Story Criticisms

[Guest]

And what did happen, after all, to thisfadedangel? That was the only post ever from the identity.

I imagine it was someone's second alt. Their secret identity. Their extra-special smutty pen name.

Was it you?

 

[cantdog]

It doesn't read like a second alt, but like a newbie post. "Mods" don't remove things in the AH for being off topic or wrongly placed. Oh well. Good name, too, whoever it was.

 

[Just-Legal]

There is one poster who headlines almost all of his posts:
Good but could have been better

The body of his post invariably explains that he would have given the story a higher score if the heroine became pregnant during her cheating adventure.

This guy marks way down if birth control is used.

He has offered to coauthor stories in several public posts. My theory is: he wants the writer to do the writing and he'll shove in some out-of-wedlock pregnancies.


Most recently he has revealed himself to be a truly disgusting racist as well. If his 'pregnancy thing' is perverted by having pregnancy result from an interracial tryst, well, from his POV, what could be more revolting?

Ya gotta love the guy. He is IMHO Literotica's #1 pervert. He gives me the willies.

I get feedback from this guy as well. I just tend to ignore him, because he gets my back up.

 

[hugo_sam]

Too New

I get feedback from this guy as well. I just tend to ignore him, because he gets my back up.

I must really be too new, I haven't 'heard' from this guy yet. I've gotten the 'this sucks' and 'you're taking too long' comments but not from this guy yet.

I guess I'll have to write more.

Hugo

 

[irxgbr]

A few points from a forum newbie

From the twelve chapter story I have submitted:
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=205352
I have accumulated 129,000 views, not I concede reads, but have only received 55 pubic comments and around 65 private ones. That is around 1 in a 1,000 that show any interest at all. The majority of the comments have been genuine but I have been called a “black” and have been criticised for mentioned big black cocks. The thing I find strange is that the theme is prostitution yet not one criticism on that subject.

It is, I have learnt, best to be very pleased when I receive a genuine good comment and to accept any containing considered criticism. The crude and completely negative comments have got to be ignored. Remember it is only one in thousand that comment, you can fantasize that all the others enjoyed the read.

My hate is the voting system; the number of votes accumulated is about three times the total comments – a little less effort for the reader to hit the vote button. It is rather disappointing when you can see perhaps a dozen people in a day work through all the chapters, presumably therefore enjoying the read, but the votes count does not change.

My views on the voting system are shown here:
https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=364266

 

[BlackShanglan]

It's a pleasure to see new faces in the place. Welcome aboard, hugo_sam and irxgbr, and best of luck with the little gadfly nuisances that come with the territory. Fortunately I'm better equipped than most to brush them off. You humans really could do with tails.

Shanglan

 

[Guest]

I've never received any complaints about my tail.

 

[BlackShanglan]

I've never received any complaints about my tail.

I'm far too much a gentlehorse to be the first.

 

[Guest]

I'm far too much a gentlehorse to be the first.

No, you're not.

 

[hugo_sam]

It's a pleasure to see new faces in the place. Welcome aboard, hugo_sam and irxgbr, and best of luck with the little gadfly nuisances that come with the territory. Fortunately I'm better equipped than most to brush them off. You humans really could do with tails.

Shanglan

Thank-you Shanglan,

Glad to be here,(actually glad to be anywhere).
I will make no claims on my abilities as a writer, I just aspire.
After spending time with Uncle Sugar, Wally World and selling Jap cars in the Deep South, I am not easily offended anymore. You would just about have to physically assault me or go after my wife or son.
I just feel like I am too 'new' to have gone through the 'initiation' with the guy you were speaking of earlier.
I'm sure it will come in time

Hugo

 

[BlackShanglan]

No, you're not.

I'd be delighted to prove it, but I really couldn't comment without firsthand experience of the tail in question. Perhaps I should conduct a careful empirical analysis.

Thank-you Shanglan,

Glad to be here,(actually glad to be anywhere).
I will make no claims on my abilities as a writer, I just aspire.
After spending time with Uncle Sugar, Wally World and selling Jap cars in the Deep South, I am not easily offended anymore. You would just about have to physically assault me or go after my wife or son.
I just feel like I am too 'new' to have gone through the 'initiation' with the guy you were speaking of earlier.
I'm sure it will come in time

Hugo

Or, with any luck, you'll discover a delightfully amusing new troll all your very own! Please do post and tell us if it comes up with something especially risable or clever, like 1-bombing any story that contains a present participle or repeatedly commenting "Good but could have been better if the male lead had worn a string bikini" on stories in the "Erotic Horror" category.

Seriously, all of the best to you.

