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I was reading the Story Ideas forum here and started reading a thread that had caught my eye. After I had read it, I had the idea for this story.
Important posts in that thread:
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I just read a decent story on another site in which a divorced mom discovers her son masturbating into a strange pair of panties. They're not hers; he just came home from a weekend at Dad's house. They're step-mom's.
He stole them; Stepmom is not having inappropriate relations with the young man. Nevertheless, Mom decides that SHE should be the object of his lust, not "that other woman who stole her husband". So she seduces him, using her own panties at first.
I would have liked the story a little better if the lust and urge to seduce had originated in the son. In the story I'm imagining, the young man plays the women off against each other. Neither one wants him jerking in their undies, but neither do they want him jerking in HERS! He gets one after the other to step up their game incrementally until he's bagged BOTH of them - and they both know it.
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I like it! If I were to write it (which I'm not) I would make the step-mom a younger, much hotter "trophy wife" type of woman*. That is her advantage. The biological mother's advantage is that she raised him and knows him better. That should make for a good competition.
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In addition to the possibility of step mom being a trophy wife, the added incentive that step mom might want to have her own children and dad (because of age, work stress, etc) is having trouble delivering in that department. And maybe mom herself had secretly longed to have more children after her boy (but will never willingly admit it to her son).
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I missed an obvious twist. While the seductions will escalate past panty whacking, he starts the ball rolling with a pair he bought for himself. When one mom or the other first catches him pulling his pud, she asks where they came from. He refuses to answer. She guesses "the other woman", he sees his opening, and he takes it from there. He tricks one mom after the other into thinking the other is giving him sexual favors until they're both screwing him senseless just to best "that other whore".
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From me: Sounds a little like Two Pregnant Moms - and Sis?
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The story that the OP referenced:
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/incest/winning-over-my-son.aspx
I didn’t read it until I had the story mostly worked out.
What I enjoy most about writing incest stories is figuring out the little steps that lead to family members having sex. I prefer that at the beginning, the family members aren’t sexually attracted to each other but that sexual attraction develops over time in the story.
“Two Pregnant Moms - and Sis?” by scouries is a story I read occasionally. I love the premise, but it’s so implausible. He’s eighteen but acts like he’s in his late 20’s. No worries about college or thoughts of high school friends. He’s such a studmuffin that all women are putty in his hands. At her wedding, the stepmom presses her mound against the son as they dance. And then at last dance at the wedding, the son and his sister rub their bodies against each other the whole time. Typical wedding stuff. That night, he sleeps naked with his mom and sister. Typical family bonding. And that was page one. He has a smoking hot, 21-year-old bisexual stripper girlfriend that sounds like every guy’s fantasy. Why would the son want his mom, stepmom and sister instead of her? He just does. And they all have the hots for him. And he winds up knocking them all up and at the end, all three women are living with him happily as a harem.
So for my version, no sister and he’s not initially sexually attracted to the mom or the stepmom. He hopefully acts like an eighteen-year-old and the mom and stepmom hopefully act as adults. Things go much, much slower in my version. In my version, the biggest reason the son is able to seduce the stepmom is that his dad is cheating on her.
As I wrote the story, I sent scenes to my friend TM. He’d reply back with comments. At one point, we made a list of things he wished were in the story:
1. Bryson knocks up both his Mom and Allison
2. Bryson takes Mom on a date
3. Mom pinches her nipples as she plays with her boobs
4. Allison wear something sexy around the house
5. Mom's crop top gets soaked on the flume ride at the amusement park.
6. After Bryson takes his mom on a date, she starts asking questions about what kinds of things he did with his high school girlfriends....and then dropping hints that he should start doing some of those things with her.
7. Both Mom and Allison cook for Bryson in their respective kitchens while wearing revealing mom-themed outfits, wait on him hand-and-foot during the the meal....and then fuck him senseless in the kitchen afterwards.
8. Once the mom is pregnant, she starts redecorating the nursery in their house, and asks Bryson to help her paint and get things ready for the baby (put the crib together, etc).
#1 was baked into the story premise. The idea for the date with Allison came from #2. I was planning on writing the “frank discussion” scene, but I added the mom playing with her nipples because of #3. #4, #5 and #6 didn’t work in this story (maybe another time). The final sex scene came from #7. #8 became Bryson seducing Allison in the nursery.
