Returning to My Love

[BgMma]

Today, you told me again
You love me
Everytime I hear that
I grow fonder of you
Today, I have found peace
In your arms
My lips pressed against your neck
As you hold me
I feel the rush and pulse
Of your heartbeat
I rejoice it, knowing you are here
Knowing that you are alive
My desire awakens with your smile
You tell me you love me again
For everything you are
To me, I know
How precious I am to
Someone, to you
You whisper to me with words I don't understand,
But knowing that you
Say you love me once more.....
You hold my hand to your
Chest and I feel it,
Your heart beating quickly
Because of me
Of my own love for you
As you look into my eyes
You ask me if I can really feel you
I do, I say
I close my eyes as I wonder
At my life with you
My hand moves through you
You smile and pull me closer
Melting into you, with you
Becoming one ever after
Until there is only us
We feel so good, my lover
Inside me, around me
Surround me
Never let me go
I am truly yours

Ik affectie jij.

I hope this is right. I wanted to surprise you, lover.

 

[Ezarc]

That was beautiful.

 

[BgMma]

That was beautiful.

TY, E, you are much too kind

 

[Ezarc]

TY, E, you are much too kind

Never such a thing as too kind. Plus, it is true.

 

[littlekateyes]

That is sweet, and beautiful!!!!!

 

[Ezarc]

Hi Stranger

 

[BgMma]

That is sweet, and beautiful!!!!!

Thank you as well. I am adding something and I hope it means what I think it does.

 

[Native Alien]

very nice and please keep writing....

 

[BgMma]

very nice and please keep writing....

As long as he still loves me, I will keep writing.

Thank you, that was very nice of you to say.

 

[Guest]

 

[BgMma]

ugh, what crap poetry

you should have gone for something baroque - they more accurate convey feelings of love, than meaningless greeting card poems strung togtehr

And I should care what you think because............

 

[Guest]

 

[BgMma]

because although Im no authority on poetry, and dont partic like it, I know whats good from whats bad

those sentences there ahve no structure..no rhythm..and no natural progression. The words falter, lack in substances, and are weak and reminiscent of sickly, saccherine greetings cards

If youre after powerful, emotive love poems, its true that the oldies conveyed it with so much more elegance and force than the paltry stuff done today

though of course Im generalising

shakespeares sonnets, and andrew marvell are wondrous.

Again, why should I care?
I just write as I go, how I feel, and what comes to mind.
I don't study "the greats" and I refuse to plagurise or even attempt to copy the sentiments by mocking them.
My feelings are my own and my thoughts are what they are.
Go find someone else to fuck with because I don't have time any longer.

 

[Guest]

 

[BgMma]

but..if I wrote that Id be embarassed

I have read the poem and come away feeling nothing

theres no thread to it, its full of nothingness

its just cheesy, repeating words like 'love, truly, heartbeat, rejoice (ps, you rejoice In something, not rejoice soemthing, but I can forgive that)

dont you see you are copying more with this poem than if you were to use shakespeare? This poem just chruns out re-used, cliched crap

shakespeares words are precise, exact and pay true homage to love

This is tiresome.
It wasn't written for you, so why care? Frankly I could care less. Thank you for at least bumping my thread, though. I like the publicity.
So, once again, I am not a professional poet, I am not a student of poetry. I am writing to someone I love very much who doesn't us much English.
So, if I must explain it, he doesn't speak English that well so I am trying to keep it where he can understand it. Until I finish learning his language, I can't convey what I feel in the manner that is appropriate.
Are you happy now?