New Story Reviews (volunteers welcome!)

[lucky-E-leven]

Photographic Memory
Lucky-E-leven

This one gets a huge WOW out of me. It's a lovely portrayal of not only erotica and sensualism but love put into words that bring visuals that are incredibly hot. The scenes almost seem to jump off the page and stream into your soul. Well written in a beautiful voice I could find no wrong with this story, a very definite five from me.

I am so embarrassed. I had no idea this little gem of a review thread even existed. It's a fantastic idea, and I will certainly have to join in sometime.

As for the above review, I am humbled and awed that you enjoyed the story. I'm sighing a huge sigh of relief, as I've not written or posted anything in over a year. Thank you so much for your kind words and for taking the time to give the story a read. It is very much appreciated.



~lucky

 

[FallingToFly]

Tuesday Reviews May 30, 2006

Lots of new stuff today. This is what I read (not what I liked, necessarily, just what I read). Please keep in mind that these are my opinions only, and commentary should be directed to the NON STICKY thread on this topic. I apologize for how few of them I've done so far this morning, I just have very little enthusiasm for the task today, considering.

(Side tangent: If you don't like my reviews, email me or PM. Leaving Anonymous comments having NOTHING to do with the story on my submissions is childish, stupid, and truly shows your level of class. Not to mention that there's no point in making it an Anonymous comment when you are so pointedly attacking on another subject. Because of one person's immaturity, I will no longer review AHer stories, unless asked to do so. It isn't worth the bullshit because I have a different opinion than you.)

Reviews:

If the Oppurtunity Arises
TBA_UK
Novel and Novellas

I think that the author attempted to smooth this over, but it does need a good editor to swing through it. It was a little disorganized, but still an interesting premise- a fresh divorcee can get in all sorts of trouble after all- and the writer has a strong command of word usage. There is very little foreplay to the story, you get thrown directly into the action, and never find out the backstory. There are elements of date-rape, revenge, non-consentual/coercion sex that really could be explored. IF it was me, I would seperate the story (6 Lit pages long) into two or three sections and expand and polish them more. It's worth reading for potential, and I'm looking forward to more of TBA's stuff.

Dear Pet...
FogBard
BDSM

This story could have fit so well into Letters and Transcripts as well. The BDSM play is light, and delicate, and the way this is written is just lovely. It is very difficult to write a story from the "You would" standpoint and be able to draw the reader in, make them feel what you want them you feel, but this story did it, for me at least. There are some minor flow issues, the ending seemed a bit rushed, but all in all, lovely.

I Need Him
Katyusha
Erotic Couplings

A really interesting stroke story with a ton of potential for follow-up. It's well-written, engaging, and you can feel the emotion and desire involved on both sides. I would have loved more detailed description, but what's there works, and works just fine. I definitely recommend reading this one, and I'm puttign this author on my watch list.

AHer submissions for today:

Danica 15
Darkiniciad

A Slave of His Desire 15
Daniellekitten

Into the Sunset 4
Techsan

Male Fantasy: Legendary Prom
Ted-E-Bare

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

First review today:

Binding Fantasy- by WillingSlutPartner

Category: Fetish


Review: Great fulfillment of fantasy there. Seems like she has the makings of a subbie. I would love to read a sequel to this tale of naughty group sex and bondage play. Very vivid and sensual description of what happened to the husband's cock and wife's pussy, as well as the German whore. Would love to see an encore of the blonde hooker or some other local girl for his threesome. The absence of any sex with the whore and the hubby was the only thing that I didn't like. Everything else was great, and the wife's question about HIS fantasy is a good lead-up to filling that gap.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

2nd review:

My Sergeant- by Chocolatecherry
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=258049

Category: Erotic Couplings

Review:

This one definitely got me hard.

Very hot and intense. The danger. The forbidden nature of it. The wild, shower sex. The passionate crush by the female soldier for her Sergeant. Fraternization was never quite this hot. The only flaw was that the Sergeant didn't wash his cock between fucking her ass and returning to her pussy. That kind of thing can lead to infection. Just a thought for realism's sake.

