Scouries scores the nude day contest entries

[scouries]

STORY 28 – ‘A Day at the Beach’ by FunDareGuy

STORY 28 – ‘A Day at the Beach’ by FunDareGuy

There were no new stories posted today but this guy’s story should definitely be in the contest. This story is closer to the contest theme than any produced yet. Living down here on South Beach I’ve heard these exact conversations a hundred times. Girls visiting from the north, who after a day or two of watching, finally, shyly, nervously undo their tops, baring their beauties to the sun for the first time since they were six or seven year olds.

And their boyfriends, not sure whether to be proud or embarrassed. Sometimes it’s the girl who initiates the nudity, sometimes, like in this story, the man. It’s a fun dance to watch play out as you sit watching. Almost invariably, after ten or fifteen minutes, both partners become comfortable with something that they never, ever thought they’d do. I’ve even been asked to snap pictures of smiling, giggling couples, pictures to take home, memories for those cold northern nights.

4 No sex but this is so true to life. Too bad he didn’t put chapter two, the trip to Haulover, with this one.

If I read the above post correctly (and I'm not sure I did), I think I'm being acused of commenting on this persons story anonymously. Sorry, not me. I think I've shown on this thread I'm quite prepared to use my name. I'm not even sure what previous post she's referring to - this is the first time I've conciously seen your name. I'd promise to read the story in question but not if its 18 pages long. Simply not enough time now. I did like your comments on Selena's story though. You're one of the only people who've given their own honest review of one of the stories I've reviewed. It's what I was hoping would be the response. Honest discussion.

Now, its off to the beach for me…

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Get off Earl, Selena. He's right, you came across as condescending and facetious given the previous posts.

Agreed. Not your finest moment.

Do you read Mr. Scouries posts at all or do you just giggle in glee at the drama?

Do you just want to champion something?

You've turned a blind eye to:
1. the agenda Scouries came onto the forum with in posting these reviews
2. the obvious errors he's made in his assessments (he clearly didn't even understand what the "nude day" contest theme was about--unless it had "nude day" or "nudist colony" in the story, it was deemed "not on topic.")
3. the condescending attitude and facetiousness in Scouries reviews
4. the accusations of cheating that he has made in this thread (accusing people of creating alts to enter contests they are ineligible to win)

If you want to see honest reviews, perhaps you might look up at the sticky at the top of the author's hangout. There are seven of us who have been giving kudos and constructive criticism for weeks to new and established authors as stories come out on the "New" lists. We aren't doing it with an agenda, we're doing it because we appreciate good writing and want to encourage writers.

I don't take what he says about anyone's writing or stories seriously, I've said so. That's my personal preference. I do, however, take offense to him using the AH and the contest entries to prove some point about the contests in general. Nothing I can do to stop him *shrug*... free country. But I am not going to sit silently by while he 1.) accuses me of cheating 2.) accuses me of writing a story just to contribute to the drama and 3.) accuses me of plagarizing or at the very least "copying" or "imitating" his own style.

Whether my post in response was condescending or facetious? Well, so what if it was? I'm not debating him... I'm responding to what essentially amounts to a personal attack.

 

[TheEarl]

Do you read Mr. Scouries posts at all or do you just giggle in glee at the drama?

Do you just want to champion something?

You've turned a blind eye to:
1. the agenda Scouries came onto the forum with in posting these reviews
2. the obvious errors he's made in his assessments (he clearly didn't even understand what the "nude day" contest theme was about--unless it had "nude day" or "nudist colony" in the story, it was deemed "not on topic.")
3. the condescending attitude and facetiousness in Scouries reviews
4. the accusations of cheating that he has made in this thread (accusing people of creating alts to enter contests they are ineligible to win)

If you want to see honest reviews, perhaps you might look up at the sticky at the top of the author's hangout. There are seven of us who have been giving kudos and constructive criticism for weeks to new and established authors as stories come out on the "New" lists. We aren't doing it with an agenda, we're doing it because we appreciate good writing and want to encourage writers.

