I have been writing my first story for almost four months now (off and on). The story is only about half way done and is already 6000 words. Below is a brief passage from one of the scenes. I just wanted to get some of it out there and see how it is. I would love some feedback on my writing style and imagery. Anything you send my way is of great help.........................
There was no misunderstanding what I was supposed to do. I placed my left hand at the base of his cock, wrapping my fingers around it. I placed my other hand on this thigh and brought my awaiting mouth to him. My lips brushed the head, causing his cock to jump slightly. I removed my hand from his thigh and grabbed his head. Lifting his cock upwards, I placed my tongue at the very base. I slowly ran my tongue up the whole underside, when I reached the head I opened my mouth and slid it inside. Wrapping my lips around his meat, I slowly started running my tongue around the head, flicking the underside occasionally. With one hand securely at the base, I started to slowly stroke his entire length with the other one.
In no time David started becoming hard, his cock slowing grew inside my mouth. I could have taken this kids pulse using only my tongue. His shaft grew firmer as the head began to occupy all the free space in my mouth.
When he was rock hard I slide more of him into my mouth, his cock must have been 9 inches long. I slowly begin to bob down on him, brining him in and out of my eager cock trap. My hand jerked him, matching the pace of my mouth.
David groaned as my mouth slowly fucked his cock. I felt his hand leave my shoulder and moved over my head. David wrapped his hand around my pony tail and pulled it upright. I began to pick up the pace. Sliding him further into my mouth with each bob, until I had him most of the way in. Good thing I have no real gag reflex or I would have been in trouble.
David started to pull my pony tail back and forth, matching my rhythm as he fucked my throat. I could feel him tensing up and knew he wouldn’t last much longer. If there is one thing I do well its sucking a cock. Pulling my mouth back to his tip, I tightened my grip and begun to stroke his shaft fast and hard, covering his entire length. I opened my mouth and stuck out my tongue a little. Forming it into a kind of bowl, I placed it right under his tip, preparing myself to receive his juice.
David moaned and tightened his grip on my hair. “This is it” I thought, I closed my eyes and waited. Just as I was expecting to feel warm cum hit my throat David pulled back on my hair. Pulling my head back, off and away from his cock. I opened my eyes in time to see David begin to climax. His cum shot out towards me, I felt some land on my lips and chin. Then the next stream hit my chest, right between my tits. It seemed like a massive amount of jizz. I could taste the bitter, salty goop on my lips. I could feel the warmth of it as it begun to slowing run down my chin, dripping onto my chest. It ran in between my breasts and slid down my front.
I made no attempt to wipe it off; I sat there wearing it proudly like a medal.
There was no misunderstanding what I was supposed to do. I placed my left hand at the base of his cock, wrapping my fingers around it. I placed my other hand on this thigh and brought my awaiting mouth to him. My lips brushed the head, causing his cock to jump slightly. I removed my hand from his thigh and grabbed his head. Lifting his cock upwards, I placed my tongue at the very base. I slowly ran my tongue up the whole underside, when I reached the head I opened my mouth and slid it inside. Wrapping my lips around his meat, I slowly started running my tongue around the head, flicking the underside occasionally. With one hand securely at the base, I started to slowly stroke his entire length with the other one.
In no time David started becoming hard, his cock slowing grew inside my mouth. I could have taken this kids pulse using only my tongue. His shaft grew firmer as the head began to occupy all the free space in my mouth.
When he was rock hard I slide more of him into my mouth, his cock must have been 9 inches long. I slowly begin to bob down on him, brining him in and out of my eager cock trap. My hand jerked him, matching the pace of my mouth.
David groaned as my mouth slowly fucked his cock. I felt his hand leave my shoulder and moved over my head. David wrapped his hand around my pony tail and pulled it upright. I began to pick up the pace. Sliding him further into my mouth with each bob, until I had him most of the way in. Good thing I have no real gag reflex or I would have been in trouble.
David started to pull my pony tail back and forth, matching my rhythm as he fucked my throat. I could feel him tensing up and knew he wouldn’t last much longer. If there is one thing I do well its sucking a cock. Pulling my mouth back to his tip, I tightened my grip and begun to stroke his shaft fast and hard, covering his entire length. I opened my mouth and stuck out my tongue a little. Forming it into a kind of bowl, I placed it right under his tip, preparing myself to receive his juice.
David moaned and tightened his grip on my hair. “This is it” I thought, I closed my eyes and waited. Just as I was expecting to feel warm cum hit my throat David pulled back on my hair. Pulling my head back, off and away from his cock. I opened my eyes in time to see David begin to climax. His cum shot out towards me, I felt some land on my lips and chin. Then the next stream hit my chest, right between my tits. It seemed like a massive amount of jizz. I could taste the bitter, salty goop on my lips. I could feel the warmth of it as it begun to slowing run down my chin, dripping onto my chest. It ran in between my breasts and slid down my front.
I made no attempt to wipe it off; I sat there wearing it proudly like a medal.