The vocalising of sex

[DeMont]

Good evening my dear colleagues,
In her essay "Painting With Soft Brush-Strokes" https://www.literotica.com/s/painting-with-soft-brush-strokes our colleague onehitwanda presented a a marvelous demonstration on the use of words, the form of those words into sentences and using words to lend power to sentences. Both the points and emphasis of those points was excellent.
Given that we can do that with words, quite easily, I was led to consider a comment that was anonymously made on one of my submissions that basically stated, "Using long, drawn out, capitalised expressions of sexual vocalisations at the moment of climax was really, really amateurish."

Not entirely a negative feedback, I took that on board as more of a suggestion to explore rather than a criticism (although not entirely sure which one it was) In my lifetime I have experienced both "somewhat reserved reactions" to "that" moment and "completely, utterly, depraved and uncontrolled" reactions (drawn out somewhat) at that moment. That's in real life. In writing, and as writers, what are your opinions on the matter? How do you choose to portray the ecstatic moment of fulfillment?

The basic question, I suppose, is how to portray the power of the moment without writing in the third person all the time?
Respectfully,
D.

 

[StillStunned]

See my reply in another thread started just a bit ago: Writing an orgasm.

 

[Djmac1031]

Im sure i wrote out a lot of OOOOHS and AAAAAHHHS when I first started.

And they have their place, in moderation. But too many in a row is definitely distracting. And, frankly, lazy writing.

You can go for more vague or abstract, flowery descriptions.

Or just write "He / she / they cried out loudly in orgasmic bliss" or "he / she / they whimpered softly as their orgasm subsided " or whatever.

 

[WittyUserName]

Im sure i wrote out a lot of OOOOHS and AAAAAHHHS when I first started.

And they have their place, in moderation. But too many in a row is definitely distracting. And, frankly, lazy writing.

You can go for more vague or abstract, flowery descriptions.

Or just write "He / she / they cried out loudly in orgasmic bliss" or "he / she / they whimpered softly as their orgasm subsided " or whatever.

I understand what you mean. I like onomatopoeia, and lately I've been using it when describing blowjobs. Now I'm worried I'm overdoing it. It comes down to each writer's style. If you're writing a long series, I think variety is important, too.

 

[SimonDoom]

It's a good question, and I think the reality is that people are very different in their vocalization of sexual pleasure, so what seems super hot to one person is going to seem super fake or phony to another.

I'm a verbal person and I like verbalizing things and I get very turned on if my partner is the same way. But some partners have NOT been that way, so you have to adjust. With a story, you can write your characters however you want them to be, but the one suggestion I would make is to foreshadow the vocalization early in the story. Give the reader a reason to believe it's plausible that the character would vocalize during sex the way they do. Vocalization/dialogue should always be consistent with the character.

 

[Djmac1031]

Vocalization/dialogue should always be consistent with the character.

Good advice, which you can also sometimes flip to subvert expectations, IE the male character is surprised when the usually quiet and shy woman he finally managed to land is suddenly loud and vocal in bed.

 

[HordHolm]

It's a good question, and I think the reality is that people are very different in their vocalization of sexual pleasure, so what seems super hot to one person is going to seem super fake or phony to another.

It's also the case that loud today might well be silent tomorrow, depending on a variety of factors.

 

[SimonDoom]

Good advice, which you can also sometimes flip to subvert expectations, IE the male character is surprised when the usually quiet and shy woman he finally managed to land is suddenly loud and vocal in bed.

Good point, and there's truth to this, too. The "good girl gone bad" fantasy. It's a hot fantasy, but I've known "good girls" who really are like that. It's not JUST a fantasy.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

The “AHHHHHHHH!!!”s and “OHHHHHMYYYYGODDDD!!!!”s get old pretty quickly. I tend to lean more towards this sort of thing: Through the maelstrom of her bliss, Rachel dimly became aware of ragged cries growing ever louder, ever more exultant, until she finally recognized the voice as her own.