Feedback on First Series: Gay Male Category

[spiderboi]

I've just had my second chapter of my first story posted and I'm concerned about the flow from one chapter to the next and the amount of exposition that had to go into the start of chapter 2. I'd appreciate any and all feedback though!

Story themes do heavily feature non-consent and fantasy elements.

I Fell into a Gay Video Game
I Fell into a Gay Video Game Ch. 2

 

[KeithD]

Your approach to the story is an interesting one. I don't do video games, so I went into scanning about halfway through the first chapter, but I can see where you would have an audience for this. And you obviously do, as you already have seventeen followers on the strength of just these two very recent entries. The transition between chapters one and two are fine. I think you'll have readers for this just by continuing to tool along as you are.