The begginning of a luv scene including physical dissabilities

Pinnochio

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This start as just a test to see if I could write an erotic piece, I am not very comfortable in this area. I'm a vigin so I do'nt have any experiences to take moments from, but anyway, here it is...

I sitting on my shower stool, and the water run over my body. I slowly was my hair and hum to myself. Just outside of the bathroom door I hear footsteps. Strange, I live alone and my girlfriend is not supposed to be over for an hour. I continue washing my hair; soap runs into my face and I run my hand along the edge of the shower searching for a face cloth.
“Is this what your looking for?” a voice giggled. I wiped away the soap and opened my eyes, it was Seriana.
“Whoa, what are you doing here?” I said jittery as I hid myself behind the certain.
“Aww, are you a little shy? You look rather sexy I think.” Seriana said to me. I heard rustling outside of the shower.
“I, I’m just not very comfortable with you seeing me naked.” I was jittering violently from nervousness. Suddenly a foot appeared and Seriana stepped into the shower; I closed my eyes tightly.
“Why are you keeping your eyes closed sweety? I don’t mind if you see me naked. I’m seeing you naked.,” she giggled.
“Ah, its not gentlemanly to stair at a naked woman.” I said. She grasped my hand and placed it on her chest. I could feel the warm flesh on my skin; not only could I feel her body, I also felt beat; her heart.
“Feel that? That’s my heart beating quickly for you. Now open your eyes sweets.” Just as I opened my eyes she kissed me. “There, now isn’t that better?”
 
Pinnochio,

Im no expert but I'd say you pass!

Right on....and write on!

:cool: Killswitch
 
Pinnochio said:
This start as just a test to see if I could write an erotic piece, I am not very comfortable in this area. I'm a vigin so I do'nt have any experiences to take moments from, but anyway, here it is...


warm flesh on my skin; not only could I feel her body, I also felt beat; her heart.

pinnochio

I love the storyline and the concept

The whole idea behind it gives me the vapors!:p
Outside of a few understandable typo's and maybe rephrasing the sentence above, you are doing great...:( I am jealous!!!

Ms. M
 
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