Shanglan

 

[Stella_Omega]

well.. I just got this one, my very first comment on this story;

I guess I wanted a more lesbian story
10/01/05 By: Anonymous in USA
I like BDSM if it's erotic, and if it involves elements of submission and dominance mixed with physical attraction for a slavegirl's lovely body by her female mistress. This story falls short of that mark. First, the very word "boy" in the title gave me second thoughts, and I don't care for a mistress only wanting to be "serviced" by her slaves when instead she should be wanting to enjoy their lovely bodies in a variety of ways. This one lacked the sensuality and fantasy element I crave.

umm... I can change the description, to "leatherdyke BDSM at Camp Fist" but really.. Once you read the word "Boy" in the title, why would you go any further?
Can I delete it? please?

 

[cantdog]

I love you when you're sarcastic. Very fine.

 

[BlackShanglan]

well.. I just got this one, my very first comment on this story

...

Can I delete it? please?

Hysterical. A whiney, sub-absorbed top-from-the-bottom like that needs an extended and profound acquaintance with some of the firmer implements in my footlocker. And for heaven's sake, a ball gag. Dear lord, it really is all about you, isn't it?

Loved the comment on "boy." Earth to reader ... come in reader ... hellloooo ...

Shanglan

 

[yui]

Hysterical. A whiney, sub-absorbed top-from-the-bottom like that needs an extended and profound acquaintance with some of the firmer implements in my footlocker. And for heaven's sake, a ball gag. Dear lord, it really is all about you, isn't it?

Loved the comment on "boy." Earth to reader ... come in reader ... hellloooo ...

Shanglan

This is world

This is world revolving around you.

 

[Boxlicker101]

I would welcome the angel to the AH but I am not sure he or she is still here because nothing else has been posted on this thread or anywhere else.

I remember one comment that said good but could have been better but I don't remember what story it was. Maybe I can fined it later. It wasn't anything about pregnancy, though. Safe sex is used in most of my stories but I have never received any complaints on it. I have also never had any complaints on interracial stories but most of them have been a white man and a woman of another race.

 

[Boxlicker101]

Here is one criticism I got from this guy but it's not the one I was thinking of:

Misrepresented
08/20/05 By: don87654 in USA
You need to study the culture you are writing about. First of all, "Carlos" would signify a Latino of some sort. This is further emphasized by dark skin and black hair. As such, most Latino men do not carry rubbers or condoms, because it is part of their culture to have as many babies as possible to ensure adequate care by their offspring in their older years. Secondly someone as old as "Carlos" in that culture would have fucked several times already.
It is obvious that you do not know much about Latino culture as I read this story.

OK, Here is the other one:
Good, but could have been better...
06/07/04 By: don87654 in USA
I checked and re-checked, and checked yet again. There was no mention of you putting on that condom, but afterwards you "took it off"? Were you born with a condom on, or something?

This fantasy story started off good, with her being a single mommy with a baby. That means that she did not have to have a marital ceremony to fuck. Which is the way God made us, inasmuch as we become "one" in bed, with or without matrimony.
Being that she is a single mommy and you are not obviously married, would only add to the possibility of her getting pregnant with her second baby (yours), without benefit of matrimony, unless you both wanted it.
There is excellent room for a continuation here, but you don't seem to be able to do it?

The odd thing is that this was a third person story.

 

[BlackShanglan]

The odd thing is that this was a third person story.

Box, I'm coming to quite adore you. But ... that was the only odd thing? This man sounds like he needs his own special ward.

Shanglan

 

[elsol]

As such, most Latino men do not carry rubbers or condoms, because it is part of their culture to have as many babies as possible to ensure adequate care by their offspring in their older years.

Ohh... that's why Latin women don't like me.

I'm fucking way behind on my baby scorecard for a man of my culture.

Mystery solved.

Sincerely,
ElSol

 

[Stella_Omega]

Hysterical. A whiney, sub-absorbed top-from-the-bottom like that needs an extended and profound acquaintance with some of the firmer implements in my footlocker. And for heaven's sake, a ball gag. Dear lord, it really is all about you, isn't it?

Loved the comment on "boy." Earth to reader ... come in reader ... hellloooo ...

Shanglan

but- can I delete the comment? well, I did. Even though it didn't have spam in it.. or a live link to a URL, I deleted it.

 

[BlackShanglan]

but- can I delete the comment? well, I did. Even though it didn't have spam in it.. or a live link to a URL, I deleted it.

And the world will thank you. Although I'm glad you've immortalized it on this thread; comedy like that is hard to come by.

Shanglan

 

[Stella_Omega]

Box, I'm coming to quite adore you. But ... that was the only odd thing? This man sounds like he needs his own special ward.

Shanglan

He sounds like a six-year-old that was told how his mommy and daddy made him... ah, the great pleasure of the internet!

 

[Stella_Omega]

And the world will thank you. Although I'm glad you've immortalized it on this thread; comedy like that is hard to come by.

Shanglan

I think I'll grow a tail. Just so I can wave it at you...

 

[BlackShanglan]

I think I'll grow a tail. Just so I can wave it at you...

So long as you're prepared for the consequences.

 

[Stella_Omega]

So long as you're prepared for the consequences.

hmm. Should I keep a curry-comb handy?