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[Bamagan]

I'm a lazy Australian. What's that all about?

Allow me to imply that your laziness is a useful defense mechanism and that you are better off letting it continue to function in this instance.

 

[Djmac1031]

Nothing sweeter than a virginia.

Almost Heaven, sweet virginia ...

 

[ronde]

I am new to writing and working on my first story which is quickly turn into a novella or more. It's going to be a slow burn story.

What I was hoping to get, is some feedback from readers in regards what they like when writing the sex sense.
Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night long"?
or Are you looking for a page long description of eating a pussy.
How many sex senses in a 25 page story is too much or not enough?
The one thing in a love story that makes it?
The one thing in a love story that breaks it?

Any other feedback is welcome as will be when I post the first of I hope many.

There are no correct answers to your questions because every story is different. You'll have to decide what you're comfortable writing and the best way I know of to do that is to read some selected stories in the genre you favor. Don't select from the "Top Stories" category. Most of those stories have been on the site since forever and will have accumulated scores and favorites over the years. Go to the story genre and pick a couple of the new stories on the site. Select them by rating, the number of comments, and the number of favorites. There is a lot of discussion on what those really mean, but they are a measure of how much readers liked or didn't like a story. Read both stories with high ratings and stories with low ratings. You'll see the difference.

Things I look for in a story:

1. I absolutely hate the use of medically correct terminology to describe sex unless it's a story about a medical fetish. The clinical words are too cold to describe something that should be warm and personal.
2. The sex should be a result of the plot unless you're writing something with the intention of giving readers something to do with the hand that's not scrolling down through the story.
3. It doesn't matter if the sex is part of a love story or if it's just the result of two people who think sex would be a good idea at the time. It also doesn't matter if the sex cements their relationship or if they decide once is definitely enough. As long as the sex makes sense in the plot, that's all that's required. The same can be said for the number of sex scenes. If one in 25 pages is enough, it's enough. If the story needs fifty in 25 pages, that's enough too although I think less is usually more.
4. Other turn-offs for me are the ridiculous descriptions like "buckets of hot steaming cum", "She squirted like a fire hose", and other things that just aren't physically possible. The same can be said for the guy who is hard and ready immediately after the act and can keep that up for hours. Women can have multiple orgasms. Most men over the age of twenty need some recovery time. Men over 30 require a beer and a sandwich.

 

[Djmac1031]

I am new to writing and working on my first story which is quickly turn into a novella or more. It's going to be a slow burn story.

What I was hoping to get, is some feedback from readers in regards what they like when writing the sex sense.
Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night long"?
or Are you looking for a page long description of eating a pussy.
How many sex senses in a 25 page story is too much or not enough?
The one thing in a love story that makes it?
The one thing in a love story that breaks it?

Any other feedback is welcome as will be when I post the first of I hope many.

Wanna try to actually offer you some helpful answers. I'll try my best.

The one thing in a love story that makes it?

Great characters. Characters readers can care about. Sympathize with. Relate to. Characters we want to see win.

The one thing in a love story that breaks it?

Bad characters.

It's real simple: if we don't care about your characters, why should we care if they fuck?

You can write pages of sex scenes but if your characters are one dimensional, well,.... we could just as easily watch porn instead.

As other have suggested, start simple; Boy meets Girl. Or Boy meets Boy / Girl meets girl... you get me.

Two characters. Tell us who they are. Tell us why they like each other. Make us root for them to get together and fuck each other's brains out.

Last but not least: proofreading and editing. Don't neglect it.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

I'm a lazy Australian. What's that all about?

You really don’t want to know. Trust me on this.

 

[Bramblethorn]

There are a wide range of readers and preferences on this site. You can't please them all. I'd recommend thinking about what kinds of stories you enjoy reading and would find fun to write, then work on getting good at those. An author who's excited about what they're writing has a big advantage over an author who's trying to chase the preferences of the "average reader".

 

[joy_of_cooking]

Allow me to imply that your laziness is a useful defense mechanism and that you are better off letting it continue to function in this instance.

You really don’t want to know. Trust me on this.

Welp, I did not trust my fellow authors and now I know that an Alabama hot pocket means putting a poop into the vagina before your penis.

 

[ElectricBlue]

You really don’t want to know. Trust me on this.

Well fuck! Nothing you septic tanks come up with can any worse than the Australian equivalent. Now I'm going to waste time going to Urban Dictionary.

