The story you didn't write

[StillStunned]

My newest story was published today: A Quiet Woman (E&V), about a man watching his neighbour. I mentioned in the thread about pantsing that this was my most pantsingest story ever, taking on a life of its own as I wrote and ignoring all the turns I'd imagined it would take.

So this thread is about those stories that didn't get written because the plot took you somewhere else. Those ideas that never made it onto the page - or at least not into the final version. How would your story have turned out if they had?

For "A Quiet Woman", I'd imagined the neighbour Ginny developing a kinkier and kinkier sex life, with the narrator watching her descend into ever greater depths of depravity. A few scenes I thought I'd be writing were an orgy, or a gang bang, and one where Ginny's tied up, whipped, them pleasured by a woman in a black leather mask.

But the practicalities of her living in a flat, with nosy neighbours, meant that I had to take the story in a different direction. I think it worked out for the best: in the published version, we get to see Ginny's development as a person, and the story leads to a semi-believable conclusion. The version I'd originally conceived of would have involved describing all the sex scenes with the narrator kept at a remove, and how many times can you describe a voyeur wanking off anyway? It would also have been more difficult to write a satisfying conclusion - where would the story go, after all? Just a "This continued until she moved away"? Or "Her guests have just arrived, so I'm going back to watch, catch you later"?

Still, the scenes would have been fun to write, at least taken separately. So here's to the stillborn story of the depraved neighbour. Cheers!

 

[THBGato]

My first story (that I wrote, not published as I took so long editing) was meant to run thus:

A woman is set up on a blind date by her friends, but the date never shows. A waitresses takes pity on her and joins her at the table just as her shift ends. They chat and bond and get on and at the end the waitresses confesses that she was the date, and her friends set the whole thing up. The first woman is shocked, believing herself to be straight, but after initially being hurtful, regrets it and goes back to book a table for two at the same restaurant. I'd been massively influenced by reading A Blind Date for the Holidays and Double Blind Date.

Yet, when I started writing, it didn't turn out that way at all. Almost the opposite in fact. So I never truly told that story.

 

[THBGato]

Or "Her guests have just arrived, so I'm going back to watch, catch you later"?

That actually strikes me as a kind of neat ending for an E&V story. Especially if Ginny had texted to tell the narrator!

 

[Rob_Royale]

Yes. My Aunt Tina series was supposed to be about an aunt who was a compete sexual predator. She was supposed to seduce her young nephew who was in the service. And then use him to provide a steady stream of fit young men to feed her ravenous sexual appetite.

Instead it turned into a love affair. I was shocked myself when I finished the first story. "Where the hell did that come from?"

 

[StillStunned]

That actually strikes me as a kind of neat ending for an E&V story. Especially if Ginny had texted to tell the narrator!

Ah shit, now I want to write a story where the voyeur watches his neighbour, but each time she includes someone the voyeur cares about in depraved sexual situations. And yes, she texts beforehand. Story title: "Guess who's coming this time?"

 

[MrPixel]

I have one series about a foursome taking on renovation of a classic downtown hotel that was supposed to be a story about the trials and tribulations of restoring old buildings and how it affected the multiple relationships. Sort of a combination of two old TV comedies, Hot L Baltimore and Home Improvement. It went completely off the rails when a FC turned-up pregnant after a gangbang. She had to go out-of-state for an abortion; it went horribly wrong, nearly killing her.

It was a setup to kill her off, but that was too dark for what was basically a rom-com. So I had the MMC fall in love with her, and they bonded into a co-dependent relationship. The story became one of her recovery and her friends/lovers getting into sexy trouble away from home.

The hotel repairs take place in the next big installment which is already in the can, I just have to upload... lordy... 12 chapters.

 

[Erozetta]

I started writing a "friend seduces a sibling pair and convinces them to fuck at a music festival" story that involved a scene with the bus they are driving getting pulled over by a couple of cops just before they make it out of town. It was meant to establish the MFC being a tease with a clear history of fucking with people as a form of rebellion against her cop father.

Cop that pulled them over and MFC ended up having a ridiculous amount of chemistry. Story shifted to them and became a fucked up trauma-based co-dependent pseudo-love erotic horror story that involved a serial killer kidnapping them. Kidnapper tries to turn her into his protégé by making her torture the male cop (if she doesn't use the whip on him the kidnapper does and she has to watch. He only uses it once and she readily agrees to use it herself after that.)