In general, however, this is well-worthy of an AH Review. Very sensual and a good balance of sex and plot, what with the military backdrop and all.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

3rd Review:

Swimming- by luckyman99
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=258071

Category: Loving Wives

Review:

A simple, sexy stroke story which has promise. Very hot, as long as you don't think too much about the lack of detailed sex at the end. The warming up and horseplay that lead to the sex were very sexy. Real smut without any need for a sequel, though there is some opening. I particularly like how oblivious the girlfriend was. Not too realistic, except for with very self-absorbed people. Evidently, everyone else had fun. A naughty tale, but nothing more than stroke.

I'll call this an example of raw talent that needs more experience.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

4th Review:

On The Bus: Sacred Spots- by SelenaKittyn
http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=258105

Category: Chain Stories

Review:

Excellent surprise at the end. Don't know who the wise older man is really supposed to be, but he evidently is "extraordinary". So is the sex. Not too short, not too long. It's a matter of opportunity....or is it? Did the older man perhaps CAUSE the mechanical delay? I have to wonder. Full of mystical discussion too. Clearly, it's encounter of the 4th kind- sex with a strange alien being, plus plenty of older man/younger woman appeal. He seduced her, no matter whom made the first move. Not that it was a bad thing. She needed to be seduced.

Very great tale of mysticism and sex. Hot and smart at once.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Final review:

A Slave of His Desire- Ch. 16 by Daniellekitten
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=258065

Category: Sci-Fi Fantasy

Review:

A true fantasy tale. Very excellent. It has everything that belongs in fantasy: sex, war, gorgeous women, slavery, cross-dressing, politics, strange customs, odd names, magic spells, rape, intrigue, and revenge. Well done. I will have to read more of it. Now that I see what the fuss is all about. And the sex in particular was nice and hot.

 

[Aurora Black]

The only flaw was that the Sergeant didn't wash his cock between fucking her ass and returning to her pussy. That kind of thing can lead to infection. Just a thought for realism's sake.

*screams*

 

[3113]

*screams*

Thank you, Aurora.

Stella was the usual watchdog for these things, and while she's gone we have to maintain her very high standards and strict commandments, of which two top the list: (1) "Always use lube" and (2) "Never, Never go from ass to pussy!"

So allow me to join you, using Stella's oft-heard cry at such times:

EW! EW! EW!

 

[angelicminx]

A little late on the first one, since it posted yesterday, but...

Down to the Bone Ch. 01 By 3113
Category: Romance

Wow! 3113 has written a very compelling story with clear, concise characters and has definitely earned the much coveted E. I fell in love with not only the main characters, but the supporting characters as well. Each character has depth and personality, which makes them easy to imagine. The storyline is well thought out and executed. The extensive research that went into this piece serves to enhance believability. I love the cliffhanger ending of this chapter and I can’t wait to read the next one. Thank goodness, for my sake, it’s already available.

Down to the Bone Ch. 02 By 3113
Category: Romance

This chapter was a beautiful ending to a very loving tale. Several conflicts were resolved and positive changes were made. This story was written with such exquisite talent that I could not stop reading until I reached the end. Very well executed and also deserving of the E that was earned by the author.

 

[Guest]

June 1, 2006 Thursday Reviews

Ohhhhh
What's this.... it must be thursday.
Greetings everyone and I hope that your having a splendid day.
As always I will post the stories that catch my eyes, attention, heart, or bile....

Good luck and always remember Read, Vote, Comment.... it is how author's grow and learn.

Lizzy

Preachers Daughter
Author: daintydeviant
Category: Incest/Taboo
My thoughts: Two paragraphs in I was slightly dismayed at the lack of commas anywhere. The storyline caught my eye enough to continue reading it however. The story was a little rough however it had a good storyline. I have a tendency to appreciate a story even if the grammar and spelling are bad IF the plot and story are decent. I liked this story and the premise behind it. I would be thrilled if someone would offer to edit for this author.

The Christmas Party
Author: LT1963
Category: Exhibitionist & Voyeur
My thoughts: Althought not my chosen category I enjoyed this very much. I truly liked this line: "She was a balance of "Class" and "Slut" all wrapped up in one." This had enough plot to keep you interested and enough sex to make it hot. I hope that this author continues on with this type of tale because they seem to have a knack for this category.