Wait - I just read the post above. Who the fuck would even think of doing that?

 

[TarnishedPenny]

Well fuck! Nothing you septic tanks come up with can any worse than the Australian equivalent. Now I'm going to waste time going to Urban Dictionary.

Wait - I just read the post above. Who the fuck would even think of doing that?

Told you…

 

[ElectricBlue]

Told you…

In the same league as lesbians in scat barrels, which is the oddest thing I've found on Lit. Do Alabamans have an explanation? Or an excuse?

 

[Bamagan]

In the same league as lesbians in scat barrels, which is the oddest thing I've found on Lit. Do Alabamans have an explanation? Or an excuse?

I don't know if any serious etymologist has ever researched the origin of the term, but I'd hazard a guess that it was probably someone from somewhere else who named it after Alabama, as it is not often high on the list of well-respected states, often deservedly, but probably not in this specific case.

 

[nice90sguy]

Warning: This is probably the most mysoginistic/homophobic joke I ever heard, back when I was in school:



How do you get a homo to fuck a woman? Shit in her cunt first.

 

[onehitwanda]

lesbians in scat barrels

what a terrible day to have the ability to read

 

[StillStunned]

what a terrible day to have the ability to read

I choose to read "barrels of cats".

 

[CalebZhass]

This is literotica. Many readers are here for the sex scenes exclusively and scroll through the rest of the narrative like they were fast-forwarding through a porn video. The discerning readers that enjoy the setup, the surrounding dialogue, and the overall narrative are still invested in the sex scenes and I believe they will be sorely disappointed to be invested in a story, and then have the scene fly by in a "penis in virginia" second. Vaginas and Penises deserve a lot of love in a story and I think readers appreciate when you immerse them in the story as much as possible with visual imagery, sensations, smells, sounds, and taste. The more senses are engaged, the deeper the immersion. At least that's how I view erotic stories.

¯\_(ツ)_/¯​

Very true. When I am out for action, I start by looking for action. It happens that a story is so engaging, that I find myself reading through the thing in its entirety, but usually when it comes to a "boring" part I just skip or go to the next story on the pile.

I guess it depends on the mindset of the reader. If you want to immerse yourself in sexual fantasies, it doesn't really help to read through pages of a "soap opera" to get you in the mood. Unless that "soap opera" is written really, REALLY well and makes the story whole somehow, I really cannot put my finger on it, maybe I should start paying more attention to these type of stories myself to see what they do that makes them different.

I am sure there is an audience for less explicit, more slow burn type stories as well, but for whatever reason - and without any science to back up this belief - I would think the majority of readers are looking for immediate action with just the necessary foreplay to set the scene and mood.

If anyone knows of any actual statistics to this effect, I would definitely love to know how close or far off I am

 

[CalebZhass]

Women can have multiple orgasms. Most men over the age of twenty need some recovery time. Men over 30 require a beer and a sandwich.

I guess it could be time to start a trend by writing about men in search for NEMO.

 

[SimonDoom]

In the same league as lesbians in scat barrels, which is the oddest thing I've found on Lit.

That means women standing in barrels singing like Ella Fitzgerald, right?

 

[ElectricBlue]

what a terrible day to have the ability to read

I apologise. It was my own fault entirely. I had indulged myself for a week or two with Russian scat porn, pretty girls shitting in the woods, out in the fields. It's a thing, apparently (but don't ask!). In the spirit of being unashamed, I wrote a fetish piece that wasn't entirely about scat, but featured it in passing. I applied the @SimonDoom tag advice (I think he was around at the time), and correctly tagged the story, scat. And nine others.

It worked. Someone faved the story, and optimistically faved me as a writer. So, as you do, I popped over to her story page to suss her stuff out. And stories and writers she'd faved.

Not many people know this, but there's an entire sub-genre to scat stories, lesbian scat. Who knew? The one with the two chicks in a barrel was certainly the most extreme, that's pretty much when I stopped. It looked like a group of a dozen or so writers, each faving each other's stories. A most bizarre little side street, that's for sure.

Sorry, Wanda

 

[ElectricBlue]

I am sure there is an audience for less explicit, more slow burn type stories as well, but for whatever reason - and without any science to back up this belief - I would think the majority of readers are looking for immediate action with just the necessary foreplay to set the scene and mood.

If anyone knows of any actual statistics to this effect, I would definitely love to know how close or far off I am

I'll offer up nearly my entire body of work as evidence there's a place for slow burn. I've got yards of it, with more cafes than you can count. But I always get there in the end, and give folk (both men and women) an ending they like.

