Scouries scores the nude day contest entries

[scouries]

Thanks for the offer but...

Question posted by Miss SK - as for you stories, would you like us to start a thread JUST for you?

Miss SK – Was this an offer to start a ‘scouries’ Fan Club? If so, you don’t have to bother, there are already two in operation. The first, ‘Scouries International’ is headquartered in Malmo, Sweden while its American counterpart, ‘Scouries USA’ is headquartered in Miami but has branches in all the major cities. Feel free to join either.

If on the other hand this was a proposal to initiate a more academic study of my works I’m flattered. However, I do feel I’m just coming into my most productive period and any academic analysis of my oeuvre is simply far too premature. Better that we leave for the next generation an appraisal of the importance of ‘scouries’ in twenty-first English literature I believe.

And even if it was simply your thought that it might be very interesting for my readers to have a place they could come to discuss the ‘scouries’ experience, I still must humbly decline. I’m relatively sure that not many of my many fans linger often in the ‘Authors Hangout’.

I do want to thank you for taking the time to write,

Yours sincerely

James R. Scouries esq.

57 rated – three 5’s, ten 4’s, one ?, twenty-six 3’s, twelve 2’s, four 1’s, one A+.

 

[scouries]

STORY 58 – ‘Peppermint Pussy’ by PeppermintPatty06

STORY 58 – ‘Peppermint Pussy’ by PeppermintPatty06

Another brand new literotican – either the eighth or ninth who’ve joined since the contest started and who are breaking their maidenheads with a first tale.

2 You lost me for good with the line ‘The fellow outside cums on the sidewalk’. Not the best but keep trying.

 

[scouries]

STORY 59 – ‘Nude Beach Bride Ch. 5’ by sirhugs

STORY 59 – ‘Nude Beach Bride Ch. 5’ by sirhugs

I have nothing against serial stories but I just don’t think they belong in a contest vying for prizes with original stories. They’re simply don’t present the same difficulties when writing them that new stories do. I also don’t think it’s fair to contest readers who are faced with choice of reading four more stories if they want to understand this one.

2 I haven’t read the first 4 chapters. The story wasn’t terrible, certainly lots of nudism and sex. Might have given it a three if it had been a new story.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

STORY 59 – ‘Nude Beach Bride Ch. 5’ by sirhugs

I have nothing against serial stories but I just don’t think they belong in a contest vying for prizes with original stories. They’re simply don’t present the same difficulties when writing them that new stories do. I also don’t think it’s fair to contest readers who are faced with choice of reading four more stories if they want to understand this one.

2 I haven’t read the first 4 chapters. The story wasn’t terrible, certainly lots of nudism and sex. Might have given it a three if it had been a new story.

This is a very minor point I've been meaning to quibble about. Your use of the term "original" to describe stories not part of a multi-chapter serial is, IMHO, mis-leading in that it could be read as implying entries taken from a serial story are not the original work of the author.

A more precise term to describe entries not part of a serial might be "stand-alone."

That somewhat fussy quibble aside, I don't disagree with your contention. However, there is no rule prohibiting the practice. That's probably just as well. If there were, some might just repackage their serial piece as a stand-alone story.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[oggbashan]

This is a very minor point I've been meaning to quibble about. Your use of the term "original" to describe stories not part of a multi-chapter serial is, IMHO, mis-leading in that it could be read as implying entries taken from a serial story are not the original work of the author.

A more precise term to describe entries not part of a serial might be "stand-alone."

That somewhat fussy quibble aside, I don't disagree with your contention. However, there is no rule prohibiting the practice. That's probably just as well. If there were, some might just repackage their serial piece as a stand-alone story.

Rumple Foreskin

I agree with Rumple on this minor point. There is no rule against writing part of a multi-chapter series as a contest entry. I think that the practice may have disadvantages for example that the reader assumes that knowledge of the previous chapters is necessary and may therefore avoid the entry.

Many multi-part works on Lit don't need knowledge of the previous parts to be intelligible because they stand alone, just using the same characters in a different story like a continuing Police TV drama.

I don't think that my fifty-word entry comes under the heading of a chapter of a multi-part work. The set of fifteen may have internal references to other ones in the set but that follows the form of a musical 'theme and variations'. The reader does not need to have read any other of my fifty-word stories to follow this set.

However, I appreciate the effort put into this thread and welcome it. It is one person's view of the entries. Others may disagree with the individual assessments but scouries has a right to express opinions and does so generally with tact and insight. Thank you.

