The Challenge Club

[CrimsonMaiden]

I'm assuming the cramping is a miscarriage and that is why she is so weak when the child is taken from her?

It sounds good so far, the only objection I have is the part when it's describing the times she is in "the place" almost makes it sound as though she's too weak during that time to do much for herself. (recover her strength part) Unless you were referring to the bleeding period after birth, that statement isn't greatly accurate.

I'm probably just being too picky, but it struck a chord with me. The rest sounds great and I am looking forward to reading what happens after the child is taken.

Since everyone has had the chance to read mine, I'm taking it down. I'll do that after every challenge since the alt I write under is mostly a secret. I don't mind y'all knowing, but I'm not posting it here for everyone to see, lol.

 

[CrimsonMaiden]

Okay, since this challenge is complete who is going to give us the next one?

 

[neonlyte]

I'm assuming the cramping is a miscarriage and that is why she is so weak when the child is taken from her?

It sounds good so far, the only objection I have is the part when it's describing the times she is in "the place" almost makes it sound as though she's too weak during that time to do much for herself. (recover her strength part) Unless you were referring to the bleeding period after birth, that statement isn't greatly accurate.

I'm probably just being too picky, but it struck a chord with me. The rest sounds great and I am looking forward to reading what happens after the child is taken.

Since everyone has had the chance to read mine, I'm taking it down. I'll do that after every challenge since the alt I write under is mostly a secret. I don't mind y'all knowing, but I'm not posting it here for everyone to see, lol.

Hi Crimson
Thanks for your comments. Yes, the incident when the child is taken is after a miscarriage.

The other part does need rewording, I was looking at it this morning and it needs sorting out. I'm quite pleased with how it's working out overall, the child is a kind of fulcrum around which the action takes place.

I'd suggest SubJoe but we might all be in serious trouble . I won't volunteer, I'm likely to be away again over the next couple of weeks.

 

[Black Tulip]

...
Glad to hear you guys are interested. I have offered the whole up for discussion in the Story Discussion Circle. We'll see what happens to it there.
...

ROFLMAO

You don't want to know what's happening to it right now. LOL
It has been taken apart limb by limb, but that is good. I'm getting a lot of useful advice and if you want to know what you can get out of the SDC, go have a look at the thread with my story in it.
Warning: not for the weak of heart!

Neon,
I still have to look at your tidbits, will you leave them up for a few days?

 

[neonlyte]

ROFLMAO

Neon,
I still have to look at your tidbits, will you leave them up for a few days?

Wondered what you were suggesting there

I'll leave them up, the final version will be changed from what's posted.

I've read you SDC submission, will cogitate overnight and respond in the morning. I think it's only fair to warn you, I'm only concentrating on what I think works. You've more than enough of the other to deal with.

 

[Black Tulip]

Hehehe.

I'm actually surprising myself by not feeling miserable about it.
Does that mean I'm finally growing up?

 

[Dingus Guy]

I haven't posted a challenge in quite a while, so here it goes...


1- The word "Grandma's" must be located somewhere within the title of your story.

2- Opening scene must be masturbatory in nature.

3- You have to choose from the following to have a sex scene, but its a first come first serve basis. Once you choose, claim it first here on the board and no one else can claim it. I will choose tomorrow evening from whatever if left. Pick from these:

a) sex in an elevator
b) sex in a doctor's office (DINGUS GUY)
c) sex in a closet (CRIMSON MAIDEN)
d) sex with a kitchen appliance
e) sex suspended in the air
f) sex in a crowded place (BLACK TULIP)
g) sex in outer space
h) sex in costume
i) sex with a mute
j) sex involving a clown
k) sex on a blind date
l) sex surrounded by lies and deception
m) sex involving a captive/hostage (REMEC)
n) sex with a celebrity

There a lot of choices here, but pick fast before the one you like is snatched up.

Challenge ends: Tuesday March 1. Which is 2 weeks from today. Good Luck!

 

[Black Tulip]

Neon,
I finally had the time to read your story.

Like Dingus pointed out, there are some really long sentences and I stumbled over past/present tensen but you said you were working on that so I won't point them out to you.

I liked what I read so far, but the camp in the valley needs more explanation. You make it's function twofold and that causes trouble. You state it's a place for the sick and the old to either recover or be finished by the wild animals. That's a good idea, I like it. But you combine it with a place for the women to stay when they are bleeding. I don't think that works. Women would probably be taboo during that period, possibly nearby but not likely in the same spot.

I gathered she had a 1-year old and was having a miscarriage, but it was a bit confusing. Some thoughts on that. No matter how weak you are after losing a child prematurely, you'd fight like hell to keep the one that was born healthy.
I don't know how it works for other women of course, but I know I was not particularly weak after miscarriages, more depressed and suffering from a sense of failure.
You could have her fight some more, but losing anyway.

