Story Criticisms

[BlackShanglan]

hmm. Should I keep a curry-comb handy?

Bridle. And if you happen to own a crop ...

 

[Boxlicker101]

Box, I'm coming to quite adore you. But ... that was the only odd thing? This man sounds like he needs his own special ward.

Shanglan

Well, that wasn't the only odd thing. of course, but most of it was just normal babbling but the man in the story was not "me" but Don was writing like it was.

 

[elsol]

Well, that wasn't the only odd thing. of course, but most of it was just normal babbling but the man in the story was not "me" but Don was writing like it was.

A lot of readers do that...

I sometimes have to tell them...

If my sex life were anything like my stories, I would be too busy to write about sex.

Sincerely,
ElSol

 

[Stella_Omega]

Bridle. And if you happen to own a crop ...

my dear, of course I do. Bridle? Let me call my leatherworker...

 

[Stella_Omega]

Well, that wasn't the only odd thing. of course, but most of it was just normal babbling but the man in the story was not "me" but Don was writing like it was.

He blamed Colly, personally, for her interracial story. Told her she would have a black baby and disgrace her husband.

 

[BlackShanglan]

He blamed Colly, personally, for her interracial story. Told her she would have a black baby and disgrace her husband.

Ah, yes. I do recall that one. Another superb work of our favorite author, A. Troll.

I'm sure Colly's husband is simply crushed.

Shanglan

(And Stella, you are wonderfully well equipped.)

 

[Stella_Omega]

Ah, yes. I do recall that one. Another superb work of our favorite author, A. Troll.

I'm sure Colly's husband is simply crushed.

Shanglan

(And Stella, you are wonderfully well equipped.)

I should have said- Bridle, no- but I do have a harness! but i wasn't thinking that fast!

 

[Stella_Omega]

I woke up to a fantastic anonymous feedback in my inbox.

...Oh my god! I came like a train! THREE fucking times! My cunt is all syrup and throbbing now. Damn but the filthy kink in this was superb! ...

I feel validated now!

 

[BlackShanglan]

I feel validated now!

Somehow I just can't divorce that word from associations with parking stubs. How strange.

But congratulations on the feedback. It's so wonderful to feel appreciated.

Shanglan

 

[Stella_Omega]

I know, me too. I nearly edited that word out. Maybe it's appropriate though... When I think about it.

 

[Alex756]

Somehow I can just imaging someone sticking their panties in the parking ticket validation machine at barnes and nobel... course the parking lot attendent would't mind looking at that stamp...

Heh can you imagine if strip clubs vlidated... heck maybe they do.

Oh well I'm having a good feedback day since "Excellent in imagery, detail, plot, and other "mundane" details."

Almost makes up for the thing having my lowest score ever! *giggle*

~Alex

 

[BlackShanglan]

He's baaaaaack!

As I read through the Halloween Contest entries, what should I spy but ...

Great
10/01/05 by don87654 in USA
When a dick is in a pussy and shooting its baby batter, who cares what a name is? A name is only needed when the baby becomes a human being at birth.

Not on my own story, I should add - mine hasn't posted yet. But how nice to receive another illuminating glimpse into the World Which is Don. Don't you just love phrases like "baby batter"?

Shanglan

 

[Guest]

Don't you just love phrases like "baby batter"?

Shanglan

Ewww.

 

[elsol]

*shrug*

Getting to type "The End" after an epic struggle with my procrastination, creative wanderlust, having to work for a living, having to give time to the sig-other and the dog, wanting to sit in front of the couch and watch the new episodes of all the crap on tv, and my desire to make the piece as perfect as it could never be 'validates' me.

The good readers are like the part where she licks all the cum up. It feels good but the important part is over.

The nasty readers are like the part when you ask yourself... "Why did I just fuck my ex... again! I know the pussy is good but there's a fucking reason she's the ex."

Sincerely,
ElSol

 

[BlackShanglan]

Now I'm all obsessed.

Don's gotten me so intrigued. I checked out his public profile and found this:

White gentlemanly heavy muscular. Likes nudity, and barebacked sex. Have low sperm count and cannot be a natural dadddy.

I can't quite decide whether he's telling the truth and his insane obsession with pregnancy is overcompensation, or whether he's even creepier than one had previously assumed and is keen to get out there and shoot some deceptively potent "baby batter." I think that we can at least agree that he's not likely to be a "natural" anything.

He's also #5 on the "users making comments" list, by the way. What a busy boy. I had really hoped that there was a way to read all of his comments, just to surf the wave of insanity, but haven't seen any way to do it. Perhaps it's as well. There are things on heaven and earth, Horatio, that man was not meant to know.

Shanglan

 

[Stella_Omega]

*shrug*

Getting to type "The End" after an epic struggle with my procrastination, creative wanderlust, having to work for a living, having to give time to the sig-other and the dog, wanting to sit in front of the couch and watch the new episodes of all the crap on tv, and my desire to make the piece as perfect as it could never be 'validates' me.