Happy-go-lucky incest music festival romp turned super dark survival tale that showcases an incredibly toxic relationship which destroys two families and is never painted as a good thing. One of the last things the MFC says is "Am I the villain of our story?" while holding a gun between the two of them.

 

[THBGato]

Actually, if we are really talking about stories we didn't write, then 20+ years ago I co-wrote a sitcom/drama pilot about a group of students in Bristol. We pitched it to various production companies (I went to a meeting at Endemol HQ, the company behind big brother). Obviously, nothing came of it.

Then, a couple of years later, "Skins", a sitcom/drama about a bunch of students in Bristol, came out.

So, there you go: I didn't write "Skins".

 

[LonRivers]

I have characters, places and events in my head from stories that I started to write, but never finished. I keep them on file just in case I go back to them or if what I am writing presently could use those ideas. I like to write just to flesh out the characters in my own mind so that when I do write their story, I have a pretty good idea of who the character(s) are and what they will do or think.

 

[Voboy]

I started a Valentines Day Contest story about a retired warrior rescuing his wife from a castle beseiged by William the Conqueror in 1075. She'd be held captive by a spurned princess who wants to fuck the retired warrior.

That quickly turned into a bridge too far, mostly because I don't have much interest in writing Damsel In Distress stories with a true-love angle. It's in turnaround now. I've moved the story about halfway along. It's unlikely ever to see the light of day.

 

[Pabiporffor]

The government unable to control ruly teens and twentysomethings resort to the only threat that generation fears, online ridicule. Forced to orgasm by sitting on a vibrating log infront of their families and the cameras it seemed a good idea until I hit the plot wall.

 

[theMasterBaiter]

Happy-go-lucky incest music festival romp turned super dark survival tale that showcases an incredibly toxic relationship which destroys two families and is never painted as a good thing. One of the last things the MFC says is "Am I the villain of our story?" while holding a gun between the two of them.

Damn that got dark fast. Did you get it published? I mean... not that I want to read anything that twisted... :kicks dirt: :shame:

 

[theMasterBaiter]

The one I'm still trying to find a way to write is about a really sex positive fun bunny who just love the joy and pleasure of pleasing people and being pleased. She never met an O she didn't want and never met a person she felt didn't deserve at least a hand job. And she explores and embraces BDSM, both sides, becomes a switch and grows a large set of fuck buddies (and biddies) and is really looking forward to her first orgy, but then her workspace finds out and she is fired, sued by the (unknown to her) wife of her boss (who she was fucking, of course, along with several other co-workers). When her rainbow world of "let's all just fuck and be happy" crashes, she ends up in sex work 'cause she likes it and is good at it, but doesn't like the crime and abuse it invites. Then she gets trafficked and ends up being forced to do exactly the same things she used to love to do. That's the key part of the story. Same act, same physicality, still fucking, but totally different higher emotions. The dichotomy of some part of her mind still being turned on, and the rest of her mind being totally abhorrent of her own /physical/ reactions. The extreme stupidity of a culture that forces her to do what she would have been perfectly happy to do on her own. And then deus ex machina, rescued but unwilling to testify the part she hated was the sex, when what she actually hated was being forced and treated as a thing instead of a person. And finally the slow repair of her psyche by the membership of an underground sex club.

Crazy huh? Can't write it 'cuase too many parts of it need a point of view I don't have. It's slowly turning into something dark and way too... abusive. Hasn't been finished or published in all these years, but it started off with such good intent. Breaks my twisted heart.

 

[StillStunned]

I'd forgotten about this thread. Sometimes past-me surprises me.

 

[Erozetta]

Damn that got dark fast. Did you get it published? I mean... not that I want to read anything that twisted... :kicks dirt: :shame:

Yes, I did, actually, lol.

 

[theMasterBaiter]

Yes, I did, actually, lol.

Which one where?

 

[Erozetta]

Which one where?

It's up for sale on Smashwords. "How Villains are Made" but send me your email in a PM and I'll email you the PDF.

 

[StillStunned]

Yesterday I wrote a snippet in the "Love Story" Writing Exercise thread: this one, to be precise. If you look, you'll notice that it was edited a few minutes after it was posted. I don't think anyone read it in the meantime, so here's what I changed: the letter is signed "Tom", but originally it was signed "Ellie".

