Feedback on my first erotic story?

[MontagnesEstatiques]

https://literotica.com/s/a-study-in-dissonance-and-harmony

It’s set at an all women’s music conservatory in France in 1901 and tries to explore themes of trust, redemption, class, love, community, sacrifice, and the intersection of pleasure and pain. It contains an intense discipline scene as well as lesbian sex.

Any and all feedback much appreciated!

 

[StillStunned]

I haven't read the whole thing yet, but your mention of Hildegard von Bingen in the second paragraph promises that this isn't going to be a run-of-the-mill stroker!

 

[StillStunned]

Also, there are a couple of threads to announce that you've published a new story. You might get a bit more response if you post in those.

Here on the Story Feedback forum:
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And in the Author's Hangout:
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[MontagnesEstatiques]

Also, there are a couple of threads to announce that you've published a new story. You might get a bit more response if you post in those.

Here on the Story Feedback forum:
New Story Advertisements

And in the Author's Hangout:
What have you posted recently?

Thanks!

 

[ElectricBlue]

Very elegant, beautifully written, unravelling slowly. A musicologist's dream.

The style, subject, and setting reminded me of some late Victorian / early Edwardian erotica I read, decades ago. You're very much in your own time and place with this story - it's unusual. There will be many who don't click with the style, but there'll be just as many who will. It's faultless writing. I suspect you're already a writer, because this is very polished, which is rare for a first piece of work here on Lit.

 

[MontagnesEstatiques]

Very elegant, beautifully written, unravelling slowly. A musicologist's dream.

The style, subject, and setting reminded me of some late Victorian / early Edwardian erotica I read, decades ago. You're very much in your own time and place with this story - it's unusual. There will be many who don't click with the style, but there'll be just as many who will. It's faultless writing. I suspect you're already a writer, because this is very polished, which is rare for a first piece of work here on Lit.

Wow, thank you so much for your kind words! I really loved diving into the subject matter and trying to get into a linguistic world that felt appropriate for the setting. I’ve written short stories before, but nothing remotely erotic—mostly slow-paced character driven mystery works or dysfunctional family dramas. The subject matter does draw on one of my former lives (I studied at a music conservatory in my youth before drastically changing directions, though much more recently than 1901).