I don't take what he says about anyone's writing or stories seriously, I've said so. That's my personal preference. I do, however, take offense to him using the AH and the contest entries to prove some point about the contests in general. Nothing I can do to stop him *shrug*... free country. But I am not going to sit silently by while he 1.) accuses me of cheating 2.) accuses me of writing a story just to contribute to the drama and 3.) accuses me of plagarizing or at the very least "copying" or "imitating" his own style.

Whether my post in response was condescending or facetious? Well, so what if it was? I'm not debating him... I'm responding to what essentially amounts to a personal attack.

Oi! Yui wasn't defending Scouries. She was defending me.

The Earl

 

[TheEarl]

I've just realised what the issue here is.

When I said "I was on your side until a minute ago" I was talking to Scouries. I was on his side until he was a knob end to you. However, I've just reread and realised that my post was directly after yours, so it looked like I was replying to you.

That's why I accused you of being facetious. Cause it looked like you were being snide to me after I'd attacked the guy jumping in on you. Yui thought you were being snide to me as well, which is why she jumped in.

The wonders of textual conversation.

The Earl

 

[Selena_Kitt]

I've just realised what the issue here is.

When I said "I was on your side until a minute ago" I was talking to Scouries. I was on his side until he was a knob end to you. However, I've just reread and realised that my post was directly after yours, so it looked like I was replying to you.

That's why I accused you of being facetious. Cause it looked like you were being snide to me after I'd attacked the guy jumping in on you. Yui thought you were being snide to me as well, which is why she jumped in.

The wonders of textual conversation.

The Earl

Oh.

*sheepish*

Sorry, Earl.

Damn, could you please put in quotes who you're responding to, man!?

Sorry, yui...

damn.

well, I feel better, anyway....

 

[TheEarl]

<laughs> Litizens rock, don't we?

The Earl

 

[yui]

Do you read Mr. Scouries posts at all or do you just giggle in glee at the drama?

I'm fluff, but not so well known for giggling at drama; thank you for asking. As Earl has pointed out, I was defending him (the as an answer tends to make one see a bit red-ish; and so don't mess with my peeps), not Scouries. Thanks for the apology and the same to you - tho I read the thread, I only saw the attack on Earl.

Peace to you,

Yui

 

[scouries]

STORY 29 – ‘Naked Slave Submission’ by G-String_Vixen

STORY 29 – ‘Naked Slave Submission’ by G-String_Vixen

Stories that evoke John Norman’s Gor series can’t be all bad. All men in some small area of their minds are aroused by the thought of sexy young slave girls servicing them. Perhaps too many adjectives but all in all G-String gives good sex.

3 About a 3.3 I rounded down to 3. After reading the story and checking the authors bio couldn’t help wonder if this wasn’t some alt? My two small complaints – the first, again, I’m sorry but I don’t like the long paragraphs and the lack of dialogue. Second, certain lines, like ‘outrageously hot young guys’ and ‘knight in shining armor’ didn’t fit with the time and locale and jarred. Good overall, not great

 

[scouries]

STORY 30 – ‘Zoea: My Wife’ by DGHear

STORY 30 – ‘Zoea: My Wife’ by DGHear

I’ve never read you before and yet you’ve got a huge number of stories listed and seem to be famous! I was tired after two paragraphs, after reading the unrelenting staccato delivery, short sentence after short sentence pounded out, fuck… I understand though why you’re popular; the realistic, hard words become mesmerizing.

4 It’s not erotica so no 5 but a good entertaining read.

 

[scouries]

STORY 31 – ‘Hot Tub BJ ’ by buntinggurl

STORY 31 – ‘Hot Tub BJ ’ by buntinggurl

Short and sweet! I notice this story was already put on Lit last month with a different title. Don’t know if this is contrary to the spirit of the contest or not.

2 Between 2 and 3 – maybe 2.45. I was certainly in the hot tub with you! Maybe ended the story too quickly.

 

[scouries]

STORY 32 – ‘Three Nude Women’ by AliciaNight Orchid

STORY 32 – ‘Three Nude Women’ by AliciaNight Orchid

Yikes! The casual nudity, the gritty realism, the hot sex. Makes me understand with just a few words what professional writing is all about.

