Part 2 of a story - help please

[Kateslover1234]

Evening all, I'm looking for an editor to help guide me through part 2 of my story please. I have written it and am happy with the storyline itself but would really love some help with the flow of the story and some of the more detailed parts. I believe my writing is good and have had good scores on past stories, I just feel that with this one I am repeating myself a little and need a fresh pair of eyes to look at it and give me some guidance. Perhaps change some of the wording to make it a better read. If anyone fancies it, feel free to reply on here or email me


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Thanks
KL

 

[Kateslover1234]

Sadly it just got sent back saying ….

• Please fix the formatting of your dialogue. The essay "How to Make Characters Talk" in our Writer's Resources section has more information on the formatting of dialogue if you have further questions: https://www.literotica.com/s/how-to-make-characters-talk

have looked through but can’t understand why. Not had this before. Can anyone have a quick look for me please?