Looking for an editor for an exhibitionist/cfnm/masturbation story (~5000 words)

[nitrogenpeople]

Hi VE team,

I'm trying my hand at some erotic writing and looking for feedback on an exhibitionist/cfnm/masturbation story I wrote. It's about a guy who reluctantly agrees to produce a spermsample for his sister and her friends to study under the microscope, and then his exhibitionism takes over.

I am looking for feedback on

- flow of the story
- believability/continuity/plot-holes
- titillation
- any other suggestions for improvement are welcome.

The story is a little under 2000 words and written in unformatted .txt. If you agree to do some editing, what file-format do you prefer?

Thanks in advance!

 

[madisonridge]

Did this happen? This genre and fetish is my favorite, i could look at this story for you.

 

[nitrogenpeople]

Hi madisonridge,

I already started publishing: https://literotica.com/s/aunt-jennifer-cfnm-rules-ch-01 (first of a 4 chapter series).

Can you please "proofread" that and tell me if you would like to continue with the unpublished works?

Regards,
nitrogenpeople

 

[madisonridge]

Sure buddy

 

[annabellebrito]

I read it and left a review. I like these somewhat role reversal cfnm caught stories. I'm interested where this will go.

 

[annabellebrito]

I can be available to help edit or proof read as well.

 

[nitrogenpeople]

Hi annabellebrito and madisonridge,

Thanks for your kind offer to review. Ch. 02 has just been published.

https://literotica.com/s/aunt-jennifer-ch-02-casting

 

[nitrogenpeople]

I see I messed up my original VE request with the story I am currently writing.

The story described in my original request is already published:
https://www.literotica.com/s/helping-my-sisters-classmates

The new story I am writing is about friend-of-the-family "Aunt" Jennifer who gives an 18 y/o an introduction into CFNM and a few adventures that follow. Target wordcount ~10k.

Anyway, here’s Ch. 03 (work in progress)

docs DOT google DOT com/document/d/1EAZSCwxBZNfZE8bfBDyvtVHHmmmkzki6N99OnYFc7o0/edit?usp=sharing