Story: Aaaah! Little Green Aliens!

[Vanadiel]

A little story I had in the back of my mind for a while. A group of aliens come to earth to try to learn about human women. I would appreciate it if you could give the intro a read and maybe add on a bit. Thanks. Link below.

http://www.chyoo.com:81/index.php/main.story.cover/3874

 

[amalgam]

Hiya, Vanadiel. I was thinking that you might want to be more choosey about the term "alien." This story is clearly from the point of view of the "extraterrestrials" and so they may not be so "alien" to themselves. Case in point:

"The aliens continued (sic) passed some odd looking alien creatures, but they determined they were not human females."

The word "alien" is used twice. Certainly one as noun and one as adjective, but this illustrates my point. The "alien" creatures are "alien" to the "aliens." Either open up the vocabulary or use vocabulary that might be more idiosyncratic to our unearthly visitors.