Hope this helps.



Dingus,
Nobody picke one yet?

Good: f is mine!

 

[Dingus Guy]

So is this a bad challenge? No one is picking but BT. I will wait another day before picking.

 

[neonlyte]

So is this a bad challenge? No one is picking but BT. I will wait another day before picking.

Dingus

I've been holding off waiting for today's news. Not good, wife has to be operated to re-set a fracture next week in UK - the same time my builders start the next phase of works in Portugal, I'm not going to have time for this challenge.

 

[Remec]

So is this a bad challenge? No one is picking but BT. I will wait another day before picking.

I didn't wander through here yesterday...not sure why...but I'll take m.

 

[Dingus Guy]

Sorry to hear that Neon. I hope it all works out for you and your wife.

Welcome to the group, Remec. It is good to have new blood. Just make the story so its big enough to post on Literotica. We usually get good feedback here and you are more than welcome to post the story here or just a paragraph or two. The challenge is not so much to post a story as it is to get you to just write.

 

[Black Tulip]

Hi Remec,
Been missing your *G*.

Neon,
Sorry to hear that. Your other half has been suffering really bad luck lately.
Take care.

 

[Dingus Guy]

Where oh where is CM? I waited 2 days, so I am going to pick now, so I am going with b- "sex in a doctor's office".

 

[CrimsonMaiden]

I'm here, sort of.

Let's see... I've already done stories that include a, e, g, m and n... (a and n in the same story, lol)... so I guess I'll take... c.

 

[Dingus Guy]

I'm here, sort of.

Let's see... I've already done stories that include a, e, g, m and n... (a and n in the same story, lol)... so I guess I'll take... c.

Hugs CM. I hope all is well. Closet, eh? Good Luck with that one.

 

[Dingus Guy]

Update on Challenge

Challenge:

1- The word "Grandma's" must be located somewhere within the title of your story.

2- Opening scene must be masturbatory in nature.

3- You have to choose from the following to have a sex scene, but its a first come first serve basis. Once you choose, claim it first here on the board and no one else can claim it. I will choose tomorrow evening from whatever if left. Pick from these:

a) sex in an elevator
b) sex in a doctor's office (DINGUS GUY)
c) sex in a closet (CRIMSON MAIDEN)
d) sex with a kitchen appliance
e) sex suspended in the air
f) sex in a crowded place (BLACK TULIP)
g) sex in outer space (SUMMER MORNING)
h) sex in costume
i) sex with a mute
j) sex involving a clown
k) sex on a blind date
l) sex surrounded by lies and deception
m) sex involving a captive/hostage (REMEC)
n) sex with a celebrity

There a lot of choices here, but pick fast before the one you like is snatched up.

Challenge ends: Tuesday March 1. Which is 2 weeks from today. Good Luck!

 

[Dingus Guy]

Here is a post from a long time Challenge Club Alum, Summer Morning:

Hi!

I'll take sex in outer space. Chuckle.

And I'm not posting right now. I have 999 posts and I want to announce a story with my thousandth. Of course I have to write it first! So...

Could you just announce I'll be writing it?

Tx!

SM


I welcome back Summer Morning to our Club and offer an open invitation to any other new writers to our realm of challenges.

 

[Black Tulip]

I'm glad to hear he is still around and writing.

But .... what's with the additional requirements?
It will take me three weeks at least to put in a grandmother!

 

[Dingus Guy]

I'm glad to hear he is still around and writing.

But .... what's with the additional requirements?
It will take me three weeks at least to put in a grandmother!

I never said you have to have a grandmother in your story, I just said the title has to have "Grandma's" in it, e.g. "I Sniffed My Grandma's Thong". You can use that title if you wish.

 

[Black Tulip]

*bump*

Not able to make it on time, but there is a story brewing right now.

 

[Dingus Guy]

Bump and Grind

*bump*

Not able to make it on time, but there is a story brewing right now.

You have to March 1, which is on Tuesday. I don't have much written either, but have the concept in my head. I hope to have it presented in a timely fashion sometime Tuesday.

 

[CrimsonMaiden]

**********

 

[Dingus Guy]

Okay here's mine...

Open House


Outside of anything that might jump out of you that needs fixing... which category? Erotic Couplings or BDSM? I think it could be either. It might be too mild for BDSM. What do y'all think?

Okay, it definitely isn't BDSM, not unless you plan on expanding it more. It is a hot little shortie of a story, and I think you can definitely build around it. The title needs to be fixed though to meet the challenge criteria, otherwise good job.

My story will be submitted last minute tonight, as usual.

 

[CrimsonMaiden]

Whoops, I read that wrong. I thought it just had to be in the story and not the title.

Oh well, so I didn't meet the challenge with the title. I can live with that, lol.