time for me to whine

[QuidProQuo77]

I get plenty of feedback on plot, but nobody seems to notice when I try to inject humor into my dialogue.

example: A woman bartender confronts a heartbreaker to throw her out of the bar: "Get your money-grubbing ass out of my bar, little missy. I reserve the right to deny service to drunks and whores, and you ain't bought a single drink yet, so guess what that makes you? Now GIT!"

I cracked up when I wrote that, and it still makes me smile. I hope my readers enjoy it, even if they don't say so...

 

[sr71plt]

I haven't found Lit. readers to be very interested in humor.

 

[SikFuk]

I would have to agree with SR71. Although some of my LIT writing has been favorably compared to Carl Hiaasen, my scores don't show it. It seems to me the average LIT reader is put off by humor, as if it somehow denigrates the "purity" of erotica. I suspect if Mark Twain posted erotica here, he'd die trying before he ever got a red H.

 

[TxRad]

As far as humor and comments go, "It was a fun read" about tops the cake.

Although my one How to about picking up women at Wal Mart did get some comments along the lines of people laughing their asses off. But I'm not sure if it was at the jokes or the subject matter.

 

[SamScribble]

As the previous commenters have suggested, maybe you have chosen the wrong site. Lit readers don't seem to get humour, irony, or anything else in that arena. There are exceptions, of course. Two or three readers have commented favourably on the (subtle) humour in my stories. But two or three is not a lot in several thousand.

 

[redzinger]

Yay! My next contest entry is Humour/Satire. Yay. #leadballoon

 

[Handley_Page]

I get plenty of feedback on plot, but nobody seems to notice when I try to inject humor into my dialogue.

example: A woman bartender confronts a heartbreaker to throw her out of the bar: "Get your money-grubbing ass out of my bar, little missy. I reserve the right to deny service to drunks and whores, and you ain't bought a single drink yet, so guess what that makes you? Now GIT!"

I cracked up when I wrote that, and it still makes me smile. I hope my readers enjoy it, even if they don't say so...

I fear that, in addition to the comments already made concerning popularity of humour, there's the problem of the nature of humour itself. I like humorous stories.
Occasionally, I even get to write one or two.
But my humour is not necessarily in the same vein as yours: your example above raised little more than a smile, for example. [I think it demands a response from missy].

Another example; do you find P G Wodehouse amusing ? You know, the Blandings Castle stories with the urbane Jeeves ?
I do.

It is, admittedly, a bit of a problem.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

As far as humor and comments go, "It was a fun read" about tops the cake.

Although my one How to about picking up women at Wal Mart did get some comments along the lines of people laughing their asses off. But I'm not sure if it was at the jokes or the subject matter.

I laugh at your writing all the time.

 

[jsmiam]

Well, there is a place for it: It's just got hardly any readers

I posted a story to the Humor & Satire category over 3 weeks ago, and it's still highlighted as one of the new stories there, only 7th from the top of the list. After the 3 weeks, it's at 4995 readers (I didn't say "almost 5,000" because it might be weeks before it gets to 5,000). A few people said it made them laugh, and one critic didn't like it (all 5 comments posted are still there). It was fun to write, which (for me) made it all worthwhile. There's also an interesting backdrop for the story: a Lit forum post that made me laugh was the inspiration for writing it. So if the person asking about a picture inspiring a story (another thread) reads this, add my input too: Forum posts can inspire stories too!

I inject things that *I* think are funny into a lot of my writing too, but I'm basically a cornball: I get as much pleasure from making people groan as I do from making them laugh.

My vote to you: Keep it up!

 

[Bramblethorn]

I've had an occasional favourable comment on humour in my stories (I think "Counting to Eleven" more than others, since it ends with a punchline). It's not a major theme, but I find it works well as a seasoning for other things.

 

[oggbashan]

Much of my writing is humorous.

But it is British humour (note the spelling) and many readers don't understand that it is humor. They think I am writing a serious story in the wrong category.

Some of it is deliberately subtle; some is slapstick; some is satire.

The result?

My humour is almost guaranteed to annoy someone.

This one baffles some:

https://www.literotica.com/s/two-tarts-in-a-kitchen

 

[someoneyouknow]

Yay! My next contest entry is Humour/Satire. Yay. #leadballoon

To get a bit off topic, Mythbusters showed you can make a balloon out of lead and get it to fly (or at least lift off):

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HZSkM-QEeU

I now use the phrase, "Like a granite balloon."

 

[HandsInTheDark]

I fear that, in addition to the comments already made concerning popularity of humour, there's the problem of the nature of humour itself. I like humorous stories.
Occasionally, I even get to write one or two.
But my humour is not necessarily in the same vein as yours: your example above raised little more than a smile, for example. [I think it demands a response from missy].

Another example; do you find P G Wodehouse amusing ? You know, the Blandings Castle stories with the urbane Jeeves ?
I do.

It is, admittedly, a bit of a problem.

This. If there's anything that shows more variation than sexual interests, it's what people find funny.

I've added humor to a few of my stories and seen the laugh-out-loud result from a few readers, but it only seems to work if it's a light touch in a long story with well developed characters. And for every three people who pointed out something as very funny, there's one who just didn't get it.

My hat's off to standup comedians who can walk on stage and get laughter from crowds.

No offense to the OP, but a joke of the form "You're A or B, and you have characteristic-of-A so you ain't no B" is more or less stock insult material and doesn't even get a smile from me anymore. You can make it funny if you give the girl some sort of really crushing response that no one sees coming, but one didn't occur to me.

