Seeking feedback on draft story (Amy's curse) not yet published. Themes are mind control & free use.

[Emma_McKay]

Hello all,

Thanks for reading! I am seeking someone who is willing to provide feedback on a story I have written but not yet published. I have just finished writing part 2 and am starting on part 3 soon. But really, its Part 1 i am emailing about.

The story is about an 18 year old girl who gets cursed by an old witch. The curse results in her being unable to resist the sexual advances of old men. It has themes of mind control, free use, and cnc. Seeking help with/ feedback on editing and story concept. PM if you can help!

Thanks in advance!!!!
Emma

 

[CiaoSteve]

Hi Emma . . . how many words is Chapter 1?

 

[Emma_McKay]

Hi, its 4730 words. Not sure if that is long or short

 

[StillStunned]

Most people will tell you that's on the short side for a Lit story or chapter. It's a lot to edit, though.

 

[CiaoSteve]

Happy to take a look if you want to PM me and I'll share an e-mail address. If I was going short chapter I'd usually head for around 6k words. Is there anything specific you are looking for in terms of editing? Maybe you could let me know if you decide to message me.

 

[Emma_McKay]

Hi! thanks for offering. Really appreciate it. I honestly think there wont be a lot of editing needed. The first chapter (I think) is ready to go. Would love to get some feedback/thoughts on story. If you like it I could also share Ch 2 which will need a lot of work as its only in first draft. Want to send me your email?

Emma

 

[Emma_McKay]

Hi! thanks for offering. Really appreciate it. I honestly think there wont be a lot of editing needed. The first chapter (I think) is ready to go. Would love to get some feedback/thoughts on story. If you like it I could also share Ch 2 which will need a lot of work as its only in first draft. Want to send me your email?

Emma

Oh god! Sorry! I thought I was messaging you, not replying in my post! Feel free to pm me your email and I will send it to you

 

[Dwbackup2023]

I'll take a look if you like and I'd like you to maybe do the same for me. If you have all 3 chapters done I'd send all 3 and post them as one. It's my biggest regret after posting my stories

 

[AlinaX]

Whatever happened to this story? Are you still looking for feedback?

 

[Darkweather]

Sounds like one I'd like to read in any case!