Stories that are so hot sexually!

[KINKYCanada]

This is not a thread to call anyone out or single out an author, just a general discussion about stories where the sex is super hot but the build up is just not there! I am a man who wants to know how the people got to where they are fucking! What happened to them. I love the build up! Anyone else with me?

Again please don't use writers names that is not my intent!

KC

 

[Hypoxia]

One technique is to start the story with a bang, as it were, lead off with hot sex to grab readers' eyes. (If you've got'em by the eyeballs, their hearts and minds will follow.) THEN introduce the backstory on how+why it happened. I think you may be complaining about tales that omit the backstory. That may be a technique thang too, if the author's intent is a surreal piece; a clever writer may insinuate a backstory piecemeal into the narrative. Or it just may be sloppy, lazy writing, or hardcore stroker stuff. You might look at the statistics on the stories you're thinking of -- how are they on views and votes? Do they have a significant audience? Some of it is crowd-pleasing stuff. Go figure.

 

[BuckyDuckman]

How much lead-up there should be is a common topic discussed among authors. Some authors include an apologetic author's note at the beginning for all the story that happens before the sex begins, which I find interesting, too.

Even outside the erotic writing world, where to start the story is a common question for authors. Hypoxia cites a common technique: start with a bang. I often do that. Other common writing advice is "Start as close to the action as possible." And I try to do that, too.

Characters as people have a life that began before their story and continues after the story is told, too. A short story captures a tiny slice of their life and reveals an equally tiny slice of the characters.

Of course, here on Literotica, you'll find plenty of stories that amount to little more than descriptions of body parts intersecting. Some like those. For me? I attack my Lit stories as close to the action/problem as possible. If I can start with a bang, I do. And typically, there's something about the sex that changes a character. I try to make the sex the plot. If the characters don't have sex, there isn't a story, because it's a sex story. If I wind up describing a character you want to see drink a cup of coffee, so much the better.

 

[JLCC]

For the only story for which I requested public feedback, I was advised that, despite a measure of back story, the back story was irrelevant because it wasn't well developed. I was writing porn, not erotica.

This caused me to rework a couple of strokers I had in the hopper and they have certainly been more well-received, gaining almost a full 1.0 added to overall ratings.

I had an editor briefly who encouraged that too.

Getting into that story development helped me with my characters. Hopefully they are more real.

 

[soflabbwlvr]

For the most part, I write stories that have sex--usually a lot of sex. But the sex has a context. It is the result of character actions, reactions, and events that preceded the dirty business. It is the climax--or a climax--to the story that led up to to that point. As a result, I often go three or four pages into a story (or chapter) before the sexual climax begins. Sometimes if I think I may be testing the patience of my readers, I will add something sexy earlier in the story--such as a secondary character having off-camera sex or a main character having sexy thoughts--just to remind readers that they are reading a sex story.

I have never had a complaint that there wasn't enough sex or that the story took too long to get there.

 

[49greg]

I've always liked a build up. But it's a fine line, how much is too much? Sometimes it just too drawn out and I give up.

I've got a few notes scribbled about a continuation of a story I did for the summer loving contest last year. It's a first time story with two college age kids. But during the story the inexperienced guy finds out that his mom and the parents of his paramour have been swingers for years.

My continuation, so far, is the mother's story, starting with her laying naked next to her lover, thinking about how she got to this point. My idea is that the reader will know from the start that there's going to be some sex further down in the story but now I have to figure out what the mom's story is and how far down into the story I go before I get to some rumpy-pumpy-oooh-lah-la.

And I need to re-read my original story to find out how much I already wrote about the mom and her swinging partners.

 

[Hypoxia]

My continuation, so far, is the mother's story, starting with her laying naked next to her lover, thinking about how she got to this point. My idea is that the reader will know from the start that there's going to be some sex further down in the story but now I have to figure out what the mom's story is and how far down into the story I go before I get to some rumpy-pumpy-oooh-lah-la.

