BMF's Urban Hang Suite

[JessiePi]

Sweet! Good for you!

Yup... How you feelin?

 

[BlackManFux]

Yup... How you feelin?

I'm good. It's been a quiet night. Office party, then just chillin.

 

[JessiePi]

I'm good. It's been a quiet night. Office party, then just chillin.

Good, I'm glad to see this thread took off insanely fast.... Knew it would though

 

[BlackManFux]

Good, I'm glad to see this thread took off insanely fast.... Knew it would though

I'm really surprised. I'm glad though. Writing is therapy. I just want folks to hang out and read or share.

 

[JessiePi]

I'm really surprised. I'm glad though. Writing is therapy. I just want folks to hang out and read or share.

It really does feel awesome to get something down.... I'm insanely nervous about posting it, and I have no idea how to punctuate it or break up the lines! But being on Lit, and reading your stuff most importantly, has given me the urge to just do it.

 

[BlackManFux]

It really does feel awesome to get something down.... I'm insanely nervous about posting it, and I have no idea how to punctuate it or break up the lines! But being on Lit, and reading your stuff most importantly, has given me the urge to just do it.

It's a rush. I mean, I write my poems the way I perform them. Break your lines the way it feels right to you. When it feels right to you, then it is right.

 

[JessiePi]

Ok, **deep breath**--- My first attempt at writing




As I stand here before you
a thousand thoughts flood my mind

As your eyes traverse my skin
questions flash in my brain like lightening in a dark sky

Do you see the goosebumps up and down my arms
the tiny hairs on the back of my neck, raised at attention

Do you realize my stomach is tied in knots
my thoughts too explicit to mention

My palms sweaty with nervousness
can you hear my heart pounding in my chest

see my body rise and fall
as I struggle to control each breath

Do you know that your touch
sears my skin like hot wax

as you trace your finger down my spine
and I gasp

Can't you see that the sound of your voice
close to my ear

can make my knees weak
and my stress disappear

Do you see my traitorous cheeks redden
giving away my self consciousness and insecurity

Do you notice my bottom lip
marked by the incessant nibbling of immaturity

Can you feel my body trembling
shivering regardless of the heat coursing through me

How can I make you believe
that you do this to me

 

[BlackManFux]

Ok, **deep breath**--- My first attempt at writing




As I stand here before you
a thousand thoughts flood my mind

As your eyes traverse my skin
questions flash in my brain like lightening in a dark sky

Do you see the goosebumps up and down my arms
the tiny hairs on the back of my neck, raised at attention

Do you realize my stomach is tied in knots
my thoughts too explicit to mention

My palms sweaty with nervousness
can you hear my heart pounding in my chest

see my body rise and fall
as I struggle to control each breath

Do you know that your touch
sears my skin like hot wax

as you trace your finger down my spine
and I gasp

Can't you see that the sound of your voice
close to my ear

can make my knees weak
and my stress disappear

Do you see my traitorous cheeks redden
giving away my self consciousness and insecurity

Do you notice my bottom lip
marked by the incessant nibbling of immaturity

Can you feel my body trembling
shivering regardless of the heat coursing through me

How can I make you believe
that you do this to me

ok, Jess....here's my critique.....this is damn good!!! I like it a lot!

 

[BlackManFux]

BTW, Hubs is a lucky man, that he inspired this kind of beautiful expression.

 

[Corbal]

Big smiles*


Go Jessi! You have to start somewhere, love.....and your start is a step ahead.....well done.

Ok, **deep breath**--- My first attempt at writing




As I stand here before you
a thousand thoughts flood my mind

As your eyes traverse my skin
questions flash in my brain like lightening in a dark sky

Do you see the goosebumps up and down my arms
the tiny hairs on the back of my neck, raised at attention

Do you realize my stomach is tied in knots
my thoughts too explicit to mention

My palms sweaty with nervousness
can you hear my heart pounding in my chest

see my body rise and fall
as I struggle to control each breath

Do you know that your touch
sears my skin like hot wax

as you trace your finger down my spine
and I gasp

Can't you see that the sound of your voice
close to my ear

can make my knees weak
and my stress disappear

Do you see my traitorous cheeks redden
giving away my self consciousness and insecurity

Do you notice my bottom lip
marked by the incessant nibbling of immaturity

Can you feel my body trembling
shivering regardless of the heat coursing through me

How can I make you believe
that you do this to me

 

[Corbal]

A blurb.......enjoy!

"...........Can you see that?"


The soft sway of my thighs as I stalk towards you.....
Quick glints of electric green flicker within the depths of my eyes.....

"...........Can you feel that?"


Your fingertips ghost over the silk of my spine......
My sweet pouty lips graze the flesh of your shoulder forcing goosebumps to rise, skin deep.....

"............Can you taste it?


The slick wet heat from my tongue as it slides over yours.....
Sweat beads surface on the swell of my breasts as you feast upon me.....

"..........Touch me"


My heart beat thumps at a quickened pace......
The rise and fall of my chest bring me close......then take me away....

.........Inhale.............

...............Exhale.......


"............Take Me."


Make Me Yours......
To You I Yield......


My Body......it is Your Flesh

My Mind.....You ignite its Fire

My Soul....it Shines for You........



"

 

[BlackManFux]

A blurb.......enjoy!

"...........Can you see that?"


The soft sway of my thighs as I stalk towards you.....
Quick glints of electric green flicker within the depths of my eyes.....

"...........Can you feel that?"


Your fingertips ghost over the silk of my spine......
My sweet pouty lips graze the flesh of your shoulder forcing goosebumps to rise, skin deep.....

"............Can you taste it?


The slick wet heat from my tongue as it slides over yours.....
Sweat beads surface on the swell of my breasts as you feast upon me.....

