Not sure if this is the right place

[CdKimMajick]

But I published a story and a comment said it was rushed from middle to end. And I'm confused as to what that means, Not enough details?

 

[THBGato]

Presumably, though bear in mind that is just one reader's opinion. It might also mean that the pace of the story changed, or that the reader felt the language was less nuanced in the second half.

You could try posting a link here (or a subforum relevant to the genre/kink) to see if anyone will give you a second opinion.

 

[CdKimMajick]

Presumably, though bear in mind that is just one reader's opinion. It might also mean that the pace of the story changed, or that the reader felt the language was less nuanced in the second half.

You could try posting a link here (or a subforum relevant to the genre/kink) to see if anyone will give you a second opinion.

Thank you very much. This helps me.

 

[ElectricBlue]

Yes, it's a very short story, and it's rushed, more from beginning to end, I'd say, not just middle to end. You've got a couple of "who cares about the back story" paragraphs to lead in, a bit of a scene at the airport, then it's straight into a quick and simple, highly unlikely fantasy, with not much else going on.

I'm surprised it didn't get knocked back, to be honest - your dialogue punctuation is all over the place, you've got tense shifts from sentence to sentence.

Once you've written something, you need to take time to read it over and edit the best you can - I don't think much time was spent doing that. Slow down, take some time, and you'll tell a better story.

 

[CdKimMajick]

Yes, it's a very short story, and it's rushed, more from beginning to end, I'd say, not just middle to end. You've got a couple of "who cares about the back story" paragraphs to lead in, a bit of a scene at the airport, then it's straight into a quick and simple, highly unlikely fantasy, with not much else going on.

I'm surprised it didn't get knocked back, to be honest - your dialogue punctuation is all over the place, you've got tense shifts from sentence to sentence.

Once you've written something, you need to take time to read it over and edit the best you can - I don't think much time was spent doing that. Slow down, take some time, and you'll tell a better story.

Thank you. I took a little more time with my second story but I might have fallen into the same issues. Right now on my home page under works number 2 says hot.

I will take your advice to heart and use it when I write my 3rd story. I used to be really good at writing stories back in school.

Thank you very much for the critique. And punctuation has never been a strong suit for me. I slept in English class all through High School because it was my first class every year.