Preacher's Daughter is Now A Slut
Author: appllevalyan
Category: Loving Wives
My thoughts: In the first paragraph the author tells the readers to go and read a story that predates this one. Being game I clicked on their name to find the story but alas could not. They also stated that this was a true story. I suddenly felt like I was reading penthouse forum "I never thought this would happen to me" type of things. It was a stirring tale of a woman that has come into her sexuality and enjoys it greatly. It was fun and silly at the same time but it may just 'do it' for the lady readers.

The Declaration
Author: H2Owader
Category: Loving Wives
My thoughts: Now this is interesting. The author uses the format and wording from the Declaration of Independence to write this piece on a husband divorcing his wife. I thought it was quite kicky and definitely encourage others to go and have a read.

The Hitch Hiker: Debbie
Author: Just Plain Bob
Category: Loving Wives
My thoughts: I have now read a few of these and from what I can tell they all center around a single man giving rides to different women over time. If I am wrong please correct me. I actually find this interesting because doing over the road driving like I do I tend to see lots of hitch hikers. Ya never know who someone will pick up. As I was giggling reading... I had to ask, "Which company do you work for that has a terminal in Denver?" Maybe we have passed on the road. PS... I read all of the ones of this authors that posted today... there were several and all were good.

T.I.M.
Author: Nakod Apa
Category: Erotic Horror
My thoughts: Oh this story twists and turns. I enjoyed the suspense very much and I think that this author is on to something. Not many in my opinion can pull off erotic horror and not have ti sound trite and all death and destruction. Good job and good luck on your next piece of work.

Bethany's Breasts
Author: deepemerald
Catebory: Erotic Couplings
My thoughts: Hot romp in the sack. I like take charge aggressive women. They are a breath of fresh air at times from the submissive women in so many stories (mine included). I enjoyed this one and I hope that you do as well.

Today also brings us an E from the Editors: Down to the Bone Ch. 02

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Friday's Reviews

Seventy new stories up today... here's what grabbed me...

Butterfly Wings by FallingtoFly is a beautifully written, poignant non-erotic piece with a lovely metaphor at its core. Short and powerful.

A Paperback Romance Ch. 08: Punk Rock Love by Mistress Jett is a fun story-within-a-story romance (no sex here, but lots of yummy sexual tension) that shows quite a bit of a writer's process. Loved the interaction between writer and cat.

Want to Get Laid on Your Travels by Munachi is a how-to that gives great advice about how to meet a stranger in a strange land. It's solid, well-written, and interspersed with good personal examples.

Vanilla into Butterscotch Ripple is NightSpirit's first offering on Lit. I loved the title--drew me right in! This piece could have used a good editor (a few spelling error: "whole" instead of "hole" and "loose" instead of "lose" etc.) but on the whole, it was a good first effort on how to slowly change the flavor of a relationship.

Nursing Home Honeys a first offering by ichabodstinks is really quite amusing, a "mature" version of Paris and the golden apple... had me smiling all the way through.

A Visit to the Pet Shop is Ponderer's second offering on Lit. This story gives new meaning to the "bring your pets" to the pet store idea. Woof! It's a fun romp, quite dryly amusing.


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That's all for today from me. If I missed any that you really enjoyed, feel free to mention them. Don't forget to go Read, Comment and Vote!

Edited to add:

GOOD GRIEF, I can't believe I missed this! I did reviews this morning and went back through the list and saw a lot more added... thought I hit them all... didn't! :x Thank god for the Feedback Portal...

The Devil's Lesson by one of my admitted favorite author's Dr. Mabeuse takes on one of my all-time favorite legends--Robert Johnson's crossroad bargain with the devil. It's a witty, fun piece with a devil that I'd frankly love to meet, and it's got a powerful buildup and a poignantly satisfying ending. Definitely not a disappointment from the Doc.

What are you waiting for, sitting here listening to me babble? Go! Read!

 

[NightSpirit]

Thanks for your kind words SelenaKittyn.
I mostly relied on MS Word and two live people for my editing, but no "authors" per se and neither one has an english major.
(My spelling and grammer is normally atrocious)

It was a first submission, and I decided to rush it, rather then put it off never to be finished or submitted. (like my Mind-control story)

I may just try and finish it now.

