OK explain this to Me.

[Master_Vassago]

The chapter to an ongoing story I am writing took a turn for the worse, the Master had the tables switched on Him. I figured this chapter would disturb some of the readers, ok the males, yet it has the highest voting I have gotten so far. With a 4.9 already and it has at least ten votes. I am not complaining but the one chapter I write for Myself in the story line and its doing great. Any ideas on why that is so?

Here's the link if anyone wants to view. http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=68673

I will warn you it's incest and D/s combined. but if you can get past the incest portion if that is something that doesn't appeal to you I think its a good read.

 

[PaulX35]

Master_vassago,

Scoring - and not only of erotica stories - is a mixed blessing. You never know what makes people decide for a certain vote. Some vote on thrill of the content, others put much more emphasis on how well written it is.
It's the reason I don't care for scores too much; I've read too many great stories that got only average scores, and too many not really that good ones that made it into the 4.8's and higher.

I'll go through your story today and let you know what I found.

Thanks for posting it, in advance.

Paul

 

[Master_Vassago]

Thanks Paul

Thankyou, Paul. I do agree scoring is always great most definately when there's lots of it. Thanks again and I just had to know if others had found that same result or not.

 

[Rusher]

A well written story, but the time element is kind of a problem. You really don't account for what was going on for 8 hours. And does what happened to him have any effect? Does it make him a better master, more in tune to what a submissive wants and needs? Or does it just piss him off? I guess that's for the next chapter.

 

[Master_Vassago]

Thank you Rusher, I agree upon going back over it, I didn't describe the timeline as well as I should have. I do address the whole issue of what effect it does in the next two or three chapters.

Thanks for taking the time to read and respond though.

 

[maggie2002]

The story of Rose

I have been involved with this story since Chapter one. I must admit I do not like incest stories most of the time. This one however hooked me from the beginning. I particularly loved the chapter where the tables were turned. You did it well. I could understand why the women did it, even knowing that once he was free they would get it back in spades.

You handled his emotions well, He was angry, spiteful like a child over being outfoxed by his women. plotting his revenge even while in pain and being dominated. You could see a lot of his character coming forward while he was unable to do anything.

I am impressed with how well you do multiple chapters in one story line. I usually end up writing stories way to long, and I think people give up before they are read. I also like the way in here that you encourage new writers even when you point out a fault your great at going but hey basically its good and fix it and it will be better.

When I first discovered this site, I looked for an editor, he sent me a note back that if I wrote as badly as my e-mail to hiim I didn't have to bother sending him anything. I sulked for a month, sniffled a little and then determined to submit something and see what happened.

Hopefully I keep improving just by reading everything writers like you produce. Meanwhile I have attracted a fair amount of people who like what they read so maybe one day I will be in that top list too

 

[Master_Vassago]

Maggie

I could kiss you, thank you as much as I enjoy feedback what you just wrote just sent happy shivers through My eyes. I am honestly touched.

I feel a bit sheepish though, I didn't recognize your name at first on a feedback a few days ago. I went back but there's a lot to go through if that was you thank you.

Grins, on the editor situation, the person who edits for Me also did one of the upcoming chapters from Rose's point of view. I loved it.

Whoops got sidetracked, anyway she is the one who pushed Me to submit some stories. I did the first one, The Master Finds His Treat for her in email. She asked Me to submit it and now nearly a month later I have published 16 stories, one poem (Which I didn't care how it got voted on at all it was meant to show her publicly how I felt), and have 6 more waiting in submission mode.


So I love the feedback and would be interested to hear any CC. from you in private or in forum. Thanks again Maggie for your kind words. You lifted this Master into a little higher state of euphoria.