I should compile a collection of, "My reaction was... considerable," type quotes, because I've got a bunch of those .

 

[ElectricBlue]

That means women standing in barrels singing like Ella Fitzgerald, right?

Unfortunately, no...

 

[SimonDoom]

Question for @coreyc : By "page" do you mean something like a standard book page (400-500 words) or a Literotica page (3750 words)? Big difference.

I've never received a criticism that a sex scene was too long. I've received criticisms that sex scenes were too short, or a letdown after the buildup.

The optimal length and style of a sex scene depends on the type of story it is.

If it's romantic in tone, then don't emphasize the mechanics and don't describe it in a dirty, detailed way. Emphasize the feelings of the participants.

If it's a kinky, fetishy story, however, then by all means go into physical detail, but also emphasize internal feelings, sensations, the impact on the five senses, etc. If it's a butt sex scene, emphasize the butt.

 

[StillStunned]

I've received criticisms that sex scenes were too short, or a letdown after the buildup.

Yeah, I get that from my wife all the time.

 

[ronde]

Very true. When I am out for action, I start by looking for action. It happens that a story is so engaging, that I find myself reading through the thing in its entirety, but usually when it comes to a "boring" part I just skip or go to the next story on the pile.

I guess it depends on the mindset of the reader. If you want to immerse yourself in sexual fantasies, it doesn't really help to read through pages of a "soap opera" to get you in the mood. Unless that "soap opera" is written really, REALLY well and makes the story whole somehow, I really cannot put my finger on it, maybe I should start paying more attention to these type of stories myself to see what they do that makes them different.

I am sure there is an audience for less explicit, more slow burn type stories as well, but for whatever reason - and without any science to back up this belief - I would think the majority of readers are looking for immediate action with just the necessary foreplay to set the scene and mood.

If anyone knows of any actual statistics to this effect, I would definitely love to know how close or far off I am

I don't have any statistics except for my own, but I write stories with a plot, characters that could be real, and put in sex if it feels like the sex fits into the plot. My readers seem to like that type of story.

 

[Jmanchu]

I am new to writing and working on my first story which is quickly turn into a novella or more. It's going to be a slow burn story.

What I was hoping to get, is some feedback from readers in regards what they like when writing the sex sense.
Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night long"?
or Are you looking for a page long description of eating a pussy.
How many sex senses in a 25 page story is too much or not enough?
The one thing in a love story that makes it?
The one thing in a love story that breaks it?

Any other feedback is welcome as will be when I post the first of I hope many.

Everyone has their own preferences for this. Some want dirty graphic details that go in length, some enjoy a LOT of detail, some want quick details with more focus on the emotions and the build up in the story rather than details. There is no universal rules to this.

My personal tip is show don't tell and add emotion. Think reactions, think excitement, think every dirty little thing that the characters would appreciate during. Don't just describe an action or say "they did this" without some sort of emotion to set the mood of what's going on. And what reactions to anything the characters would like. Reactions are the best way to show the characters' mood and emotional state and their actions and reactions to the situation is another opportunity to show more of your characters' personality, etc. That's my two cents. Avoid telling instead of showing, even when narrating with minimal detail.

I know you just wrote it for example of a minimal 'nondescript' example for your question, but I'm just going to use it point out two things for a sex scene that can make or break it: "It felt good. They did it all night long." is no good. "It felt good" is just not going to create a picture. Too vague. Who felt good? How do we know it felt good? I'd show it felt good through a sigh, moan, an expression, body reaction or some sort of something from either one or both of the characters. "They did it all night long" lacks emotion. was it a tender night? was it intimate? was it a wild night of passion? Just some food for thought to answer your questions.

There are a lot of other things that can make or break the erotica in your stories. Great characters just make more interesting sex scenes even if the details are simple, more than poorly written characters regardless of how hot and spicy the details are. So focus on your characters.

Oh, and try not to use medically proper words with a simple description of what goes in where, otherwise you risk writing the clinical description of sex. "he put his penis in her vagina" would very clinical, sounds more fitting for "The talk" with your parents than a story.

 

[BobbyLaker]

In the same league as lesbians in scat barrels, which is the oddest thing I've found on Lit. Do Alabamans have an explanation? Or an excuse?

@ElectricBlue Nope... they're just Alabamans... That's all it takes