Write our own haiku, line by line

[adrina]

Long lashes, coy smile
Come hither eyes, just for you

 

[Uggg]

Long lashes, coy smile
Come hither eyes, just for you
My heart beats faster

 

[Gamine67]

congenial host

 

[Uggg]

Congenial host,
Hospitable and polite,

 

[adrina]

Congenial host,
Hospitable and polite,
Ever graciously.

 

[LanguageOfLove]

When you think you can't...

 

[Pantyboy74]

When you think you can't...

Love her more...

 

[Hornblende]

Love her more...

Traditional haiku are always the same, including the following features:
There are only three lines, totaling 17 syllables.
The first line is 5 syllables.
The second line is 7 syllables.
The third line is 5 syllables like the first.



When you think you can’t
possibly come any more

 

[adrina]

When you think you can’t
possibly come any more
Then don't, just breathe deep.

 

[LanguageOfLove]

When you think you can’t
possibly come any more
You still love her more

 

[adrina]

Music tames demons

 

[Cymru6969]

Music tames demons
And it takes one to know one

 

[adrina]

Music tames demons
And it takes one to know one
Isn't that the truth!

 

[Cymru6969]

Can loose lips sink ships?

 

[Hornblende]

Can loose lips sink ships?
Is the Pope a Catholic?

 

[adrina]

Can loose lips sink ships?
Is the Pope a Catholic?
Does the pope sink ships?

 

[Hornblende]

Can loose lips sink ships?
Is the Pope a Catholic?
Does the pope sink ships?

Sensual massage

 

[adrina]

Sensual massage
Is something I'd like right now

 

[LanguageOfLove]

Sensual massage
Is something I'd like right now
With the perfect hands

 

[Pantyboy74]

A devotion of love.

 

[Uggg]

A devotion of love.
A sign of my affection.

 

[Uggg]

A devotion of love.

Hiya Pantyboy,

That is a nice line,
But Haiku have a structure,
Five, Seven then five.

That's an example of a haiku, the first line has 5 syllables the second has seven then the last line has 5 again.

So your line needs to loose one syllable. For example it could have been:
"Devotion of love".

Uggg

 

[LanguageOfLove]

A devotion of love.
A sign of my affection
in friendships and more

 

[Uggg]

Overwhelming me,

 

[LanguageOfLove]

Overwhelming me,
Is either work or boredom...