Og

 

[scouries]

STORY 60 – ‘Curt, the Naked Man of Galattin’ by V Rich

STORY 60 – ‘Curt, the Naked Man of Galattin’ by V. Rich

Riding his bike naked? Naked beach volleyball is dangerous enough! Actually a great start but then you seemed unable to make a story out of it.

3 Probably should be a 2 but I’m feeling very mellow this morning. A three only because you started well, were on theme and seemed to have a good idea. But man, you got to finish what you start.

 

[scouries]

STORY 61 – ‘Adventures of a Naked Man’ by StatesOfUnrest

STORY 61 – ‘Adventures of a Naked Man’ by StatesOfUnrest

How long has this guy been on campus anyway?
There was lots of nudity and sex!

3 This guy has more leaking pre cum in one story than most men have in a year. Bad? Good? Awful? Funny?


Yes, 'stand alone' is a better term. Actually I like serial stories, just don't think they belong in a contest

 

[scouries]

STORY 62 – ‘C-u-n-n-i-l-i-n-g-u-s’ by SelenaKittyn

STORY 62 – ‘C-u-n-n-i-l-i-n-g-u-s’ by SelenaKittyn

Isn’t it just like a woman? You start to treat her nice, let her feel like a real princess, then bingo, she wants you to go down on her!

4 Light, funny, great dialogue, characters you like, an easy and enjoyable read. Nothing to do with the theme but as you pointed out, you’re not eligible anyway.
I think you’re finally starting to take my advice to heart.

 

[scouries]

Where Are All The Men??? The Heroes???

WHERE ARE ALL THE MEN??? THE HEROES???

62 Nude Day Contest stories read and so far I haven’t come across a single strong, likable, interesting, successful male character. A hero! Where are you John Wayne? Robin Hood? Audie Murphy?
It hit me a couple of days ago, maybe thirty stories in. I thought it might be just chance and that soon I’d hit some stories with interesting male characters. Its like Literoticas authors have a hate on for the male half of the species. We’re not that bad!

Female characters seem to do much better at the hands of our authors, various have stood out or been interesting for various reasons: Daphne and Kimmy in two stories from hyalhyalhyal, Maggie by Robert12, Andrea by Fantasygirl30, kbate’s two painted paraders, Unsung Muse’s narrator, Totzman’s Monica, satyricon.21’s Lily, Sherondas two visits from Sexsweetheart….

But the men… are either almost invisible (stories by brio and buntinggurl and others), or wimps (stories by DG Hear and many others), or damaged (stories by rumple and satyricon), or they pimp their wives (bearlee and oraldave39 and sirhugs and others), or….

When I think back on the stories, very few male characters made any impression on me, and of the very few who come to mind, none are overly impressive:
-The Scottish fisherman came to life but he’s certainly no hero; half drunk, sleeps with a seal/human, wakes up hung-over on the beach with his dick hanging out.The Selkie
-SK’s nudist masturbating in the sand while he checks out nude girls while his wife and daughter are 100 feet away buying lemonades.Epicurean
-You’d think the young 18 year old handsome teen who got to fuck the 3 witches would be a dynamo, but he comes across as lethargic and dim witted. When I finished the story I laughed, thinking the master, who was expecting this kid’s blood to invigorate the race, was going to be in for a surprise. Young Adam wasn’t going to enhance any gene pool!Witches
-Monica’s boss Albert – what a twit. Nude Secretaries Day
-The guy who sees his wife screwed on the beach, gets beaten up, runs away, gives the ex half of everything, mopes…Zoea
-And the guy who had his wife walk around the street and let the smelly neighbor fuck her on the lawn – Jesus!...The Naked Walk

Where are…
the bigger than life heroes, the swashbucklers….
the successful politicians and doctors and businessmen and athletes and..
the funny quipsters discussing sports and broads and politics…
the nice guys, friendly, attractive…

THE MEN?

Its not too late… you still have a few days left in this contest.

 

[scouries]

STORY 63 – ‘Will It Work Out’ by DG Hear

STORY 63 – ‘Will It Work Out’ by DG Hear

You almost lost me with this line, ‘As we all headed out for our two day trip back, Alex told me there was something else she didn't tell me’, God, not something else, I thought, but it was near the end so I went on.

3 Not as satisfying as your first effort. Perhaps a better story and better written but it lacked the power and hardness of the first. Nothing original about this one. A remake of a remake.

