Thread with BDSM, MC, submission, bimbo etc possibilities:
http://www.chyoo.com:81/index.php/main.story.cover/4402
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Cursed Objects
- Thread starter wicker
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I added two thread's to Cara's plot line.
Two pieces of advice for the story in general.
1) One of the characters has two opening threads. I think the story would have a much better structure if there were only one starting thread for each character.
2) Wicker, you should press enter another time between paragraphs. It makes everything much easier to read, and is also 'proper'.
I really like the story so far. I may also add to the story about the girl with the 'Ring of +3 Horniness'. The Cara story is the first erotic story about the supernatural that has interested me.
If I'm correct, Cara's Choker = Forced Submission, The Ring = Insatiable Lust, and the Bracelet = Split Personality? There is a great chapter in the hentai Manga 'Overflow' about a Split Personality, which offers quite a few hot ideas.
Two pieces of advice for the story in general.
1) One of the characters has two opening threads. I think the story would have a much better structure if there were only one starting thread for each character.
2) Wicker, you should press enter another time between paragraphs. It makes everything much easier to read, and is also 'proper'.
I really like the story so far. I may also add to the story about the girl with the 'Ring of +3 Horniness'. The Cara story is the first erotic story about the supernatural that has interested me.
If I'm correct, Cara's Choker = Forced Submission, The Ring = Insatiable Lust, and the Bracelet = Split Personality? There is a great chapter in the hentai Manga 'Overflow' about a Split Personality, which offers quite a few hot ideas.
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Wicker, the way you wrote the powers of the ring is different than the way the original author wrote them, which is why having two seperate starting threads for Katie seems like a problem.
As for Cassie, I'm not sure what would make more sense, but you certainly don't want the bracelets powers to seem too much like the powers the original author gave the ring.
As for Cassie, I'm not sure what would make more sense, but you certainly don't want the bracelets powers to seem too much like the powers the original author gave the ring.