Thanks,
NightSpirit

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Saturday's Reviews

There were only 6 stories as of 8:00am my time in Indiana: I was able to get to 4 of the 6 I'll do the other two later if no one else picks them up.

The Wild Wild Mess Ch. 6 by wildwildbest - Interracial Love - 5 This was a nice chapter to a series I'm going to have to catch up on. Wonderful relationships between lovers and the family members who drive us all crazy. Great Read.


Lingerie Shop Ch. 02 by CocoaSmoothie - Erotic Couplings - 4 This was the second story of CocoaSmoothie's I've had a chance to read and review. I would have placed this in Lesbian Sex. A detailed read, but I'd have liked to seen more dialog, other than that I think the story was well told and very steamy. More dialog would have added, in my opinion, more steam to this read. But as far as erotic couplings... no it is lesbian sex. There is a brief stint where the man comes in and touches the woman, but other than that is this all Female play; good female play.

The Evil Within Ch. 3 by BarondeSade - Incest/Taboo - 5 I wasn't sure I wanted to keep reading this story once I figured out what was happening. But I did. Then low and behold it is a cliffhanger... grrrr. Was the sex hot? Hmmm... Yes, it was if you are someone that can get past the idea of what is occuring in the story. I couldn't. I was definitely wondering how it was going to play out and I have an idea, but even I know you never guess a head and so I will look for the other chapter that should answer my question... Give this a read if you don't mind EVERYTHING that can occur in a sexual relationship. I don't want to say what so I'm not gonna. Back Click if you can't give this author a fair reading, because the writing isn't worth a low rating.

Daddy and the Little One Ch. 3by bronzeage - Novels and Novellas - 3 This is a chapter that is used to pull you to the next. I say that since there is no description of how the relationship started... so this chapter in my opinion can't really stand alone. I have to decide from this chapter if I would want to read ahead or back read to catch up. It didn't pull me in. It left me going, huh? That doesn't mean it is a bad read. I just found it lacking. Perhaps it is a wonderful story and if I go back to Chp. 1 and start from the beginning I'll enjoy it, but that isn't how I review Chapter stories. To me each chapter has to be an adventure and I don't believe this one hooked me.




Approved Yesterday:

Four Sisters Saloon Ch. 01 by LuckyBastard 13 - Chain - 5 This story was hot. I loved it and hope to see more. LuckyBastard13's first story here on Lit. and I sure hope it isn't the last. Anonymous feedback was off so I couldn't leave a comment, but if the PM is available I will do so through that. This is the first story about what I hope are some naughty stories of a man, his wife, and her sisters... Yummy read.

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Full story list is up, just wanted to give a shout out for these:

Amy by Neonlyte is not your typical incest story. It's smart, well-written, has a wonderful teasing energy about it that builds up to very hot sex and a rather sweet ending. Can't wait to read the next one!

There is No Joy in Trollville by Boxlicker is a humor/satire piece about those nasty ole trolls... gotta go check this one out!

Chocolate Kisses by AsylumSeeker is an erotic horror tale with a fun twist at the end. Thoroughly enjoyed it!

Wrong Side of the Fence, the second offering by Catalingus2005 explores a not-oft discussed or acknowledged subject matter in the Lesbian category. It's well written and the characterization is haunting and quite brilliant. Go read this one. Go. Now.

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Just wanted to fill in a little today... if I missed any that you enjoyed, feel free to mention them! And don't forget to Read, Comment and Vote!

 

[LadyCibelle]

June 4th 2006

60 New stories today. Lets see how many caught my eyes.

Jessica by Just Plain Bob JPB once again did a good job at surprising me. This story is about a husband who decides to stop having sex with his wife when they decide to stop having children. What's surprising in this story is that JPB painted a wife who's in a big quandary and weighs everything before making a decision. I'll admit to have a favourable prejudice to LW stories where the cheater gets caught and pays for it but in this particular story I was rooting for the wife to make her decision and either dump her husband or cheat on him willfully.