 

[scouries]

STORY 64 – ‘How to Get Your Characters Naked’ by sack

STORY 64 – ‘How to Get Your Characters Naked’ by sack

You’re in the wrong contest man. ‘How To’ ended last month.

1 I got to tell you sack, I’m not going to spend a lot of time describing mens underwear.
You caution, “Don't forget ……who you are writing for.” I’m not writing for someone who wants to read 3 literotica pages of someone undressing. Surely you don’t believe this is even remotely representative of the literotica reader. I start to get complaints when one of my stories goes over 2 pages.

 

[scouries]

STORY 65 – ‘Skinny Dipping With the Newmans’ by froghills

STORY 65 – ‘Skinny Dipping With the Newmans’ by froghills

When I saw you had another story in the contest I wasn’t happy. But hey, this one is way, way better than you first attempt!

3 I gave it a low 3 (maybe 2.95) but this story had some things going for it compared with your other one. And there were some great lines in this one:

‘I was new to the area and had long hair’
‘she was stroking my dick through my genes while we sucked each other's tongues.’
‘then you swordfight with your dicks. I play the referee with my mouth’
‘Some of the guys were sucking each others cocks like they always did’
‘laid back watching Linda walk around the room and suck a cock now and then, or maybe sit on one of her cousins dicks for a minute.’

 

[sack]

Methinks someone didn't read my story.....

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STORY 64 – ‘How to Get Your Characters Naked’ by sack

You’re in the wrong contest man. ‘How To’ ended last month.

1 I got to tell you sack, I’m not going to spend a lot of time describing mens underwear.
You caution, “Don't forget ……who you are writing for.” I’m not writing for someone who wants to read 3 literotica pages of someone undressing. Surely you don’t believe this is even remotely representative of the literotica reader. I start to get complaints when one of my stories goes over 2 pages




Scouries,
I can tell by this brief review (no pun intended!) that you most likely skimmed my story at best. The "3 Literotica page" reference has nothing to do with my own stories, none of which have 3 Literotica pages. I was referring to Charles Petersunn, a gifted writer whose stories can spill over to 4-5 literotica pages, although most often are 2-3. He extends the seduction scene/undressing, etc. to heretofore unexplored lengths, and he does it BRILLIANTLY! Where in the world did you get the idea that a Literotica story over 2 pages must be inferior and therefore slimmed down? Rgraham666' Abyss and Penelope Street's The Magician's Assistant are quite long, yet I wouldn't want them to be even one word shorter.

Your reluctance to take the small amount of time to describe men's underwear amply proves the point I was making in my essay: heterosexual men often write as though their entire reading audience consists of other heterosexual men. Absolutely not true, and if you are a really good writer you should be able to describe ANY piece of clothing, whether it is typically worn by a male or female. Not turned on by mens' bulging jeans or briefs? Others may be and you have a chance to impress them with your marvelously descriptive word choices and open-mindedness. This is related to an old argument I often hear from heterosexual men that they cannot possibly write a "gay" story because they are straight. Complete hogwash! Using that mentality, you can't possibly write about someone getting drunk at a bar because you are a teetotaler, or write about a heroin addict since you've never touched the stuff, or write about someone committing suicide as you would absolutely never take your own life.

As a matter of fact, this entry could have been part of the "How To" Contest. Unfortunately, I was flat on my back in a hospital for some of that time and didn't have Literotica on my mind, never mind the "How-To" contest. I knew when you gave S-Hardon's brilliant little essay a "1" you were going to rate my contribution a "1" also. That doesn't mean two wrongs make a right, and I have the freedom of choice to use the "How-To" category for this contest as well.

Sack

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Froghills appears to have turned off the voting option on this story. (it's working on the other one). I'm no computer expert, but that would seem to make getting any votes, much less 25, a real challenge.

Rumple Foreskin

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STORY 65 – ‘Skinny Dipping With the Newmans’ by froghills

When I saw you had another story in the contest I wasn’t happy. But hey, this one is way, way better than you first attempt!

3 I gave it a low 3 (maybe 2.95) but this story had some things going for it compared with your other one. And there were some great lines in this one:

‘I was new to the area and had long hair’
‘she was stroking my dick through my genes while we sucked each other's tongues.’
‘then you swordfight with your dicks. I play the referee with my mouth’
‘Some of the guys were sucking each others cocks like they always did’
‘laid back watching Linda walk around the room and suck a cock now and then, or maybe sit on one of her cousins dicks for a minute.’