Later on, TM shared with me a video of Abigail Ratchford washing a car. That became the “Mom helps wash the car” scene.
I took two breaks from writing this story. I started writing in on 9/2/19. The first was on 9/13/19 after I wrote the scene where Bryson returns home after the revenge fuck with Allison. I had hit around 20k words with that scene. I had written a lot of words very quickly and was burnt out. Also, I was finding the upcoming mom-son blow job scene challenging. I wanted the first blow job scene to be a long one, long enough for someone reading it to get off. I wasn’t picturing how to do it. I think I was also not excited about writing a mom-son blow job scene. I pushed “My Mom Competes” aside. I published “The Prodigal Sister” on 2/24/20.
Eventually I picked “My Mom Competes” back up. I read a bunch of stories looking for a long blow job scene to use as inspiration, and I couldn’t find any. I really had to work to stretch out that scene. On 6/26/20, I had written to the point were Mom had just orgasmed and Bryson was about to fuck her for the first time. I was unexcited about writing my first mom-son sex scene. I put it off and put it off, finally moving on to writing another story. I published “Carpooling With My Sister” on 9/27/20. I started “My Sister The Flirter”, wrote most of it by 10/26/20, the election happened, and I lost interest in writing for months.
On 2/10, the commenter lilshymynx emailed me. We talked about my stories, and I got excited about writing again. On 2/23, I opened “Family Fun” by Eros and used the first mom-son fuck in that story as a guide to write my mom-son fuck. From that point, I worked on “My Mom Competes” regularly, finishing the first draft on 3/19. I used two porn videos for inspiration for the sex scene in the kitchen - this one for when Mom is on the counter and this one for when Mom is on the table.
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I sent the story out to my beta-readers on 4/6. I had a new beta-reader, Harold1621T, and he did an amazing job of finding over 150 little mistakes in the story. Hopefully, this story will be almost error-free (they’re never error-free). Some major changes based on the feedback I got:
* I cut a long scene where Bryson almost connects with a girl at the mall down to a paragraph. The scene didn’t advance the story. It’s here
* The grandmother in the story is there so Bryson will be living several hours away from his dad. I didn’t put much thought into her as she wasn’t important to the story. It came across as Bryson and the mom cared nothing for her and were counting the days until she died and they inherited. I changed that
* I hadn’t specified that Allison and the dad had moved back into the home Bryson had grown up in and how far the two homes were. I changed that
* In the original, Bryson decides to seduce Allison after not having sex for two weeks. It was a very selfish decision on his part. He wants sex, and he’s going to get it. The scene after the drive was Bryson seducing Allison. Another problem was that in the epilogue I had the characters Kat and Julie show up to take care of the kids with no introduction. So I introduced them while having Bryson struggle about whether he should keep doing the right thing. The original version of Bryson’s thoughts while driving to his Dad’s is here
* In the original, the mom has a battery of genetic tests done to verify the baby is healthy. But Vix Giovanni pointed out that the test results would show that the father was closely related to the mom. So I took that out and added about the ultrasound
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Did you notice that the part of the story told from Allison’s point of view has a different paragraph formatting than the rest of the story? There was a thread in the Author’s Hangout forum asking “any way to give indentation at the start of paragraph”? I said it can be done with HTML tags. Several posters refused to believe that it could be done in a story, so I did it for that section. When I read that section, it feels wrong to me in a way I can’t place.
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I changed around how I did the author notes in the story so that the story will end on requesting people to leave in the comments which was their favorite sex scene. I decided to try that to see if it got more comments.
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The story is over 50,000 words, so the length of a novel (40K words is a short novel). Why didn’t I split it up into chapters? To me, the story didn’t lend itself to being split up. It’s a slow-burn story with the first fuck happening about halfway into the story. I think if you are going to go chapters, you want at least four chapters. I didn’t see how I could split the story into four or more relatively similar sized chapters.
