Old 11-24-2012, 06:46 PM   #1
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Swinging on holiday

After hearing a recent discussion about a certain holiday destination. I'm thinking about writing a story involving myself and my wife going on holiday for a week. The hotel where we stay is renowed to swingers and although we have dabbled we did not know about the hotel before we get there.

Once there we quickly become aware of what is going on. Over the course of the week my wife becomes more and more aroused by the swinging going on around us.

I'm not exactly sure how to get started though, should we start on arriving at the airport, the hotel, or should it be a day into the holiday and both of us noticing alot more sexual activity than normal around the hotel?

It may take me a few days to write as I am a terrible writer as I get overly turned on and tend to get distracted by my own story. I've already started one, with the intent of writing more, but got side tracked.
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Old 11-24-2012, 06:47 PM   #2
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whatever you decide to begin with it has to be a hook. make me want to read more.
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Old 11-25-2012, 08:46 AM   #3
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I like to start in media res as the saying goes- that is, in the middle of the action- then you can go back to the back story, then continue from where you opened. This avoids the plodding dullness risky in lineal plotting. Accomplishes Geronimo's need nicely if you open with a stranger sucking your cock as you watch your wife on the bed, getting double teamed, then reflect how you ended up in that situation....

As to the idea, I might find it better if you & your wife have not swung before. You've both been curious, but never thought you would indulge, until you see the mixed matches playing in the pool, or chasing each other down the hallway.
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Thanks sirhugs. I'm not sure I want to knock the swinging on the head as it's a fantasy based on our reality. So saying we have not swung before would push it too far. However we have only done very light swinging so far, I think this will go far further.

I'm going to work backwards after a fashion, probably from the point of use lying on a sunbed by the pool watching another couple.
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Old 11-25-2012, 05:14 PM   #5
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Thanks sirhugs. I'm not sure I want to knock the swinging on the head as it's a fantasy based on our reality. So saying we have not swung before would push it too far. However we have only done very light swinging so far, I think this will go far further.

I'm going to work backwards after a fashion, probably from the point of use lying on a sunbed by the pool watching another couple.
nice idea. that way you can grab the reader immediately, give them some grist for the mill of imagination, and then also include some frolicking back story as well as the current scene.

please put up a link in the thread when it's done.
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Old 11-25-2012, 06:38 PM   #6
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nice idea. that way you can grab the reader immediately, give them some grist for the mill of imagination, and then also include some frolicking back story as well as the current scene.

please put up a link in the thread when it's done.

I will do, I'm gonna get started on it tomorrow but it maybe the end of the week before I am done.
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Old 11-26-2012, 09:01 AM   #7
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I will do, I'm gonna get started on it tomorrow but it maybe the end of the week before I am done.
don't rush it.

... and if you want anyone to scan it before you put it up, a fresh pair of eyes like, lemme know,
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Old 11-26-2012, 06:35 PM   #8
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don't rush it.

... and if you want anyone to scan it before you put it up, a fresh pair of eyes like, lemme know,


Thanks for the offer, I'm no william shakespear but I'd be happy to have an editor on board.
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Old 11-27-2012, 05:41 PM   #9
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I love swinging stories you can also start it with you and your wife in the rental car on the way to the hotel. You mentioned you have dabbled so she could be teasing you as you drive, showing off her legs or breasts to you trying to turn you on, caresses you through your pants only to realize the car or truck beside you is watching. Innocent fun between you both to set a very playful and fun mood before arriving at the hotel and seeing the swinging atmosphere.
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Old 11-27-2012, 06:08 PM   #10
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It's not my kind of story but...

I would start it with the couple just before they start stripping with another couple, then go back and lead back up to that point;

We both stood looking at Paul and Cindy; I wondered if my wife was as nervous as I was. Paul handed us each a glass of liquid courage. As practiced swingers I'm sure they could tell our experience was extremely limited.
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Old 12-01-2012, 08:55 PM   #11
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Ok so I've given the story a go. It's actually turned out to be a longer story than I first thought it would be, so I'm going to put it out in parts. I did not want too, but sadly my writing tends to control me rather than the other way round. I hope the first part is interesting enough. I'm going to let one or two have a sneak preview, before I put it on Lit, just so they can comment. I can't see me doing a re-write completely though as I find it very hard to write and not wank as it is. Sitting for an hour writing with my cock making a complete mess of my underwear is somewhat pleasent but very frustrating.

I'm sure some people can write a story without needed to relieve the tension, but for me. It's quite tricky and now it's too late to do anything. Which I suppose is a fitting ending as it's similar to where my character end's at the end of part 1.

Anyway hopefully it should be up on lit in a few days once it's been checked over.

Cheers for the tips.
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Old 12-10-2012, 03:48 PM   #12
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Wink Finally published

Well took a bit longer than I thought but here is the final result. Feel free to leave your opinions.

Should I not give up the day job??? ;-)
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Old 12-10-2012, 04:36 PM   #13
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Well took a bit longer than I thought but here is the final result. Feel free to leave your opinions.

Should I not give up the day job??? ;-)

I read the story and enjoyed it a lot. It was very well written and has me wanting more


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Old 12-10-2012, 07:30 PM   #14
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opps

forgot to add the link.


http://www.literotica.com/s/swingers-hotel-ch-01


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Old 12-11-2012, 05:44 PM   #15
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a truely fucking hot story!! would love to have been in it!"!
keep it up and give us the next installement!! loved the smear Liz was making on J´s face... althouygh hope that the next time she makes you lick her face clean...
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Old 12-11-2012, 05:56 PM   #16
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just need to say it again... hot hot hot
weould love being your wife
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Old 12-11-2012, 06:55 PM   #17
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just need to say it again... hot hot hot
weould love being your wife


Your very kind, I'm writing the 2nd installment now, with a few pointers being thrown in from others so should be ready, for reading in a week or so, will be able to put a stint in tomorrow night.

It should contain a little more detail on our previous background in swinging and of course some more sex.
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Old 12-21-2012, 06:12 PM   #18
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phew just finished writing the 2nd part and submitted it. It's tougher than I thought writing without wanking.
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Old 12-29-2012, 07:36 PM   #19
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already longing for it to be poasted...
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