Brad's Life by DG Hear This story contains something to please everyone: romance, multiple sex partners, morality lessons, self doubt etc... It's a story about a guy finding his way in the "real" world and all he has to do and go through to find his soulmate. I'm partial to DG Hear story and I admit it but it wouldn't be fair that I don't review it. Personally I think this one deserves to be right up there with his bests.

Disgusting by Shale Love or Hate it? It won't make a damn bit of difference when you're done reading it. You'll be left, well at least in my case I was, with an understanding, as small as it may be, of why certain people enjoy the natural body scents and what it does to them. I'm not quite ready to stop washing myself every day but I have acquired a better respect of those who don't for those particular reasons.

There's probably a whole lot more for people to enjoy and I most probably forgot a lot, so, please don't hesitate to add your own review if you found something else to your liking.

 

[DG Hear]

Thank you 'LadyC.'

]DG Hear[/URL] This story contains something to please everyone: romance, multiple sex partners, morality lessons, self doubt etc... It's a story about a guy finding his way in the "real" world and all he has to do and go through to find his soulmate. I'm partial to DG Hear story and I admit it but it wouldn't be fair that I don't review it. Personally I think this one deserves to be right up there with his bests.


Lady C. What can I say. I was hoping the story would make the review board. We both know I put everything I had into it. Funny to see you had the reviews today. The comments are agreeing with you, that this is one of my best. Some say you were wrong and it is my best. As always, thank you for reviewing it and most of all, Thank You for helping edit it. Without your help and the help of 'Techsan'. I would be lucky to get a three let alone a 5.

Your friend
DG Hear

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Filling in for DanielleKitten... hope your mom is ok...

74 new stories today... here are a few that caught my attention:

How to Ruin a Marriage by Mistress Jett is a painfully wry, tongue-in-cheek how-to that makes me want to hug MissJett and kick her ex’s ass. It’s very well-done, and perhaps it might serve as a wake-up call for some.

Be Careful What You Wish For Ch. 01 by Psychotic Dreamer is a sci-fi/fantasy tale set in a futuristic world that reminds me a little of Atwood's A Handmaid's Tale. It's the first effort by this author and a good one. I'm looking forward to the continuation of the tale. I agree with some other commenters that perhaps the protagonist gave in to her fate a bit too quickly, but this is fantasy, after all.

Oscar the Friendly Ogre is a humor/satire piece by Lord Bitememan whose title alone made me giggle. (And I kept picturing Shrek through the whole thing!) This was really quite a smart, funny piece with a subtle *ahem* political message woven in.

Black Magick Ch. 01 by Lady Malachite is an incest tale with an interesting theme. It has a nice build-up and does a great job at creating tension. I'm curious to see where this is going.


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That's all from me. If I missed any that you enjoyed, feel free to mention them! And don't forget to Read, Comment and Vote!

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Also helping out.

War Wounds by FirefightinAngel - Celebrities - 3 - The title of this caught my interest and then the description line reeled me in. I enjoy racing, like many do. This is FirefightinAngel's first story on lit. It isn't a bad first time work. It needs some editing and I would have gone into more detail over how she got into the place, the nervousness and then the sex itself I found lacking. I think this author shows potential, just needs practice. A story of a young woman that sneaks into the pits and gets caught by Dale Jr. yummy thought.

The Obsession of Longing by Coolville - Text with Audio - 4 -The voice is HOT... the sounds are too brief and leave you wanting more of those naughty gasps that jump out at you... Surprised me! Shivers. The story is short 4 min. but if you wait... you'll hear something that sounds very nice.

A Stud Search by bbw4youngercocks1 - Loving Wives 4 - A fast paced read. This caught my interest because I had recently written a story about a couple wanting to have a baby, so I was curious how someone else handled it. I would have liked to see the guy interact more in the sex (the husband) and then the scenes them self last longer with more stimulating detail. It was too rushed in my opinion, still a hot read though.

How to Charm Panties off by leggydragonlady 5 - A fun how to. I enjoyed reading it and would agree. . . great advice to charm my panties off if I wore them.

 

[Lord Bitememan]

Gosh, I'm absolutely blushing after that review.

