Request for feedback: The Shopping Spree by SomaSlave

SomaSlave

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I'm back after a hiatus and continuing Soma Slave's journey of discovery. This is the first part of a multipart story in which he is taken by a group of men on a very special shopping trip. While fantasy, I've also tried to make it sound as if it could happen (one can dream, right?). It involves the usual Soma Slave trademarks: blindfolded encounters, much cock sucking and cum swallowing, an attempt at literate, natural dialog and an epiphany or two along the way. I would appreciate comments and feedback, especially as I'm trying to hone my style and make the prose a little less purple.

The Shopping Spree, Pt. 01

Thanks in advance for helping me become a better writer
 
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