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Links for the research I mentioned in the story:
* Putting a pillow under the hips doesn’t work link
* Increased chance of birth defects of a child of closely related parents link
Important posts in that thread:
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I just read a decent story on another site in which a divorced mom discovers her son masturbating into a strange pair of panties. They're not hers; he just came home from a weekend at Dad's house. They're step-mom's.
He stole them; Stepmom is not having inappropriate relations with the young man. Nevertheless, Mom decides that SHE should be the object of his lust, not "that other woman who stole her husband". So she seduces him, using her own panties at first.
I would have liked the story a little better if the lust and urge to seduce had originated in the son. In the story I'm imagining, the young man plays the women off against each other. Neither one wants him jerking in their undies, but neither do they want him jerking in HERS! He gets one after the other to step up their game incrementally until he's bagged BOTH of them - and they both know it.
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I like it! If I were to write it (which I'm not) I would make the step-mom a younger, much hotter "trophy wife" type of woman*. That is her advantage. The biological mother's advantage is that she raised him and knows him better. That should make for a good competition.
++++++++++++++++
In addition to the possibility of step mom being a trophy wife, the added incentive that step mom might want to have her own children and dad (because of age, work stress, etc) is having trouble delivering in that department. And maybe mom herself had secretly longed to have more children after her boy (but will never willingly admit it to her son).
++++++++++++++++
I missed an obvious twist. While the seductions will escalate past panty whacking, he starts the ball rolling with a pair he bought for himself. When one mom or the other first catches him pulling his pud, she asks where they came from. He refuses to answer. She guesses "the other woman", he sees his opening, and he takes it from there. He tricks one mom after the other into thinking the other is giving him sexual favors until they're both screwing him senseless just to best "that other whore".
++++++++++++++++
From me: Sounds a little like Two Pregnant Moms - and Sis?
++++++++++++++++
The story that the OP referenced:
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/incest/winning-over-my-son.aspx
I didn’t read it until I had the story mostly worked out.
What I enjoy most about writing incest stories is figuring out the little steps that lead to family members having sex. I prefer that at the beginning, the family members aren’t sexually attracted to each other but that sexual attraction develops over time in the story.
“Two Pregnant Moms - and Sis?” by scouries is a story I read occasionally. I love the premise, but it’s so implausible. He’s eighteen but acts like he’s in his late 20’s. No worries about college or thoughts of high school friends. He’s such a studmuffin that all women are putty in his hands. At her wedding, the stepmom presses her mound against the son as they dance. And then at last dance at the wedding, the son and his sister rub their bodies against each other the whole time. Typical wedding stuff. That night, he sleeps naked with his mom and sister. Typical family bonding. And that was page one. He has a smoking hot, 21-year-old bisexual stripper girlfriend that sounds like every guy’s fantasy. Why would the son want his mom, stepmom and sister instead of her? He just does. And they all have the hots for him. And he winds up knocking them all up and at the end, all three women are living with him happily as a harem.
So for my version, no sister and he’s not initially sexually attracted to the mom or the stepmom. He hopefully acts like an eighteen-year-old and the mom and stepmom hopefully act as adults. Things go much, much slower in my version. In my version, the biggest reason the son is able to seduce the stepmom is that his dad is cheating on her.
As I wrote the story, I sent scenes to my friend TM. He’d reply back with comments. At one point, we made a list of things he wished were in the story:
1. Bryson knocks up both his Mom and Allison
2. Bryson takes Mom on a date
3. Mom pinches her nipples as she plays with her boobs
4. Allison wear something sexy around the house
5. Mom's crop top gets soaked on the flume ride at the amusement park.
6. After Bryson takes his mom on a date, she starts asking questions about what kinds of things he did with his high school girlfriends....and then dropping hints that he should start doing some of those things with her.
7. Both Mom and Allison cook for Bryson in their respective kitchens while wearing revealing mom-themed outfits, wait on him hand-and-foot during the the meal....and then fuck him senseless in the kitchen afterwards.
8. Once the mom is pregnant, she starts redecorating the nursery in their house, and asks Bryson to help her paint and get things ready for the baby (put the crib together, etc).
#1 was baked into the story premise. The idea for the date with Allison came from #2. I was planning on writing the “frank discussion” scene, but I added the mom playing with her nipples because of #3. #4, #5 and #6 didn’t work in this story (maybe another time). The final sex scene came from #7. #8 became Bryson seducing Allison in the nursery.