 

[Guest]

Reposted Note

WEEKLY REVIEW SCHEDULE:

Mon: DanielleKitten
Tues: FallingToFly
Wed: SeverusMax
Thurs: Lizzy
Fri: Selena
Sat: RedhairedandFriendly
Sun: LadyCibelle

Check back daily as each day the author's listed above review stories for that day.

Does your story come out on a Wednesday... watch out to see if SeverusMax reviews it.... and what catches LadyC's fancy on Sunday.... how about Danielle for that Monday morning cup of coffee and a story, or Lizzy reading the stories hot off the presses on Thursdays. FallingToFly has the stories that debut on Tuesdays covered while Madame Selena has them for that lovely TGIF day... and Miss Red will be easing us into Saturday with her reviews.

Please take the time to Read, Vote, and comment on stories (and poems) each day for without those we none of us can grow.

If you wish to comment upon a review made or you just don't see a story reviewed that you felt should have been please post HERE.

Thank you for keeping this thread clear and respecting the reviewers.

 

[leggydragonlady]

How to Charm the Panties Off

Thanks for reviewing my little story RedHaired and Friendly. I appreciate your comments, and including me in the new story reviews.

Leggydragonlady

 

[bbw4youngercocks1]

Thanks for the review on my story. I was quite pleased that I was included in the reviews; I enjoy feedback very much. It helps me do better.

 

[FallingToFly]

Tuesday Reviews, 6/6/06

AH Authors that have stories out today:

The Pits
Weepingguitar
Erotic Couplings

Unfolding Ch. 3
SelenaKittyn
Anal

Truth or Dare Ch. 3
SelenaKittyn
Novels and Novellas

Fast Horses
kbate
Lesbian Sex

Babysitting the Baumgartners Ch. 4
SelenaKittyn (who apparently has a deal with the devil with the amount she had go up today, lol)
Exhibitionist & Voyeur

Babysitting the Baumgartners Ch 5
Selenakittyn
Exhibitionist & Voyeur

I'll be back with actual reviews for stories later, I just thought we'd all like to know who has new stuff out. Also, there was a story by a Dr Mabuse SOI, Zoot, I don't know if that's you on an alt or not, but it didn't look like one of yours. If it is, let me know and I'll edit the story link in here.

 

[FallingToFly]

More Tuesday Reviews...

The Mirror
enfantterrible
Novels & Novellas

This is a very interesting little story about a woman, on the last edges of youth, trying to satiate her inner demons through sex. There's a good, decent stroke in there, but more than that, you get a glimpse into a deeper, stronger story. I'm wondering where this is going to go, as the set up is excellent.

The Club
millieteases
Letters & Transcripts

A really cute story about an older group's "club." It's actually a really nice set-up, done in the form of a letter from one person to another, and I like the premise of the club itself. I will say that I wouldn't recommend it to those who love die-hard stroke, but if you're looking for a naughty little fantasy and a spot of titillation, this is a nice one. It's a short 2 Lit page read, but it went faster than you'd think.

Used and Examined By A Stranger
chad1972
Loving Wives

A good, well-written stroke story. I could have done without some of the dialogue, but I really thought it worked, and worked well. There's no intercourse, but plenty of pussy and anal play to make everyone happy. I thought I'd throw it up before the trolls had a chance to congregate.

(More added later, lunch time!)

Later now... here are a few more:

My Thoughts On Writing Erotica
epiphany65
How To

I really liked this!! It's a smart, practical, and sensible essay on writing erotica, full of encouragement, tips, and friendly advice. It worth reading for the simple humor of it (the comparison of a cock to a cold carrot made me grin) and it's a great little read.

Fast Horses
kbate
Lesbian Sex

Oh, wow. The sex admittedly is not my strongest point in this case- I'm a horsewoman myself, and I got caught in the racing aspect of it (the Maryland Hunt Cup is one of those races that I desperately want to either ride in or watch from the rail) and then fell into the romance of it. I love the strip jump-off, I love the way it worked. AS I said before, I'm a horseperson, so for me, the horses made up for the lack of detail-oriented sex (although there's a kitchen table I wouldn't have minded being on) but this really is more of a love story than a stroke story.