Would love feedback on a story!

[dirty_debbie]

Would love feedback on a really dirty story!

I realize there is a spot for this in another part of the forum, but people seem nicer in the "playground" lol.......(at least I hope so cuz im nervous!!)

anyway I was a contributor to a story series that was written/is being written and the first part
has been published. I didnt write it but I did contribute to the ideas of it a lot! please let me know what u think on here or u can even pm me if u want! Or best yet.........comment on the story itself!!

The story is a bit different from most on here, but I think its a really cool story and most importantly it has a cast that is based off of real people and the sex scenes are hot!!

here it is! enjoy!!!

http://www.literotica.com/s/american-whore-story-asylum-ch-01

 

[dirty_debbie]

well i didnt get many hits on this so i will try one more time lol

Ok I will give blowjobs to anyone that will read the story WHILE they are reading it!! how does that sound?

 

[Indienne]

well i didnt get many hits on this so i will try one more time lol

Ok I will give blowjobs to anyone that will read the story WHILE they are reading it!! how does that sound?

I haven't read it, but all the best and I hope you get some good constructive feedback on your story.

 

[dirty_debbie]

Thank you Indienne!

 

[Indienne]

Thank you Indienne!

 

[NotHisLady]

Best advice, and this is from someone who doesn't seek a lot of feedback so take it for what it's worth.
If you're appealing to writers look at what you've written in your post. If your story reads like that not many are going to be interested.
Also, instead of just sticking a link down there try a small excerpt. If it's enough to get someone interested then maybe they'll go look at the rest.
Do put this where it belongs on the board too. Those folks may not be cute and fuzzy but the input can be worthwhile.
Good luck

 

[dirty_debbie]

Thank you Not his lady! I will think about doing that!

 

[BiUncle]

Love the story baby....

I realize there is a spot for this in another part of the forum, but people seem nicer in the "playground" lol.......(at least I hope so cuz im nervous!!)

anyway I was a contributor to a story series that was written/is being written and the first part
has been published. I didnt write it but I did contribute to the ideas of it a lot! please let me know what u think on here or u can even pm me if u want! Or best yet.........comment on the story itself!!

The story is a bit different from most on here, but I think its a really cool story and most importantly it has a cast that is based off of real people and the sex scenes are hot!!

here it is! enjoy!!!

http://www.literotica.com/s/american-whore-story-asylum-ch-01

 

[dirty_debbie]

Awesome thanks so much Uncle!!

 

[dirty_debbie]

there are actually 2 more chapters that have been added to this, so its a full blown series now and Im very proud of it. I would love it if you guys checked it out and tell me what you think!