 

[scouries]

STORY 66 – ‘Connie Nielson’s New Affair’ by SILVERUSMAX

STORY 66 – ‘Connie Nielson’s New Affair’ by SILVERUSMAX

It was a real struggle to get through the first eight or ten paragraphs. I checked the author’s biography – Christ he’s written all sorts of stories. I read on, thinking perhaps I was missing something.

2 Was this really meant as humor? Some of the lines suggested it:
"Naturally, I would love to be eaten. Yes, it's a date. We'll have to wash our faces a lot, but that won't bother me
"True, and I will shave as well. That way, we'll know that all we are sampling are pussy and juices from pussy, not piss
This was a very hard read – give it a miss.

 

[oggbashan]

This thread prompted me to write another story for Nude Day.

I hope that 'Washed Away' is in time for the contest.

Og

 

[scouries]

STORY 67 – ‘That Makes Two of Us!’ by Alex de Kok

STORY 67 – ‘That Makes Two of Us!’ by Alex de Kok

One of the old Lit masters returns. One of the few stories in the contest that clearly explores the theme. Real people speaking real dialogue.

4 Lost some marks for using characters you’ve used before. Was between 3.5 and 4 – gave you the benefit of the doubt. Perhaps too many different people and scenes in the story. (the meal at the Clarks could easily have been jettisoned)
You also seemed every once in a while to wander off from the story into unneeded descriptions.(ie. Who was going to pay to get in to the beach, camera trivia)
However it was good enough that I’ll probably read chapter one.

 

[scouries]

STORY 68 – ‘Mercedes’ Bends’ by Sinful_whispers

STORY 68 – ‘Mercedes’ Bends’ by Sinful_whispers

Simply way too long for the contest format!

2 A contest is not the place to put a 30,000 word story. I read page one just to be fair but…

 

[scouries]

STORY 69 – ‘Don’t Look’ by S-Des

STORY 69 – ‘Don’t Look’ by S-Des

Anonymous sex stories like this can be great, and here you had a good idea. The club, the alley was a good choice of setting.

3 Thought it would have been much better without the ‘fuck me’, ‘slut’ business. The sex would have been hotter. Also think it should have ended after the first encounter – we didn’t need the happy ending.
Can’t imagine what this has to do with Nude Day though.

 

[scouries]

STORY 70 – ‘Nude Day on the Lake’ by NorthCoaster

STORY 70 – ‘Nude Day on the Lake’ by NorthCoaster

Looks like another alt. This is the tenth or eleventh first time story writer in the contest who’s joined Lit in the last two weeks or so.

3 You started well written but then you seemed to run out of things to say. You got them out in the middle of the lake, put in some sex and then seemed to get tired. In the end you really had no story to tell – disappointing.

 

[Selena_Kitt]

I start to get complaints when one of my stories goes over 2 pages.

I believe you... but you have to take the story itself into account... not just judge it by the stories you "tend to like"...

I think Sack made an excellent point... a good story is the length it needs to be, 1 Lit page or 10... Abyss is a fantastic example.

 

[Alex De Kok]

STORY 67 – ‘That Makes Two of Us!’ by Alex de Kok


< ... partial snip ... > Lost some marks for using characters you’ve used before. < ... partial snip ... >

A little hard, don't you think? I know these people, they're my friends. Makes it easier to write about them! And why not re-use characters? I've done it before and people seem to enjoy the stories.

Alex

 

[scheherazade_79]

You've got some balls, Scouries... maybe too much so.

I admire your honesty, but I'm finding a lot of your reviews so subjective that I'm not entirely sure what the point of this exercise is anymore.

I know people have argued that if you post a story, you must expect to get feedback (positive and negative) either by PM or via the public comments. Fair enough, but I don't think the AH is the place to do it.

At the end of the day, you're providing a lot of these writers with a not-particularly-constructive critique in front of their friends, in a place where they usually come to chill out and socialise.

I'm wondering why?

 

[Selena_Kitt]

At the end of the day, you're providing a lot of these writers with a not-particularly-constructive critique in front of their friends, in a place where they usually come to chill out and socialise.

I'm wondering why?

*SMACKING FOREHEAD*

<---putting duct tape over my mouth in thick, heavy layers...

 

[scheherazade_79]

*SMACKING FOREHEAD*

<---putting duct tape over my mouth in thick, heavy layers...

Seriously, though, why?