5 Maybe a 4.7 rounded up – simply better than the rest. No buts will be added here. Excellent!

 

[scouries]

STORY 33 – ‘The Secret of Bond Manor’ by InkandChalk

STORY 33 – ‘The Secret of Bond Manor’ by InkandChalk

The first paragraph was really tough to read. And it didn’t get much better.

1 Just lucky it was very short. And you Aussies have so many great nude beaches!

 

[scouries]

STORY 34 – ‘Tom Loses a Bet’ by honda53

STORY 34 – ‘Tom Loses a Bet’ by honda53

Certainly an interesting story. Wished you’d just thrown away the first paragraph.

2 2.4, just missed a three. The writing style leaves a lot to be desired but at least you’ve got a real story and characters here. Its just bizarre enough to be possible. Strange unexpected sex can be the best.

 

[scouries]

STORY 35 – ‘Daphne’ by hyulhyulhyul

STORY 35 – ‘Daphne’ by hyulhyulhyul

Some years ago dwarf bowling was one of my favorite sports – no one ever protested! Sir, you can really paint a picture for your readers. Scene after scene flows in an unending stream. Delightful, humorous…

5 I surrender! Great characters, funny story, just what I hoped this Nude Day theme would produce.

35 rated – two 5’s, six 4’s, one ?, sixteen 3’s, seven 2’s, two 1’s, one A+. Up to date except for one story. Feel I’ve already read too much today – I think I’ll save Danielle until tomorrow. Start the week off right and all that.

 

[Zeb_Carter]

Hmmmm....I wonder?

 

[matriarch]

I still don't get all the fuss.
This is merely one reader's opinions and voting, and he's probably saying no more than would appear in pc on the story's page. *shrug*.

Is it because he is posting his comments on one thread, where you can ALL see what he's written about you all in one place? Personally, I find it a very efficient method.

As for agenda......I have no previous knowledge of Mr. Scouries, no knowledge of any agenda to which you continue to refer, and can see absolutely no reason for all the 'up in arms', and 'how dare he' responses.

I repeat.
He is one reader.
He is giving his personal opinion and vote on each story.
He is doing what every single person on this site is entitled to do - including you. Comment on and vote for each story he reads.

 

[hyulhyulhyul]

STORY 35 – ‘Daphne’ by hyulhyulhyul

Some years ago dwarf bowling was one of my favorite sports – no one ever protested! Sir, you can really paint a picture for your readers. Scene after scene flows in an unending stream. Delightful, humorous…

5 I surrender! Great characters, funny story, just what I hoped this Nude Day theme would produce.

35 rated – two 5’s, six 4’s, one ?, sixteen 3’s, seven 2’s, two 1’s, one A+. Up to date except for one story. Feel I’ve already read too much today – I think I’ll save Danielle until tomorrow. Start the week off right and all that.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Selena approached her teacher as soon as the class ended, a tear hanging precariously from her left eye. “What’s an A+ Miss Scouries,” she whimpered, fearful of her Daddy’s reaction, “usually I get a Turquoise W and a perfect 5.”

“It means you tried your best sweetie, no one could ever ask for anything more than that.”

“Did anyone else get one,” the suddenly interested child asked.

“No honey. Only you. Everyone else got 2’s and 3’s and 4’s.”

“So Daddy will be happy with me?” the youngster asked.

“Of course he will be Selena, he’s your father.”

“Oh goody,” the suddenly radiant infant said, but as the jubilantly smiling girl turned and skipped away, Miss Scouries thought she heard the pretty teen add, “then Daddy will let me sleep in his bed tonight.”

Way too many "ly" adverbs and off theme (Nude Day). Still, the protag is great, plus it has a good beat and should be easy to dance to. I'll give it a three.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[Guest]

Way too many "ly" adverbs and off theme (Nude Day). Still, the protag is great, plus it has a good beat and should be easy to dance to. I'll give it a three.

Rumple Foreskin

Reverand, that post alone deserves a Five.

