So I'm a new writer. I am writing this as a present for my wife. Our sex life is a little simple and I thought this could be very erotic for us.
I am planning on trying to write three different stories for her. So I may need some feedback on those too.
I finished my first one list night and it is about 2500 words.
Let me now if your willing to help, I think I would prefer a girl to read it over.
Below is snippet of my story
"I reach for your body but you push my hands away. You stand up, our bodies completely pressed against each other. You move up to your tippy toes and give me another kiss and tell me to wait here, and that you have a surprise for me. You wiggle out from in front of me and move your dresser. You bend over obviously trying to show off your ass. I move myself and press up against you moving my hand up your leg staring at your knee up to your waist. I give you ass a good squeeze and then pull you tight against me. You stand up and keeping up butt pushed against me. I move my left hand around your waist and my right up to your neck. I pull your head sideways so I can kiss you again. After another log kiss you whisper to me “not yet” and push away from me grabbing your clothes and rushing out of the door.
I take of my pants and my shirt and climb onto the bed. Wondering what you are doing in the next room. I am already pretty hard just thinking about you and you did a great job of teasing me. After what seemed like an eternity you crack the door open and peak inside. You finish opening the door and I see your gorgeous body stepping into the light. A great treat indeed.
You step closer so I can see your body. You are wearing silk, all silk. A bra and silk panties. They must be new. You look at me and ask if I like what I see. I say I do very much. You ask me again if I am sure as you twirl in front of me. On your second rotation you bend over in front of me. You look back at me while bent over and waiting my response. I jump down off the bed and grab your ass with both hands and give you your answer. “You have no idea how much I like what I see.” In an instant you stand up and wrap your arms around me. "
I am planning on trying to write three different stories for her. So I may need some feedback on those too.
I finished my first one list night and it is about 2500 words.
Let me now if your willing to help, I think I would prefer a girl to read it over.
Below is snippet of my story
"I reach for your body but you push my hands away. You stand up, our bodies completely pressed against each other. You move up to your tippy toes and give me another kiss and tell me to wait here, and that you have a surprise for me. You wiggle out from in front of me and move your dresser. You bend over obviously trying to show off your ass. I move myself and press up against you moving my hand up your leg staring at your knee up to your waist. I give you ass a good squeeze and then pull you tight against me. You stand up and keeping up butt pushed against me. I move my left hand around your waist and my right up to your neck. I pull your head sideways so I can kiss you again. After another log kiss you whisper to me “not yet” and push away from me grabbing your clothes and rushing out of the door.
I take of my pants and my shirt and climb onto the bed. Wondering what you are doing in the next room. I am already pretty hard just thinking about you and you did a great job of teasing me. After what seemed like an eternity you crack the door open and peak inside. You finish opening the door and I see your gorgeous body stepping into the light. A great treat indeed.
You step closer so I can see your body. You are wearing silk, all silk. A bra and silk panties. They must be new. You look at me and ask if I like what I see. I say I do very much. You ask me again if I am sure as you twirl in front of me. On your second rotation you bend over in front of me. You look back at me while bent over and waiting my response. I jump down off the bed and grab your ass with both hands and give you your answer. “You have no idea how much I like what I see.” In an instant you stand up and wrap your arms around me. "
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