Later on, TM shared with me a video of Abigail Ratchford washing a car. That became the “Mom helps wash the car” scene.
I took two breaks from writing this story. I started writing in on 9/2/19. The first was on 9/13/19 after I wrote the scene where Bryson returns home after the revenge fuck with Allison. I had hit around 20k words with that scene. I had written a lot of words very quickly and was burnt out. Also, I was finding the upcoming mom-son blow job scene challenging. I wanted the first blow job scene to be a long one, long enough for someone reading it to get off. I wasn’t picturing how to do it. I think I was also not excited about writing a mom-son blow job scene. I pushed “My Mom Competes” aside. I published “The Prodigal Sister” on 2/24/20.
Eventually I picked “My Mom Competes” back up. I read a bunch of stories looking for a long blow job scene to use as inspiration, and I couldn’t find any. I really had to work to stretch out that scene. On 6/26/20, I had written to the point were Mom had just orgasmed and Bryson was about to fuck her for the first time. I was unexcited about writing my first mom-son sex scene. I put it off and put it off, finally moving on to writing another story. I published “Carpooling With My Sister” on 9/27/20. I started “My Sister The Flirter”, wrote most of it by 10/26/20, the election happened, and I lost interest in writing for months.
On 2/10, the commenter lilshymynx emailed me. We talked about my stories, and I got excited about writing again. On 2/23, I opened “Family Fun” by Eros and used the first mom-son fuck in that story as a guide to write my mom-son fuck. From that point, I worked on “My Mom Competes” regularly, finishing the first draft on 3/19. I used two porn videos for inspiration for the sex scene in the kitchen - this one for when Mom is on the counter and this one for when Mom is on the table.
++++++++++++++++
I sent the story out to my beta-readers on 4/6. I had a new beta-reader, Harold1621T, and he did an amazing job of finding over 150 little mistakes in the story. Hopefully, this story will be almost error-free (they’re never error-free). Some major changes based on the feedback I got:
* I cut a long scene where Bryson almost connects with a girl at the mall down to a paragraph. The scene didn’t advance the story. It’s here
* The grandmother in the story is there so Bryson will be living several hours away from his dad. I didn’t put much thought into her as she wasn’t important to the story. It came across as Bryson and the mom cared nothing for her and were counting the days until she died and they inherited. I changed that
* I hadn’t specified that Allison and the dad had moved back into the home Bryson had grown up in and how far the two homes were. I changed that
* In the original, Bryson decides to seduce Allison after not having sex for two weeks. It was a very selfish decision on his part. He wants sex, and he’s going to get it. The scene after the drive was Bryson seducing Allison. Another problem was that in the epilogue I had the characters Kat and Julie show up to take care of the kids with no introduction. So I introduced them while having Bryson struggle about whether he should keep doing the right thing. The original version of Bryson’s thoughts while driving to his Dad’s is here
* In the original, the mom has a battery of genetic tests done to verify the baby is healthy. But Vix Giovanni pointed out that the test results would show that the father was closely related to the mom. So I took that out and added about the ultrasound
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Did you notice that the part of the story told from Allison’s point of view has a different paragraph formatting than the rest of the story? There was a thread in the Author’s Hangout forum asking “any way to give indentation at the start of paragraph”? I said it can be done with HTML tags. Several posters refused to believe that it could be done in a story, so I did it for that section. When I read that section, it feels wrong to me in a way I can’t place.
++++++++++++++++
I changed around how I did the author notes in the story so that the story will end on requesting people to leave in the comments which was their favorite sex scene. I decided to try that to see if it got more comments.
++++++++++++++++
The story is over 50,000 words, so the length of a novel (40K words is a short novel). Why didn’t I split it up into chapters? To me, the story didn’t lend itself to being split up. It’s a slow-burn story with the first fuck happening about halfway into the story. I think if you are going to go chapters, you want at least four chapters. I didn’t see how I could split the story into four or more relatively similar sized chapters.
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Links for the research I mentioned in the story:
* Putting a pillow under the hips doesn’t work link
* Increased chance of birth defects of a child of closely related parents link
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