"..........Touch me"


My heart beat thumps at a quickened pace......
The rise and fall of my chest bring me close......then take me away....

.........Inhale.............

...............Exhale.......


"............Take Me."


Make Me Yours......
To You I Yield......


My Body......it is Your Flesh

My Mind.....You ignite its Fire

My Soul....it Shines for You........



"

wow. I can't remember ever wanting my name to be "You" more than now!

 

[Corbal]

A scribble for Mr.Blade

My sweet Queen........

*serious face*

Muscular thighs wrapped in silk stockings......Mmmmm, sublime....

Black panties hug the curves of your sweet ass....can you feel my hot tongue?

Breaths of fire seep into heavy layers of man flesh, teasing my teeth....

A seductive laugh echos whilst heavy green eyes cloud your mind......

Slowly.....fingertips trail, dip, slide and slip.......C'mon kitten, you know you feel it.......

Curling my fingers...elastic stretches....where it stops? Only I know.......

Feel a southern drawl in the depths of your soul......

......tell me sugar, how long can you go?

 

[ZipBlockBloodie]

I like this thread I will be posting some of my poems ASAP.

 

[BlackManFux]

I like this thread I will be posting some of my poems ASAP.

Cool brand. Welcome to the Suite!

 

[JessiePi]

ok, Jess....here's my critique.....this is damn good!!! I like it a lot!

Lol It seems like a nursery rhyme amongst all the talent here, but I like it...

Big smiles*
Go Jessi! You have to start somewhere, love.....and your start is a step ahead.....well done.

Thanks C!!! This is the first I'm seeing of your writing... I never knew!!! Damn girl, you never cease to amaze!!!

 

[Corbal]

Lol It seems like a nursery rhyme amongst all the talent here, but I like it...


Thanks C!!! This is the first I'm seeing of your writing... I never knew!!! Damn girl, you never cease to amaze!!!

These are iPhone scribbles.....my actual stories...well, I may never post them. Thanks though babe...

 

[BlackManFux]

Lol It seems like a nursery rhyme amongst all the talent here, but I like it...


Thanks C!!! This is the first I'm seeing of your writing... I never knew!!! Damn girl, you never cease to amaze!!!

Don't sell yourself short. Keep it up. You've got promise.

 

[blade_rocknut]

Ok, **deep breath**--- My first attempt at writing




As I stand here before you
a thousand thoughts flood my mind

As your eyes traverse my skin
questions flash in my brain like lightening in a dark sky

Do you see the goosebumps up and down my arms
the tiny hairs on the back of my neck, raised at attention

Do you realize my stomach is tied in knots
my thoughts too explicit to mention

My palms sweaty with nervousness
can you hear my heart pounding in my chest

see my body rise and fall
as I struggle to control each breath

Do you know that your touch
sears my skin like hot wax

as you trace your finger down my spine
and I gasp

Can't you see that the sound of your voice
close to my ear

can make my knees weak
and my stress disappear

Do you see my traitorous cheeks redden
giving away my self consciousness and insecurity

Do you notice my bottom lip
marked by the incessant nibbling of immaturity

Can you feel my body trembling
shivering regardless of the heat coursing through me

How can I make you believe
that you do this to me

On second thought; maybe I won't post one here.....It'll never live up to this benchmark! Wow, Jessie! And Corbal's.....I'm blown away....I would never have expected it from her! I don't mean that badly; It's just that- I suppose my own nonchalant take on poetry has skewed my perception of others'......

 

[JessiePi]

On second thought; maybe I won't post one here.....It'll never live up to this benchmark! Wow, Jessie! And Corbal's.....I'm blown away....I would never have expected it from her! I don't mean that badly; It's just that- I suppose my own nonchalant take on poetry has skewed my perception of others'......

Thanks Blade, really means a lot!!! And regardless of your "take" on poetry, you should post!!! Lol at least you'll make me feel like I'm not the only amateur around here!!!

 

[Jinxi Minxi]

Greetings from North of England....good afternoon BMF...have a nice day

 

[BlackManFux]

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On second thought; maybe I won't post one here.....It'll never live up to this benchmark! Wow, Jessie! And Corbal's.....I'm blown away....I would never have expected it from her! I don't mean that badly; It's just that- I suppose my own nonchalant take on poetry has skewed my perception of others'......

We're all amateurs. Come on Blade. Rock the pen, and then rock the mic!

 

[BlackManFux]

Greetings from North of England....good afternoon BMF...have a nice day

Hey BB! Good morning, sweetness.

 

[BlackManFux]

Thanks Blade, really means a lot!!! And regardless of your "take" on poetry, you should post!!! Lol at least you'll make me feel like I'm not the only amateur around here!!!

Dude, you're awesome! I'm so proud of you for posting, you just don't know!

 

[BlackManFux]

Good Morning, Poets and Loungers!!!

Here's my morning contribution.

You, its like you
Just jumped from paper and pen
From dreamscapes and notations
It's like you just appeared when the fog lifted..
You've swiftly misted my yesterday,
With everyday spent.
I think life meant for our paths to cross.
Most things are a toss up, but while surities
Are mostly as confused as insecurities
Let it be known that I'm pleased to be
Tickled pink to be,
Here with you.

You, its like you
Just jumped from nothingness
Materialized between the filtering eyes
Of a guy who lived between his little rhymes.
Not lonely, nor alone...
But you, you've just been you:
And helped me see that something here
Is something that rings true.
The best part, you see it too.

You, just you...
Phenomenal you.
Tickled every nerve in my mentals.
Stimulates my sexy with your sultry,
Constantly coercing me and prodding intellectually
To peer into a woman quite interesting.

You're just you.
For me, that will do.
You're just you.