pink_silk_glove
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Whenever I peruse story lists it always amazes me at just how poor some of these are. Title and description are powerful tools to make your story stand out in a list, yet so many don't seize the opportunity. I get it. You finish writing and you just want to publish and often the title, and moreso the description are an afterthought. "Oh shit, I need a description!" You whip something up. For my first couple of stories, I was guilty of that myself. I've gotten much better at titles and descriptions, often coming up with descriptions early during the writing or halfway through as it takes shape and I have a strong idea of what the piece is about. Tags, I still need to work on, but those are for another thread.
There are things that you want to get across in your title and description. You want to have an appropriate title, either direct or metaphorically arty. It's good to have a title that gives an idea of what the story is about, but sometimes a wonderfully arty title remains obscure. That's okay. When that's the case you have a 60-character description to fill in the blanks.
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an example:
Title: John and Mary
Description: John and Mary celebrate their anniversary.
This is a yawner. Why would I click this? Why not try ...
Title: John and Mary's Anniversary
Description: John and Mary renew their vows, with candles and handcuffs.
That one raises an eyebrow, even with a boring title.
example 2:
Title: Into the Woods
Description: Mike goes for a walk in the woods.
The title tells me nothing but a setting. That's fine but it's still boring. However where this really falls down hard is the description. It basically just repeats the title. Why should anyone click on this? Are trees a fetish? Try this ...
Title: Deep into the Woods
Description: Mike ventures into the woods and encounters a sexy nymph.
First, the word 'deep' added to the title adds nuance and subliminal innuendo. But the description now tells just what exciting thing Mike finds in the woods, letting the reader know what they might be in for without spoiling much. This is guaranteed to get way more clicks.
example 3:
Title: Mom and Son Seduction
Description: Mom seduces her son.
The title here actually works. It's not original nor arty at all but as mom/son is the biggest kink in lit, that title is going to get mega clicks and that's exactly what we want. But the description sucks! HARD! Just repeating the title is completely redundant. This is pointless. Try ...
Title: Mom and Son Seduction
Description: Mom rewards her son for fixing the car.
or ...
Title: Hot Tub Seduction
Description: Son looks sexy in his swim trunks. Mom shags him.
Move the mom/son element to the description and use a less generic title.
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These examples are totally made up btw, but are inspired by hundreds of real ones, I'm not going to shame someone's work publicly here of course.
However, the real point of this thread is to let authors share their titles and descriptions here, ones that they have published or ones that they are contemplating using or are in the works. If you are willing, post your title an description here for critiquing by myself or anyone else. I will say that my critiques will be honest. If I think that it is poor I will say so and say why. If I like it I will say so and why. I'm not trying to hurt anyone's feelings nor chuff anyone's egos. I just want to help everyone, including myself, improve on titles and descriptions so that we can all get more eyeballs.
There are things that you want to get across in your title and description. You want to have an appropriate title, either direct or metaphorically arty. It's good to have a title that gives an idea of what the story is about, but sometimes a wonderfully arty title remains obscure. That's okay. When that's the case you have a 60-character description to fill in the blanks.
~ ~ ~
an example:
Title: John and Mary
Description: John and Mary celebrate their anniversary.
This is a yawner. Why would I click this? Why not try ...
Title: John and Mary's Anniversary
Description: John and Mary renew their vows, with candles and handcuffs.
That one raises an eyebrow, even with a boring title.
example 2:
Title: Into the Woods
Description: Mike goes for a walk in the woods.
The title tells me nothing but a setting. That's fine but it's still boring. However where this really falls down hard is the description. It basically just repeats the title. Why should anyone click on this? Are trees a fetish? Try this ...
Title: Deep into the Woods
Description: Mike ventures into the woods and encounters a sexy nymph.
First, the word 'deep' added to the title adds nuance and subliminal innuendo. But the description now tells just what exciting thing Mike finds in the woods, letting the reader know what they might be in for without spoiling much. This is guaranteed to get way more clicks.
example 3:
Title: Mom and Son Seduction
Description: Mom seduces her son.
The title here actually works. It's not original nor arty at all but as mom/son is the biggest kink in lit, that title is going to get mega clicks and that's exactly what we want. But the description sucks! HARD! Just repeating the title is completely redundant. This is pointless. Try ...
Title: Mom and Son Seduction
Description: Mom rewards her son for fixing the car.
or ...
Title: Hot Tub Seduction
Description: Son looks sexy in his swim trunks. Mom shags him.
Move the mom/son element to the description and use a less generic title.
~ ~ ~
These examples are totally made up btw, but are inspired by hundreds of real ones, I'm not going to shame someone's work publicly here of course.
However, the real point of this thread is to let authors share their titles and descriptions here, ones that they have published or ones that they are contemplating using or are in the works. If you are willing, post your title an description here for critiquing by myself or anyone else. I will say that my critiques will be honest. If I think that it is poor I will say so and say why. If I like it I will say so and why. I'm not trying to hurt anyone's feelings nor chuff anyone's egos. I just want to help everyone, including myself, improve on titles and descriptions so that we can all get more eyeballs.