The good readers are like the part where she licks all the cum up. It feels good but the important part is over.

The nasty readers are like the part when you ask yourself... "Why did I just fuck my ex... again! I know the pussy is good but there's a fucking reason she's the ex."

Sincerely,
ElSol

Well, your struggle is worth it, El Sol. At least from this reader's standpoint!
Myself, the communication with my readers is important to me, at least right now- it hasn't always been. But I didn't have access to a venue of this size, either.
anyway, that feedback letter actually went on for three large paragraphs. Quite a thing to read before your first cup of coffee!

 

[Boxlicker101]

Don's gotten me so intrigued. I checked out his public profile and found this:

I can't quite decide whether he's telling the truth and his insane obsession with pregnancy is overcompensation, or whether he's even creepier than one had previously assumed and is keen to get out there and shoot some deceptively potent "baby batter." I think that we can at least agree that he's not likely to be a "natural" anything.

He's also #5 on the "users making comments" list, by the way. What a busy boy. I had really hoped that there was a way to read all of his comments, just to surf the wave of insanity, but haven't seen any way to do it. Perhaps it's as well. There are things on heaven and earth, Horatio, that man was not meant to know.

Shanglan

I don't know if you can call this guy a troll or not. First, he signs his handle, which trolls don't usually do. Secondly, he makes suggestions as to how a story might be improved. They are dumb suggestions and sometimes impossible but they are suggestions. His criticisms usually reflect his own personal prejudices and are wrong but they are valid to him. Saying something is "good but could be better" is not exactly an insult. Probably every story on this site could be better. I don't know if he throws one-bombs or not.

 

[Selena_Kitt]

well I guess I'll know I've "arrived" at Lit when I get feedback from Don?? lol

 

[elsol]

well I guess I'll know I've "arrived" at Lit when I get feedback from Don?? lol

Hasn't happened to me yet... so I haven't gotten here yet either.

Sincerely,
elSol

 

[irxgbr]

Prostition

I think the trolls must read this board, I commented earlier that they don't say anything against prostitution. A few hours later my feedback mail has the following from Anonetroll:


"thank god there is aids taking care of these slimy whores and wimps"

 

[BlackShanglan]

I don't know if you can call this guy a troll or not. First, he signs his handle, which trolls don't usually do. Secondly, he makes suggestions as to how a story might be improved. They are dumb suggestions and sometimes impossible but they are suggestions. His criticisms usually reflect his own personal prejudices and are wrong but they are valid to him. Saying something is "good but could be better" is not exactly an insult. Probably every story on this site could be better. I don't know if he throws one-bombs or not.

Fair point. I think there's someone out there leaving the message "It's quite simple. Use a condom, get a 1." I don't know if it's him, though. And as you say, he has his priorities, however deranged, and seems willing to communicate them. But then, why not ... he doesn't have any stories up to 1-bomb.

Is it insane that a little part of my mind is whispering to me that I should write something just for him and see what the rest of Lit thinks of it?

(No worries; haven't really got the time.)

Shanglan

 

[Boxlicker101]

Fair point. I think there's someone out there leaving the message "It's quite simple. Use a condom, get a 1." I don't know if it's him, though. And as you say, he has his priorities, however deranged, and seems willing to communicate them. But then, why not ... he doesn't have any stories up to 1-bomb.

Is it insane that a little part of my mind is whispering to me that I should write something just for him and see what the rest of Lit thinks of it?

(No worries; haven't really got the time.)

Shanglan

There could be one person leaving two kinds of PC. One valid, if strange, suggestions, singned with his handle and the others reflecting his obsession, unsignbed and accompanied by one-bombs.

This description af himself: "White gentlemanly heavy muscular. Likes nudity, and barebacked sex. Have low sperm count and cannot be a natural dadddy." makes me wonder if he might be a gay man, especially the "barebacked sex".

 

[cloudy]

There could be one person leaving two kinds of PC. One valid, if strange, suggestions, singned with his handle and the others reflecting his obsession, unsignbed and accompanied by one-bombs.

This description af himself: "White gentlemanly heavy muscular. Likes nudity, and barebacked sex. Have low sperm count and cannot be a natural dadddy." makes me wonder if he might be a gay man, especially the "barebacked sex".

To me, it doesn't suggest anything about him being gay, but it does explain his obsession with pregnancy.

 

[Guest]

To me, it doesn't suggest anything about him being gay, but it does explain his obsession with pregnancy.

I agree with cloudy.

Not gay - why would there be mention of low sperm count? This is a man obsessed with spreading his progeny about the world.

(OR being able to stroke to stories that discuss spreading his progeny about the world.)

 

[Boxlicker101]

I agree with cloudy.

Not gay - why would there be mention of low sperm count? This is a man obsessed with spreading his progeny about the world.

(OR being able to stroke to stories that discuss spreading his progeny about the world.)

"bareback" is a term used in gay sex that means anal sex without a condom. I have never heard the term used regarding straight sex.