And YES to Wodehouse.

 

[Weird Harold]

I get plenty of feedback on plot, but nobody seems to notice when I try to inject humor into my dialogue.

If you only provide incidental humor in dialogue, I'm not surprised you don't get any comments on the humor -- add enough, you might get more comments about characterization.

Unless you're writing for the Humor/Satire category, (attempted) humor is just an aspect of a character's personality to most readers.

 

[PennLady]

I get plenty of feedback on plot, but nobody seems to notice when I try to inject humor into my dialogue.

example: A woman bartender confronts a heartbreaker to throw her out of the bar: "Get your money-grubbing ass out of my bar, little missy. I reserve the right to deny service to drunks and whores, and you ain't bought a single drink yet, so guess what that makes you? Now GIT!"

I cracked up when I wrote that, and it still makes me smile. I hope my readers enjoy it, even if they don't say so...

I'm sure some readers will like that, although I have to say it didn't do much for me, at least not out of context.

I inject humor -- or try to -- where I can, where I think it fits. I think I've gotten a few positive comments on it, which is cool, so I think readers like humor well enough. It just may be the main thing they're looking for, or they may not comment on it.

 

[Swilly]

To me, humor is part of character and story development. I add it to many of my stories, sometimes cracking myself up as I write...but I don't expect that the humor would be the focus of feedback or a comment. It becomes part of who the characters are, so I'm much more likely to get feedback that a particular character is interesting or likable.

 

[DreamCloud]

Straight humor is very difficult in writing. Timing is everything and eyes can stray to the future, absorbing the punchline before the delivery can be completed. I'm not sure one-liners work well in text. I think you may have to separate the delivery from the punchline by a sentence or two.

Subtle humor is a lot easier.

 

[redzinger]

I hardly get any feedback.

*puts violins away*


On Lit, I like bashfullyshameless and Lien_Geller (sp?) for lighthearted amusement.

Very few writers actually make me lol. Janet Evanovich, Molly Watson, Mike Ripley (Angel series), and Carl Hiaasen are the only four I can recall off the top of my head.

 

[sr71plt]

In general, humor is a eroticism killer, so it stands to reason that it needs to be carefully handled in the writing of erotica.

 

[SikFuk]

...

Very few writers actually make me lol. Janet Evanovich, Molly Watson, Mike Ripley (Angel series), and Carl Hiaasen are the only four I can recall off the top of my head.

Check out Stacy Richter - mainstream short stories, one collection on Scribner, one on a smaller publisher.

One of her stories from "My Date With Satan" is a satire on celebrity. A family dog discovers it has a talent for making art out of dirt and sticks in the back yard. The dog receives national acclaim and gets interviewed by People Magazine... The rest of her stories are about people.

 

[ScouriesWorld]

Here's a comment someone made on one of jim's stories (Just A Cop's Cock Ch 1). Readers regularly comment on his sense of humour... I suggest you read this wonderful story tonight...

"I have never laughed so hard reading porn. The first page was hilarious. The sex wasn't bad but the humor was WAY better. Kinda weird now that i think about it."​

 

[ScouriesWorld]

here's a few comments on another of jim's stories...

it does show that you can get comments on the humor...

story about Axel's Penis...

https://www.literotica.com/s/axel-s-penis-and-mom-and-annika

Now that was hot and hilarious
Minor point--a better name than Tiger Woody for a big yellow and black striped dildo is Big Ben. Of more concern to me is that www dot succorious sells wooden penises. “Ones that were apparently good for the environment,” you say. Oh yeah, what environment are they good for? Not for the environment between a girl’s legs I wouldn’t think. Just imagine the splinter problem! Anyway, another great story from Literotica’s favorite son and author. Good fuck in the contest!

Great Fun
Fun to read, had me laughing and horny at the same time

Great Humor!
This is the most humorous erotic story I have read in some time. Good Work!

Hilarious!!
I wish I could give this story a 10. Not enough comedy porn being written. It’s all too damn serious! Including what I write!
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[ScouriesWorld]

another one to check out...

Candy Cane Cocked...

https://www.literotica.com/s/candy-cane-cocked-cousin-and-mom?page=4

I rarely pay attention to the comments of others, good or bad. I read for MY pleasure and this story gave me great pleasure. Well written, good grammar, very funny dialogue and it progressed well and smoothly.

Thanks for the FUN.

Your stories are FUN and FUNNY. The sex is good too. LOL. A big fan, Marie


What a lovely romantic story
so full of humor, tension and passion and beautiful sexy moments that are not in your face - loved reading it - well done.
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[ScouriesWorld]

and how about the famous Doc Von Scouries story...

Doc Von Scouries

https://www.literotica.com/s/doc-von-scouries-case-01

Fabulous Start

I liked very much, it was funny to read and also very hot, please continued the case's soon!!!!!

enjoyable and funny

I look forward to reading about the good doctor's sessions with the Chinese dentist. I assumed that they'll be scheduled at the appropriate time: tooth hurty.

delightful

The combination of humor and naughtiness is delightful as ever. I am looking forward to many - I hope - interesting cases.

Yes, let's hear about the tough case with the Chinese lady dentist...

What a riot! I planned to be a gynocologist but I was too lazy to study that hard so I became a nurse. This story was a riot. Yes, I know, I have already said that. It was worth repeating.
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[TxRad]

Oh look an alt is out flooding the thread with his own bullshit. What? Aren't people paying attention to your fake contests or your fake awards or your fake lists?

Most people are laughing at his crappy juvenile writing and flat cardboard characters.