Whazzamatta U

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Just read a new story by one of our experts, and its about as sorry as can be.

I didn't score it or comment.

I almost sent feedback but don't want the hassle of a new enemy.

Oddly, your wares are much better than what I just read. Maybe you lost your mind or have amnesia for how to do it.

Three things jumped from the alley and mugged me:

A. Get rid of the goddamned helping verbs. Its larded with them. You strung a necklace of them that equals ABANDONED. USE VIRILE VERBS!

B. You couldn't make up your mind if your tale was now, recent, or in the distant past.

C. Your plot is kinda tentative, like a chameleon who cant find the right mood. CERTS IS A BREATH MINT! CERTS IS A CANDY MINT! CERTS IS A POWERFUL DISHWASHING DEGREASER AND INSECTICIDE.

 

[PayDay]

"The person who wants the job the most is inherently the worst person for the job, and therefore should not be allowed to participate "
-Douglas Adams

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

"The person who wants the job the most is inherently the worst person for the job, and therefore should not be allowed to participate "
-Douglas Adams

And how long have you had your thought disorder?

 

[emap]

I don't know, certs may actually work well as a degreaser, I mean it's candy (sorta) made in America.

Course it is a breath mint candy, they call it a breath mint but really it's a sweet thing to suck on, like a tic tac.

 

[PayDay]

And how long have you had your thought disorder?

?

Legally sane, tyvm

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

I don't know, certs may actually work well as a degreaser, I mean it's candy (sorta) made in America.

Course it is a breath mint candy, they call it a breath mint but really it's a sweet thing to suck on, like a tic tac.

I got a boner reading your comment.

 

[LadyVer]

I saw a wood chipper today and thought of you.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

I saw a wood chipper today and thought of you.

I'm just the sweetest lil thang IRL. And when I'm nice and pleasant people just gotta fuck me or die.

 

[LadyVer]

I'm just the sweetest lil thang IRL. And when I'm nice and pleasant people just gotta fuck me or die.

Actually, it reminded me of you and your stories. Not about putting you into a wood chipper.

 

[TE999]

"It's a floor wax! It's a dessert topping! Now, now you two, it's both." Remember when SNL was funny? I do.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Actually, it reminded me of you and your stories. Not about putting you into a wood chipper.

One of my tales coulda used a wood chipper.

 

[LadyVer]

One of my tales coulda used a wood chipper.