The AH Coffee Shop and Reading Room 02: A Comma (is a Restful Pause)

[ChloeTzang]

It never is the eight promised inches. .

They're now saying four to eight and I'm so disappointed. I wanted the full eight I was promised . Snow? Oh? We were talking Snow weren't we. Oooops.

I have to get out of that troll story mindset. I could get into trouble.

 

[TxRad]

They're now saying four to eight and I'm so disappointed. I wanted the full eight I was promised . Snow? Oh? We were talking Snow weren't we. Oooops.

I have to get out of that troll story mindset. I could get into trouble.

I can go in a closet, lock the door, and sit on my hands and still get in trouble. Welcome to the club.

 

[NotWise]

Which way to go is always a question.

I went back and read the story. You left your options wide open.

 

[TxRad]

I went back and read the story. You left your options wide open.

Thanks for the read.

Yeah, I did, now which one fits the time and place. Which one make a better story. Having too many options is a problem all its own.

Originally I never intended to write more than I had but now.... I keep getting the feeling I need to do more. This is not something I'm used too. Usually I walk away when I think I'm done. There is more there but I'm not sure what or where it should be or go.

ETA: The main question is do I want to do this story for Lit or possible for the mainstream.

 

[NotWise]

Thanks for the read.

Yeah, I did, now which one fits the time and place. Which one make a better story. Having too many options is a problem all its own.

Originally I never intended to write more than I had but now.... I keep getting the feeling I need to do more. This is not something I'm used too. Usually I walk away when I think I'm done. There is more there but I'm not sure what or where it should be or go.

ETA: The main question is do I want to do this story for Lit or possible for the mainstream.

FWIW, I thought it read like the opening of a longer story more than it did like a stand-alone story. You introduced a lot of characters in a variety of relationships to the main character. Not the least of which would be the easily-forgotten 'boss' of the now-deceased robbers.

 

[TxRad]

FWIW, I thought it read like the opening of a longer story more than it did like a stand-alone story. You introduced a lot of characters in a variety of relationships to the main character. Not the least of which would be the easily-forgotten 'boss' of the now-deceased robbers.

Yeah, that's what keeps bugging me. Too many loose ends and yes, there is a lot more story that can be had.

I'm not sure where you got the "Boss" for the bandits from. The guy with the fancy rifle was the leader of what was left of the gang.

It was more of a romance with a lot of directions is how I saw it and still see it. And with the start of the second part, I've added in the daughter or daughters of an Indian chief. The list keeps on growing.

 

[NotWise]

Yeah, that's what keeps bugging me. Too many loose ends and yes, there is a lot more story that can be had.

I'm not sure where you got the "Boss" for the bandits from. The guy with the fancy rifle was the leader of what was left of the gang.

It was more of a romance with a lot of directions is how I saw it and still see it. And with the start of the second part, I've added in the daughter or daughters of an Indian chief. The list keeps on growing.

This is where the boss reference came from:

At twelve to fifteen dollars apiece, the eight horses were worth a small fortune and the boss would be pissed if he lost them. Getting the boss pissed wasn't a healthy idea for any reason, but money was the worst one at the present time. Their last bank job had netted them a whole nineteen dollars and had gotten the boss's brother killed.

I don't think the shooter was ever described as being the boss, so I assumed there was a third, and possibly more dangerous, outlaw out there. At any rate, you would have a built-in antagonist (other than nature itself) if you wanted one.

Having all those possible love interests is great if the story stays on Lit. Is it such an advantage if you write it for the mainstream? I'd think that if you want a plot-driven romance then having more than two women involved would be a little messy.

 

[TxRad]

This is where the boss reference came from:



I don't think the shooter was ever described as being the boss, so I assumed there was a third, and possibly more dangerous, outlaw out there. At any rate, you would have a built-in antagonist (other than nature itself) if you wanted one.

Having all those possible love interests is great if the story stays on Lit. Is it such an advantage if you write it for the mainstream? I'd think that if you want a plot-driven romance then having more than two women involved would be a little messy.

The shooter is who I was referring to. Maybe I need to clarify that somehow.

You are correct on the number of love interests and mainstream. But so far he has been a gentleman. I had planned on the return of the young woman he saved. That may still be my point. But that opens a whole new can of worms. Who is she and why was she traveling through that country alone.

I think I just need to get back on track with the original line and quit making things complicated.

Thanks for the help.

 

[Handley_Page]

According to my daughter this afternoon, It snowed today in West Yorkshire (well - her part, anyway).

But now - Tea.
And a spare cup (dainty china) for Chloe.

