Agent0069
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Thank you, much appreciated! Even thought now I feel kinda guilty for making someone read a gay story because of me…As promised, I've read, voted and commented on both your stories.
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Thank you, much appreciated! Even thought now I feel kinda guilty for making someone read a gay story because of me…As promised, I've read, voted and commented on both your stories.
I read "Four Friends in the Shower" and commented on it. It's actually rather interesting, though I'm probably reading too much into it.Well, a first day has passed, and the results are in. My Gay Male story is now the second-lowest rated story of mine, which is fair - I didn’t really want to describe gay orgy anyway.
What came as a shock is that my “Amazing Japanese Cowboy” took a nosedive and is now my lowest ever rated story with 3.32/28, and not even a single comment describing why. I spent months planning it, trying to get fighting and sexual actions together in a movie-like way, so the result is disappointing. Well, it is what it is, I guess.
Thank you, much appreciated! Even thought now I feel kinda guilty for making someone read a gay story because of me…
Alrighty people, I need some opinions. Below is a comment left on my story: An Enjoyable Thank you. The poster of the comment insists it isn't a story because it has no conflict in it. I have my own opinion on his claim but I'd like to hear what ya'll as authors think.
The grammar & spelling are good in this piece, and the info is clearly presented. However, this is not a story. A story has to have a conflict in it if you want to have something resembles what 99.99% of the world looks for in stories. For those that disagree, please google "does a story need conflict". This is a fine description of a great husband's day, but not a story. I am sure many people will be entertained by this piece of descriptive fiction, but I like to read stories myself. So, nothing wrong w/ liking this, I just wish the writer would have tagged this in some way so readers would know it is not a story.
Comshaw
Thank you Millie. That was along the same lines I was thinking, with as many firey descriptors.Just read, what the fuck does he mean there isn't conflict? The guy wants to be fishing, not buying thermocouples. He doesn't want to mow the lawn. He didn't appreciate that his bro-in-law was a slouch. There is an internal conflict between his wants and his reality. He got rewarded for overcoming his displeasure of having his Saturday ruined. Fuck that boy and horse he rode in on!
Alrighty people, I need some opinions. Below is a comment left on my story: An Enjoyable Thank you. The poster of the comment insists it isn't a story because it has no conflict in it. I have my own opinion on his claim but I'd like to hear what ya'll as authors think.
The grammar & spelling are good in this piece, and the info is clearly presented. However, this is not a story. A story has to have a conflict in it if you want to have something resembles what 99.99% of the world looks for in stories. For those that disagree, please google "does a story need conflict". This is a fine description of a great husband's day, but not a story. I am sure many people will be entertained by this piece of descriptive fiction, but I like to read stories myself. So, nothing wrong w/ liking this, I just wish the writer would have tagged this in some way so readers would know it is not a story.
Comshaw
I think it’s a typical case of someone giving opinion on something they know nothing about, but because of how few they know they don’t even realise how uninformed they are. You have a pretty sweet slice-of-life story, and a well written one too!The poster of the comment insists it isn't a story because it has no conflict in it
This is what happens when literature is no longer taught in schools. There's plenty of conflict in the story. It simply requires reading the story with the big head, not the little head. Contrary to what too many readers on Literotica seem to think, conflict is more than, "Will they have sex and will (s)he get caught?" People need to be reminded: creativity is sexy, as is intelligent writing. This was an example of both.Alrighty people, I need some opinions. Below is a comment left on my story: An Enjoyable Thank you. The poster of the comment insists it isn't a story because it has no conflict in it. I have my own opinion on his claim but I'd like to hear what ya'll as authors think.
The grammar & spelling are good in this piece, and the info is clearly presented. However, this is not a story. A story has to have a conflict in it if you want to have something resembles what 99.99% of the world looks for in stories. For those that disagree, please google "does a story need conflict". This is a fine description of a great husband's day, but not a story. I am sure many people will be entertained by this piece of descriptive fiction, but I like to read stories myself. So, nothing wrong w/ liking this, I just wish the writer would have tagged this in some way so readers would know it is not a story.
Comshaw
Thank you, much appreciated! Even thought now I feel kinda guilty for making someone read a gay story because of me…
Damn! It was the gateway to gayness. I can feel fabulousness creeping in. Toying with a GM story too now.As writers, we should step out of our comfort zone. I do have an idea for a GM story, just not sure if I'll do it yet
Damn! It was the gateway to gayness. I can feel fabulousness creeping in. Toying with a GM story too now.
Dawgs got a docterate in casual reading, he knows his shit. /sJust read, what the fuck does he mean there isn't conflict? The guy wants to be fishing, not buying thermocouples. He doesn't want to mow the lawn. He didn't appreciate that his bro-in-law was a slouch. There is an internal conflict between his wants and his reality. He got rewarded for overcoming his displeasure of having his Saturday ruined. Fuck that boy and horse he rode in on!
I should've left a comment but didn't.
I ain't seen that shit either.After reviewing the instructions and after submitting four stories, I saw this, seemingly for the first time:
Please add the following as a tag 750-2025.
Needless to say, I had not done that for my previous stories. At least it's there for my fifth story.
"This is the second story I've read of yours where you kill the mood with fast forwarding it to years later where everything ends and someone dies. Do you even realize you're actively killing your own stories? Just once, maybe try giving everyone a good, maybe happy ending where it remains hot and passionate."
"This would have been the best part of this story until you completely killed it with the last few paragraphs and the epilogue. Totally killed the mood with that."
"You killed a beautiful story! I've read hundreds of stories on here and that is the absolute worst ending I've ever read."
"Good story, but that ending was too much of a let down."
They demand endings.
They hate endings.
.
I can see both sides of the argument. On the one hand it does ‘end’ with her telling him to cum but the story of the relationship is left hanging. Different strokes for different folks, I guess.https://www.literotica.com/s/750-word-the-shower
I got this comment;
by Anonymous user on 43 minutes ago
I think we would all agree that writing a 750 word story is difficult. One of the most common complaints about them is that they are too short. This story isn’t too short but it doesn’t have a conclusion at all. It is as if the porn video froze in mid scene while buffering. Tighten up the action and consider having the wife come in pissed or laughing at the women’s gift to him (birthday or Valentines) or just anything that wraps it all up. Good luck.
In my mind, I did finish it, she put her finger in his ass and told Matt to cum.
My question, Do you feel the need to tie everything up with a bow to end your story?
clearly they haven't seen Hamilton or Les Miserables, or they hated them. Me, I was bawling."This is the second story I've read of yours where you kill the mood with fast forwarding it to years later where everything ends and someone dies. Do you even realize you're actively killing your own stories? Just once, maybe try giving everyone a good, maybe happy ending where it remains hot and passionate."
"This would have been the best part of this story until you completely killed it with the last few paragraphs and the epilogue. Totally killed the mood with that."
"You killed a beautiful story! I've read hundreds of stories on here and that is the absolute worst ending I've ever read."
"Good story, but that ending was too much of a let down."
They demand endings.
They hate endings.
.
I can see both sides of the argument. On the one hand it does ‘end’ with her telling him to cum but the story of the relationship is left hanging. Different strokes for different folks, I guess.
At least he/she was ‘kind’ about it, as you requested.
My submission, A Day At The Office, is going up tomorrow and I'm honestly very nervous about how it'll received. I'm so used to writing longer stories that it was, as the name implies, a challenge, for myself.
I really had to get creative with my choice of words and I can honestly say I felt more nervous submitting this than when I first sent in my first story that I ever posted here for approval.
Either way, I'm expecting a firing squad of angry readers commenting about a certain element that I've included in the story.