That's easy. START with the rumpy-pumpy-oooh-lah-la, hips pounding, nips bouncing, lips flashing, juices dripping, voices exclaiming. Then, in afterglow, mom flashes back on the events leading to this point in space-time. If those events include regular fornications, all the better.

Why is she there? Her motivation is buried deep within her subconscious, and only emerges during orgasmic afterglow, when she can be honest with herself.

A variant story may have other kickstarts. She's in or en route to court or a wedding or funeral, and reminisces. She's deep in everyday life and something triggers her memories. Someone (the son?) finds her diary or not-so-hidden blog and reads her accounts of events. She shouts or curses or sings or blows a long musical note; narrative proceeds from there. Are many bunnies using the same plot mechanism: SOMETHING happens up front, and the story explains & explores that.

And I need to re-read my original story to find out how much I already wrote about the mom and her swinging partners.

Yeah, it's good to be consistent. Make sure Molly doesn't morph from bi Irish redhead to tg Cornish fishwife.

 

[Desiremakesmeweak]

'A character you want to see drink a cup of coffee...' Aw that's so cool. Loved that.

On the one hand certainly everyone writing here is somewhat restricted by what probably is an expectation among most readers here to er, 'get on with the good bits.' It's not exactly the same expected format/style of what you get in novels.

At the same time it can be a positive challenge to find shorter ways of developing background stories.

I must admit I still have most of my top cards still left up my sleeve in this respect of driving character and backstory development.

There also appears to me at least, to be two separate and distinct sets of readers - one that votes ONLY looking for the stroke sentences and words, and another that does appreciate everything else that goes into a more complete narrative.

What am I waiting for to play one or two more of these 'top cards?' Well, I don't have to yet because I'm pretty sure I'll be using BuckyDuckman's words as an opening gambit soon...

I will attribute them of course.

I mean to say, after all, what/who the hell IS someone you would like to see drink a cup of coffee...?

 

[Desiremakesmeweak]

My god though I do like that - it gives objective distance, focal length to a character image, doesn't it.

...someone you would like to see drink a cup of coffee.

 

[TxRad]

Long buildups? Who me?

Some of my best scoring stories are the ones with a long buildup to an orgy, or a climax for one and all.

But and there is always a butt... Over the years I've learned to integrate the back story in as I go. Characters develop from names to people as we go. I think it makes it easier on the reader but harder on the writer to pull it off.

Butt then again, that's just my opinion.

 

[RoyceConnors]

I've always liked a build up. But it's a fine line, how much is too much? Sometimes it just too drawn out and I give up.

I've got a few notes scribbled about a continuation of a story I did for the summer loving contest last year. It's a first time story with two college age kids. But during the story the inexperienced guy finds out that his mom and the parents of his paramour have been swingers for years.

My continuation, so far, is the mother's story, starting with her laying naked next to her lover, thinking about how she got to this point. My idea is that the reader will know from the start that there's going to be some sex further down in the story but now I have to figure out what the mom's story is and how far down into the story I go before I get to some rumpy-pumpy-oooh-lah-la.

And I need to re-read my original story to find out how much I already wrote about the mom and her swinging partners.

I would do her story and the sex at the same time, blending both during the scene and have it explain why she's with him and why she does what she does. Everything she does to him can bring about something in her to explain herself and avoid lengthy passages later on. Two Lit pages worth is all it would take and you're into the story again. JAT

 

[TxRad]

My god though I do like that - it gives objective distance, focal length to a character image, doesn't it.

...someone you would like to see drink a cup of coffee.

Lina sat on the light gray chaise lounge sipping a cup of coffee, holding the cup with both hands. Her arms had her bare breasts squeezed together. Her long legs were stretch out in front of her, her ankles crossed. Her dark skin was a deep contrast to the light colored material of the chair.

How is that for a someone?

 

[RoyceConnors]

Lina sat on the light gray chaise lounge sipping a cup of coffee, holding the cup with both hands, lightly tapping the sides with her fingers in a slow rhythm.. Her arms had her bare breasts squeezed together, her ebony nipples stiffly poking from their perch.. Her long legs were stretch out in front of her, her ankles crossed, gently squeezing them together to stimulate her clit gently.. Her dark skin was a deep contrast to the light colored material of the chair, but her charcoal eyes held a mystique in what she was thinking..