 

[ishtat]

Maximum temperature forecast for Sydney today is 77F. It seems like it has been over 80F since September last year. Never ending summers can get a bit tedious - and it'll be warmer again by Thursday.

 

[NotWise]

Maximum temperature forecast for Sydney today is 77F. It seems like it has been over 80F since September last year. Never ending summers can get a bit tedious - and it'll be warmer again by Thursday.

Condolences. That was about the same as our high today, but we're heading into summer, not out.

 

[sharingfantasies]

It never is the eight promised inches.

Doing some research on Westerns. I wrote one for BlackRandi's compilation a while back. I was happy the way it turned out. Now I'm doing a second chapter and I'm wondering where it should go. I left several options in the first one and have already added another in this one.

Which way to go is always a question.

Choose your own adventure book?

 

[MagicaPractica]

Was snowing this morning when I got up, sun and 50 by evening. Headache in between.

 

[NotWise]

Choose your own adventure book?

I said a few months ago that I should write a western, but it would have to be a neowestern. TxRad has me thinking about that again. I can make a Romance out of it, and maybe in time for the Summer Luvin' contest.

My brother-in-law and his wife have a ranch out east of here. They've had the most romantic relationship of anyone I know. I may put it in their location; I'll take their red mesas, the dust devils in the valley and the annual burst of life in the bedrock pools beside their house, but put a new story in their place.

 

[ChloeTzang]

Was snowing this morning when I got up, sun and 50 by evening. Headache in between.

6-8 inches of snow so far today with more tonight and coooooold. Low 20's F and down to minus 5 tonight. Wasn't so bad, nowhere near as bad as they made it sound. Cruised into work and kind of fishtailed home. No chupacabras tho - must've been a bit chilly for them.

Sympathies on the headache

 

[NotWise]

6-8 inches of snow so far today with more tonight and coooooold. Low 20's F and down to minus 5 tonight. Wasn't so bad, nowhere near as bad as they made it sound. Cruised into work and kind of fishtailed home. No chupacabras tho - must've been a bit chilly for them.

Ya might want to watch out for the Yetis, though.

 

[oggbashan]

...

But now - Tea.
And a spare cup (dainty china) for Chloe.

Useless information:

Fine porcelain can withstand heat better than ordinary china. If you were wealthy in the 19th Century and could afford to use porcelain - your tea was poured tea first, milk after.

If you couldn't afford porcelain, you put the milk in first so that the hot tea wouldn't crack the cup.

Whether you were wealthy or just comfortable, both of you complained about your clumsy servants who could smash the cups when washing up.

If you were poor? You used enamel mugs. Very little could damage them.

Chloe's beverages should only be served in the finest ware...

Me? As long as it holds the liquid anything will do.

 

[TxRad]

I've always been a mug sort of guy.

Morning all,

The coffee is fresh and the kettle hot, so help your self.

I think the morning calls for pancakes.

 

[MagicaPractica]

I've always been a mug sort of guy.

Morning all,

The coffee is fresh and the kettle hot, so help your self.

I think the morning calls for pancakes.

I've accumulated a few favorite mugs, all very LARGE. Coffee time! Happy Tuesday, peoples!

 

[NotWise]

The Night Shift was filming at the rail yard this morning, and someone else had a block sealed off just north of there for filming. I have no idea who they were but they made me detour off my route. The police had a very large presence around the site.

Nicole Kidman is supposed to be in town through mid-April to film The Goldfinch. Maybe that's what it was about, or maybe it was because of the number of encamped homeless people they had to move off the site.

 

[Handley_Page]

Ah - Coffee.
Just the job.

PS. If anyone want some rain, just bring your buckets.
It am p1$$ing down round here

 

[SolarRay]

Ah - Coffee.
Just the job.

PS. If anyone want some rain, just bring your buckets.
It am p1$$ing down round here

Same here.

We had a pleasant and sunny Easter, followed by a freak snow, and now it's raining cats and dogs. People are always asking if they can divide their story chapters across multiple categories, but apparently the weather has absolutely no reservations about it!

 

[Handley_Page]

Time for a cup of Tea, I think.
I do hope the rain holds off.

 

[MagicaPractica]

A seltzer before bed. I'm slightly restless, but mostly tired. Sigh.

 

[Hypoxia]

I'll consider coffee in the morning. Or a nasty strong tea. Whatever unleashes me.

We lounged the last couple days. Tomorrow, into town for minor but needed shopping. Then we'll await the incoming atmospheric river, a new Pineapple Express threatening Oroville Dam. Uh, hey there, weather gods, our reservoirs are full, y'all can stop now.

Can we drive over the mountains and back before the passes close? Dare we try? Even with another quadruple espresso?