 

[scouries]

STORY 36 – ‘The Pond’ by DanielleKitten

STORY 36 – ‘The Pond’ by DanielleKitten

Wasn’t looking forward to this one! I was afraid it would be too long and that Miss DK wouldn’t be able to deliver a good story with this theme. That given my scoring system I’d end up giving it a 2. What the hell was I thinking? Short, fun, feel good, snappy dialogue…

4 Unlike so many writers on Lit, you create whole new worlds for your readers. Not really on theme for me but so what. Perhaps a little too much ‘chick flicky’ for my taste but half the worlds population does happen to be female.

And this afternoon, to make up for my low ‘4’, I passed out copies of the story to all the female nudists in the Haulover Nude Beach Erotic Reading Club, extracting promises from each and every one of them that they would vote and give you a 5. Huge numbers of votes from South Florida should start flooding in anytime.

To those of you who feel this is unfair, please be advised that we have limited the voting to 18 year old and up nude Americans only. German and French Canadian visitors, who make up a good sized chunk of our bathers, have been expressly forbidden from taking part. And I must tell you, any American nudist would be proud to stand at attention right behind this delectable author!

And there is no truth to the rumor that we are supporting Miss Danielle simply because she has agreed to give a reading of her works here on National Nude Day. (For those wishing to attend, Dani will be on stage at approximately 1:15 p.m., immediately after the finals of the mixed nude volleyball tournament. She has also agreed to sign any appropriate body part after her reading. Tickets still available at our web site.)

“This will be like a research trip for me,” the happy writer told me by phone after agreeing to come. Dani has also promised to try and convince her elder sister to accompany her on this exciting trip. “I know you two will be able to settle your silly little spat,” she gushed. “She’s a lovely girl usually and once you two get naked together…

 

[scouries]

STORY 37 – ‘Finding Beatrice’ by Veronica Phonenix

STORY 37 – ‘Finding Beatrice’ by Veronica Phonenix

Another brand new author! Two narrators combined with flashback scenes thrown in seemed simply too complicated and contrived.

3 A good attempt at a difficult structure. Sexual tension was built but then really never capitalized on.

 

[scouries]

STORY 38 – ‘The Three of Them’ by bearlee

STORY 38 – ‘The Three of Them’ by bearlee

Christ, this guy’s the king of Turquoise W’s. I’ve never seen so many!
The scene is described so well that I felt I was the man sitting next to him on the couch. No doubt very hot and sexy for most.

3 3.80 really but like a couple of others (kbata and rumpleforeskin) I lowered a high 3+ downwards instead of up to fit into my bell curve of scores. The only reason it’s not at the top of my list is, one, I prefer stories to episodes, and two, because public swinging sex just doesn’t do much for me. I also feel I’ve come in in the middle of a long evolving saga of these two characters, not originals constructed for the contest.
Very good though.

 

[scouries]

STORY 39 – ‘Primary Concerns’ by Maria2394

STORY 39 – ‘Primary Concerns’ by Maria2394

The premise was good but not nearly developed enough.
And, remember, don’t underestimate the oil industry. After a few more decades of spewing hydrocarbons into the atmosphere, we may be able to work in the Antarctica naked.

2 The humor was squeezed from a potentially good story by the desire to pound some political beliefs at us. The point could have been made more subtley and effectively. But I do like authors on Lit who incorporate real issues into their stories. Needed more sex!

 

[scouries]

STORY 40 – ‘The Naked Walk’ by oraldave39

STORY 40 – ‘The Naked Walk’ by oraldave39

I think I want to live on your street. No I don’t!

2 Surely one requirement of a good erotic story has to be that it contains at least one character you like or at least can identify with (or one you want to fuck). No luck here.
There’s definitely a germ of an idea for a good story here but I felt you just didn’t exploit it.

 

[scouries]

STORY 41 – ‘Sergeant Sebastian’s Luau’ by SexSweetheart

STORY 41 – ‘Sergeant Sebastian’s Luau’ by SexSweetheart

As with your first story I took marks off because it was a part of a continuing saga and not original for the contest.

3 I gave this one a 3, slightly better than your last one. I’m not sure why but I’m starting to like Sebastian and Sheronda. I’ll definitely read chapter 3.

41 rated – two 5’s, seven 4’s, one ?, nineteen 3’s, nine 2’s, two 1’s, one A+.