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[haldir]

Last year a friend and myself started writing an erotic vampire story (OK - I know, not another one).

I wrote from the vampire's point of view and she wrote from the "victim's" point of view.

problem we had was trying to bring it together into a coherent narrative. I couldn't find the right voice - 3rd person seemed to work for a while but then crashed and burned. Keeping the two voices was OK but it just didn't seem to express the energy.

Any help/suggestions/therapy out there?

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Last year a friend and myself started writing an erotic vampire story (OK - I know, not another one).

I wrote from the vampire's point of view and she wrote from the "victim's" point of view.

problem we had was trying to bring it together into a coherent narrative. I couldn't find the right voice - 3rd person seemed to work for a while but then crashed and burned. Keeping the two voices was OK but it just didn't seem to express the energy.

Any help/suggestions/therapy out there?

First person limited, with a dual presentation. One author writing a section, followed by the other, each writing from only their character's perspective. The best I have found for collaborative efforts.

 

[haldir]

thanks coll

 

[Colleen Thomas]

thanks coll

Np. I know it works, only because I have co authored two works, both with dmeanding and experienced writers, on a published professional. the dual 1st lets you both write with your own voice rather than having a choppy exchange and by doing sections at a time, you convey the uncertainty people generally have with others. It may not be the only way to do it, but it's the best, easierst and most contiguous way I have seen.

 

[haldir]

I'll give it a go.
thanks agen

 

[Guest]

Np. I know it works, only because I have co authored two works, both with dmeanding and experienced writers, on a published professional. the dual 1st lets you both write with your own voice rather than having a choppy exchange and by doing sections at a time, you convey the uncertainty people generally have with others. It may not be the only way to do it, but it's the best, easierst and most contiguous way I have seen.

Yep, I just wanna back up all Colly said there. That way works, and it works well. It's also a lot of fun to write that way.

 

[haldir]

its been fun to write so far - but we want to get it ready to post here so - thanks for the advice, we'll give it a go

 

[ABSTRUSE]

I have to admit, I too am currently working on a Vampire story...I started it last July and felt the urge to try to finish only because I want to see if I can do Erotic Horror.

 

[haldir]

loved the total freedom of bein a vampire

 

[BlackShanglan]

Any help/suggestions/therapy out there?

I suggest sending me every picture you have of that gorgeous bekilted fellow in your AV.

(And I agree with Colly. Either first person switching, or if you really crave third person, make it third person limited omniscient heavily wired through "your" character's POV. Idiosyncratic, heavily voiced, heavily limited. The reader should feel a noticable shift when it moves to the other character, and I think that's good.

Shanglan

 

[logophile]

I'm working on a story like that as well. Not a vampire story, but a collaborative story.

How does it get submitted? That's the confusing part for me right now...

 

[gotwood49]

does anyone know?

I'm working on a story like that as well. Not a vampire story, but a collaborative story.

How does it get submitted? That's the confusing part for me right now...

This is my question, as well. Do you submit under both names, or does one submit, giving the other credit? That way, it seems as though the 'submitter' gets more credit in most people's minds than the 'submittee'...even though the work was shared more or less equally.

Can two people submit the same story, with the same title, separately?

Thanks for your help, someone...anyone?