How is that for a someone?

I thought she needed a bit of character, lol

 

[tamgreen]

I'm certainly a person who needs an actual story, with actual characters. Certainly I've had moments of wanting to read a quick stroker, but I have a hard time writing them. The one time I tried writing a quick stroker, my readers complained of it being rushed, and criticized me for writing a fuckfest without any real romance, lol. It comes down to "know your audience" I suppose, and when you have a specific style, you'll attract specific followers.

I don't give much thought to drawing people in on a sexual level from the first sentence. I start with engaging characters... my readers want characters they care about, and/or can identify with, not just ones who immediately exude sexuality. Once the reader feels that connection, having a slow buildup to a sexual encounter can be intensely satisfying. If most readers take a glance at page one of a story of mine, see no fucking yet, and move on, I don't give a crap. The sort of readers who want to invest emotionally in my stories are the audience I am writing for, and they love my stories even (or especially) when they're lengthy and a very slow burn.

 

[TxRad]

I thought she needed a bit of character, lol

Good job. Run with it. I have far too much on my plate at the moment.

 

[lucidkaos]

Lead in

I suppose for most authors the amount of build-up would be in direct correlation with the length of the story. Not to mention plot objectives and overall tone of the story.

 

[Bramblethorn]

This is not a thread to call anyone out or single out an author, just a general discussion about stories where the sex is super hot but the build up is just not there! I am a man who wants to know how the people got to where they are fucking! What happened to them. I love the build up! Anyone else with me?

Again please don't use writers names that is not my intent!

KC

Yes, I enjoy stories with a good buildup; I'd rather read something with a hot buildup and "fade to black" sex than one that skimps on the buildup.

I also like stories that stick around for the aftermath.

 

[tamgreen]

I also like stories that stick around for the aftermath.

^ Thanks, that's really good to hear! While I always build up a lot, I tend to be unsure about endings as I worry once the sex is over people might just stop reading....

 

[legerdemer]

^ Thanks, that's really good to hear! While I always build up a lot, I tend to be unsure about endings as I worry once the sex is over people might just stop reading....

That's one of my pet peeves - frequently the stories don't cover the consequences. But then, if they are truly short stories, that makes sense.

 

[tamgreen]

Still, a short story can (and should) still be a complete story. Otherwise it's just... a scene.

 

[lovecraft68]

Still, a short story can (and should) still be a complete story. Otherwise it's just... a scene.

I get caught up on that thought...many shorts here to me read like a porn video. People show up, people have sex, end of story. There is nothing to it, we know nothing of the people other than names and the dimensions of their sex organs....

For a story to work for me there needs to be conflict and build up. Who are they, what leads them to want each other, why are they holding back?

 

[HandsInTheDark]

I don't like starting with sex. Without context, sex is just babymaking, and not particularly erotic. I try to hook the reader on something else first - personal conflict, forced foreplay that doesn't end in actual sex, sad reminiscing, anything at all to make the character interesting. Once the reader is curious, you can toy with him or her all you want, adding heat, until the sex scene itself nails the reader right between the thighs. Highest compliment I can get: "Nice slow burn to this story, and I came hard."

 

[tamgreen]

Totally agreeing with you guys. I love getting comments about how much my stories turned people on or made them cum hard... but probably one of the highest compliments I ever got in a story comment was "I don't usually read Literotica stories for non-masturbatory reasons...." For me it needs to be more than just a sexual thrill. It needs to be a story. And when I get comments like that one, or about how I made someone cry, or how they fell in love with a character, or how much someone appreciated the realism, dialogue, etc.... that's when I really feel I've succeeded in something. I don't mind people reading or writing just for a stroke, but personally I'm in it for so much more.

 

[KINKYCanada]

Thank you for all the opinions to my query ! I do see a lot of views here and I know as I always have, that it's a balancing act! Glad to see that I am not the only one who wants more out of their smut! lol

KC