Carrollfiers
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Hello everyone,
I'm looking for feedback on the first chapter of my story Swingers : Emma and Noah. It is 1 of 10, and I have a first draft of all ten completed. They are in various stages of revisions.
This chapter has been been edited since I submitted it, I didn't know how long it would take to be approved. So there are things that have already been corrected, but that's okay. Fresh eyes are a good thing.
All feedback is welcome, good or bad. I'm looking to improve the narrative. Also, I will need beta readers for future chapters if anyone is interested.
Thank you for your time,
Carroll
https://www.literotica.com/s/swingers-emma-and-noah-ch-01
I'm looking for feedback on the first chapter of my story Swingers : Emma and Noah. It is 1 of 10, and I have a first draft of all ten completed. They are in various stages of revisions.
This chapter has been been edited since I submitted it, I didn't know how long it would take to be approved. So there are things that have already been corrected, but that's okay. Fresh eyes are a good thing.
All feedback is welcome, good or bad. I'm looking to improve the narrative. Also, I will need beta readers for future chapters if anyone is interested.
Thank you for your time,
Carroll
https://www.literotica.com/s/swingers-emma-and-noah-ch-01
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