship

https://www.literotica.com/s/gym-member-ship

Swimeric

Great, just great; love the humor.

Excellent writing again

Your humour and writing style makes your stories so readable. I am plucking up courage to submit my efforts and finding your submissions today are proving an inspiration.

Water Doesn't Put Their Fire Out!!!

Every time I read this story, it becomes more and more sexy and fun! You can't help but find yourself reading it with a smile on your entire face! The next time I go to a gym, I think I will ask for the "Gold Triple X Membership" just to see if the receptionist recognises the reference to this story and "Blushes!"

...........All Smiles.........

....I have to say ,..i was all smiles reading this story...again i say,...you sure do have a talent that puts the reader right ..there.....very good reading...thank you again...

Sexy with humor.

I laughed out loud with this story! When he pulled down his pants for their race, I died laughing. The smartass comments on both sides, along with the chemistry were so entertaining. And I love seductions on the massage table. I didn't want the story to end. WRITE SOME MORE!!!​

 

[TxRad]

Anyone want to guess how many of these glowing comments Jimbo wrote himself?

 

[Handley_Page]

I have two humorous stories that have been very well received and bits of humour in several others. No one's complained yet.

Of course, that probably just means they're not reading mine.

Well, some of us have.
And roared with laughter.

My favourite humour is probably Terry Pratchett.
I was laughing so much reading the 'Colour of Magic' that my wife put me in the garden !

 

[TxRad]

I wonder if "Sock Love" is still posted here. One of the funnest things I've ever read here at Lit.

 

[ishtat]

I get plenty of feedback on plot, but nobody seems to notice when I try to inject humor into my dialogue.

example: A woman bartender confronts a heartbreaker to throw her out of the bar: "Get your money-grubbing ass out of my bar, little missy. I reserve the right to deny service to drunks and whores, and you ain't bought a single drink yet, so guess what that makes you? Now GIT!"

I cracked up when I wrote that, and it still makes me smile. I hope my readers enjoy it, even if they don't say so...

Laughing at people (characters) is rarely funny, Laughing with them or at situations can be: This isn't remotely funny to me - it seems loud, boorish, obvious and crude. But others might think it's hilarious.

 

[Handley_Page]

Laughing at people (characters) is rarely funny, Laughing with them or at situations can be: This isn't remotely funny to me - it seems loud, boorish, obvious and crude. But others might think it's hilarious.

I didn't, either