Painted Story Into Corner

[NOIRTRASH]

I created a scene that breaks most of the LIT rules but is a good scene. There are no ways around the prohibited content restrictions, so there's no point asking for suggestions how to do it.

An old judge is married to a much younger woman. He uses his position to procure lovers for her, and likes to watch the action. But things go wrong at her birthday party. Hubby promised her a surprise gift, and he didn't lie.

 

[NOIRTRASH]

Solved the problem.

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I was going to ask what were the issues, but I guess you've gotten it figured out.

My problem, I sometimes write about younger people. This one story about a girl that gets kidnapped and over the years she starts living with the guy and since she was taken a a young age she assimilates to the lifestyle and it seems normal to her. So aging her up to 18 just doesn't work.

 

[NOIRTRASH]

I was going to ask what were the issues, but I guess you've gotten it figured out.

My problem, I sometimes write about younger people. This one story about a girl that gets kidnapped and over the years she starts living with the guy and since she was taken a a young age she assimilates to the lifestyle and it seems normal to her. So aging her up to 18 just doesn't work.

No animals or kids in the story, but the old husband brings home two brutes to watch them fuck his wife. The husband brings her men all the time. Its her birthday. But in the middle of her thrills it all becomes a nightmare.

The solution is to leave the scene out but make it the end of the story.

 

[sr71plt]

If there was no point asking on the Lit. forum . . .