The snippet is supposed to be a slightly creepy and very delusional married person thinking they can convince a married woman to start an affair with them. After I posted it, though, I worried that people would think I'd made the writer a woman for shock value, whereas the snippet is about how unpleasant they in fact. So Ellie became Tom, and I don't think anyone picked up on any of what I'd intended anyway. Oh well.

Even so, it put me in mind of this thread from a while ago, and my newest story: While She Watches Them. If you haven't read it, here's the gist. The male narrator has a friend round for dinner, Allie, who discovers his setup with binoculars to watch the flat across the way, where Airbnb guests usually leave the curtains open. Allie convinces the narrator that it would be fun to watch the newest guests, and so she watches them and describes what they're doing. They both get more excited, of course, and end up having sex.

Besides being the same Allie from The Code, Allie also features in Flesh for a Third Fantasy. She gives a massage to the narrator's girlfriend Mel, who's a proud exhibitionist and tease.

So given this setup, for a while I considered the possibility of the couple in the flat across the way being Mel and her nameless lover from the Flesh for Fantasy series. The story could end with Allie getting a call from Mel and saying, "Yes, it was totally hot, thanks for the show," or something like that.

In the end I decided against it. The main reason, I think, was that I didn't want readers to become confused with too many nameless narrators - the POV character in this story and the narrator of Flesh for Fantasy. Another reason is that Flesh for Another Fantasy essentially tells the same story from the perspective of Mel and her lover: having sex in a hotel room while another couple watches from afar. In fact, @Djmac1031 already wrote the story of the watching couple: The Jenna Arrangement Pt. 28.

Returning to Allie, when I read "The Code" to my wife she was disappointed that it didn't end when Zoltan, the gorgeous man she'd just had sex with, waiting for her after work. I'll admit I considered it - who doesn't like a happy ending, after all? But then I decided that the focus should be on Allie, and on how she can be happy with herself, and by herself, in her new life.

In "While She Watches Them" it's clear that the narrator wants to reconnect with Allie. They were lovers a long time ago, and he'd be quite happy to make it permanent now that they're older. But I think he's going to be disappointed. Allie isn't quite ready to settle down just yet.

 

[SimonDoom]

I would describe myself as a "concept-oriented" writer, where I start with a concept, usually a kinky concept, I want to explore in a story. I've had a few stories where part-way through the story I realized I wanted to explore the concept in a very different way, so I started over.

 

[TnA4U]

I recently engaged in dialog with a man here who offered the thought that he'd like me to rest passively on his bed while he toyed and played with me. He mentioned that he'd like for me to turn off my overactive, analytic, and reciprocity-focused mind, and simply feel the sensations he prompted.

I started writing a story in that vein, then quickly realized I couldn't do it. I have never had such an experience, sexual or otherwise.

That thought actually made me sad.

I did write another one, focused on a different fantasy of mine, but I fear this one may remain unwritten.

 

[KittyOfSteele]

NaNoWriMo 2024. It was a bottle episode. It exploded out of proportions and ended up into epic fantasy territory. That's what I get for attempting to be a plotter.

Also, the rest of "The Woman at the Speakeasy" because... it started to feel more like paranoia fuel rather than a pulpy erotic thriller... plus I felt like I shoehorned everything in place... And the rest of Brie's story, the girl from "Homework is Due? Make a Porn!" because I had no idea where to go to next!

 

[MrMikelobe1952]

I recently engaged in dialog with a man here who offered the thought that he'd like me to rest passively on his bed while he toyed and played with me. He mentioned that he'd like for me to turn off my overactive, analytic, and reciprocity-focused mind, and simply feel the sensations he prompted.

I started writing a story in that vein, then quickly realized I couldn't do it. I have never had such an experience, sexual or otherwise.

That thought actually made me sad.

I did write another one, focused on a different fantasy of mine, but I fear this one may remain unwritten.

This is a lot like receiving a sensual massage. Of course, there are a lot more places that provide the service for men, but there are providers for women. It’s just more effort to find them.
It’s different from being submissive. It’s about being passive and enjoying touch and receiving pleasure.
You might also find Bondassage interesting.