BlueSeagull
In Flight
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- Jul 6, 2022
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Hi there! I'm posing in hope of getting some feedback for the start of a new story I'm posting to the non-consensent/reluctant section.
The theme of the piece is that it will be multiple chapters (Clocking in a 3,000-4,000 words each) all about women in a society where those who are not gainfully employed, married, or "kept" by rich relatives are enslaved at 18, and sold to the highest bidder. Anyone familiar with the works of Erenisch then this is set in that world (the author has okayed me using the setting). Specifically in Chasing Paradise women who are due to be enslaved may volunteer to be shipped to an island for the rich to hunt....evade the hunters and they win their freedom.
https://literotica.com/s/chasing-paradise-ch-01
https://literotica.com/s/chasing-paradise-ch-02
I'd be appreciative of any feedback on the first two chapters as I'm currently doing a third pass on chapter 3, and a first pass on chapter 5. There is a general arc to the piece sorted for several of the characters, and an ending but I am open to altering them. I have previously written content for the Erenisch forums but it will likely stay there...I'd be too tempted to rewrite the whole thing if I posted it here!
Thanks for your time
The theme of the piece is that it will be multiple chapters (Clocking in a 3,000-4,000 words each) all about women in a society where those who are not gainfully employed, married, or "kept" by rich relatives are enslaved at 18, and sold to the highest bidder. Anyone familiar with the works of Erenisch then this is set in that world (the author has okayed me using the setting). Specifically in Chasing Paradise women who are due to be enslaved may volunteer to be shipped to an island for the rich to hunt....evade the hunters and they win their freedom.
https://literotica.com/s/chasing-paradise-ch-01
https://literotica.com/s/chasing-paradise-ch-02
I'd be appreciative of any feedback on the first two chapters as I'm currently doing a third pass on chapter 3, and a first pass on chapter 5. There is a general arc to the piece sorted for several of the characters, and an ending but I am open to altering them. I have previously written content for the Erenisch forums but it will likely stay there...I'd be too tempted to rewrite the whole thing if I posted it here!
Thanks for your time