New Story Reviews (volunteers welcome!)

[DG Hear]

My Brother's Wife
DG Hear

I love most of DG's work and this one is good also. A four lit page story about a man who is in love with his brother's wife and the events that unfold around them and the family. It's sweet and loving, with moments of sorrow and some of joy. I gave it a five.



Maybe more later.[/QUOTE]

As always DK thank you for taking the time to review my story. I do feel it as an honor to have my story reviewed among so many good writers. As for you, it is always good to hear from you, even if it's on AH.

With great respect for your writing
DG Hear

 

[Guest]

DG Hear....

Please refrain from posting your comments to the reviews on this thread.... we have repeatedly tried to point you and some others in the correct direction as to where to post....

this is the link to post all of these comments you keep making...

https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=428875

It would have been sent privately but you have all of your email and PMs turned off so this is the best we can do.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

1st Review Today:

I had contemplated not reviewing any stories today, but that wouldn't be fair to the writers that would normally catch my eye, so here is the first.

Beth In Waiting- by Sweet Shay
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=260158

Category: Incest/Taboo

Review: Aside from ending a little sooner than I would have liked, it was a damned good story. Very steamy. It got me stiff and kept me that way. Stroke stories about cheating spouses are always a nice change. The incest helped out too.

There was no PC section that I could see, but I sent her an e-mail with basically the same comment, adding my thanks to her for writing it and the fact that I have mentioned it here.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

2nd Review:

Delights in Time Ch. 02- thecelt
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=260166

Category: Loving Wives

Review: This is a gripping tragic tale. Aside from accidentally calling Roz "Ruth" once, it was very much worth reading, as sad as it was. I know that some would disagree with his choices, but all in all, I wouldn't. Well, aside from what he had done to Ted. Business and family matters should be kept separate, not mixed like that. Generally, I was impressed with this story. The plot was very well written out and the dialogue was quite believable. Even the secretive way that he behaved, hiding things from her just as she had from him was a nice touch. I also like that he didn't punish the kids for their mother's misconduct. They were innocent and didn't deserve to be out on the street or poor.

I informed the author in question of his mention on this thread.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

3rd Review:

Honey's Hidden Desires by writingforfun
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=260221

Category: BDSM

Review: While milder of a bondage theme than some I have read, it was still a great read and well worth my time. Once again, I got very aroused and thoroughly enjoyed everything from the ass-to-mouth sex, to the gagging, to the spanking. That and the girlfriend's surprisingly positive reaction to the discovery about her beau's kinks. Apparently, she was more open-minded than either of them thought. I suspect that their relationship won't be stale for a while.

I will let them know that they are mentioned here.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Final Review Today:

Passion for Paris by amberlamonte
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=260134

Category: Celebrities

Review: Clearly a fantasy, but a very hot one. Yes, I know, Paris Hilton is overrated. I agree with that assessment. She's too hyped-up. Yes, I find it hard to suspend disbelief long enough to think that she is a transsexual. However, it was HOT! This story of a regular girl meeting with and fucking Paris Hilton, complete with a "dirty" secret, and plenty of sensual rimming, was fantastic. I almost missed this story, and I'm glad that I didn't.

At first, it looked like the makings of a hot lesbian fantasy, which would have been great too (more believable as well). However, the combination of the shocking detail of male anatomy on a famous socialite and her evident requital of lust for the ordinary, unknown woman were great. The vivid details of exploring each other's body parts didn't hurt, either. I give this one high ratings for bold imagination and highly sensual fantasy. Great job there.

 

[Guest]

Thursday, June 16th Reviews

**I apologize this was done yesterday very early in the morning however with the storms in KS and in CO I couldn't get a solid enough connection to post it**

Well it is bright and sunshiny on this Thursday morning....
The Nude Day Contest has started today, there are a few stories posted for it already. I will not be reviewing them as I believe that puts undue influence on those stories that post today... or any day of the contest. I will however post a link to each story at the bottom of the reviews.

Please remember to Read, Vote, and Comment on any stories that you read. It is how authors learn and grow over time.

Enjoy!

Making the Grade
Author: bandito_slim (first time author)
Category: NonConsent/Reluctance
My thoughts: Story... student needs better grade, bad teacher takes advantage of said student. I had hopes for this story but there were instances of calling the characters by the wrong name, the tense switched a few times, and it was typical. I would love to see this author try something like this again but play the scene out more. Heck maybe even change up the POV and make it 3rd person omni so that we can see inside of her head and the teachers head. Something different to spice it up. I gave the story a three for a score, I think this author can do so much more... I see potential.

X-Men 3: Additional Aftermath
Author: AchtungNight
Category: Celebrities
My thoughts: I was glad to see that the author had enough forethought to mention that there would be spoilers in the story for those that had not seen the movie. I have seen it so I thought I would be fairly safe reviewing it. Well this story had me hooked fairly quickly. Hot hot hot! I am not usually one for celebrity stories but I think it helped that I had seen this movie already. I read the two comments that were on the story. They were slightly negative... but here is the thing: celebrity stories are rough for one reason... the author is taking already known characters or stories and working with them, if they get any one little detail wrong then someone that knows that story or those characters will jump on them. I think that the story from a person that is a fan of XMen but not so die hard that I would know a whole lot about the comics would enjoy the story greatly.

Bisexual Black Guys http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=260325
Author: Samuelx
Category: Erotic Couplings
My thoughts: Interesting premise, a man that simply has sex with whom he wishes instead of worrying about whether it is a woman or a man. My issues: I wish that it had been longer, I know only need 750 words to be allowed to submit it but there are just some stories that are better longer. My happy places: The guy seemed to geniunely enjoy what he was doing. I am a big fan of enjoy who and what you are if you can.

The Neighbors Son
Author: hammertime
Category: Interracial Love
My thoughts: I know at one point there was a thread floating around regarding peeves in stories. One of mine has always been about describing people in clinical terms. Meaning "she was 120 pounds and five foot eight" I think this simply feeds into negative stereo typing of people... I wish that authors (myself included at times) would find better ways to describe the human body. I got the feeling that the issue of the young man in this piece being African American was stressed beyond the point of telling the reader. Stating it once maybe twice is sufficient. Anything more then that and it can get tedious. Naughty slutty teacher. Four pages of solid writing as soon as the story progressed some. This author has public comments turned off.


There are ALOT of new chapters from continuing stories up today... I think it would be unfair of me to try and evaluate a piece of a puzzle if I don't know what I am looking at... however please go and check out these authors and their continuing sagas.



Nude Day Contest Entries:
Kimmy by hyulhyulhyul
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261085
Capital City Art Exhibitionism by kbate
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261132
A Slut Named Carrie by RedHairedandFriendly
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261280

 

[Selena_Kitt]

The Writer by Kaereni is a short, non-erotic piece about a fan first seeing from a writer's perspective. Enjoyed this. Writer's Block is another non-erotic offering along these lines as well worth mentioning and reading for those of us who write.

Wall of Hands by Irishboon is a non-human story with a great premise. There's a lot of exposition here, which isn't my style, but it caught my interest and kept me reading until the end. Only the 2nd offering by this author, looking for more great stuff in the future!

Rayne's Charming Adventure Ch. 01 by Danny69 is this author's 2nd story on Lit, and it's not only a fun premise, it's very well-written. The dialogue here is snappy and real and brings both characters to life. This is the start of a fun series, looks like... watch for more from this author.

A Letter to Barbara by Ronnie Wachuka is in Letters/Transcripts and makes for a very sexy read with a wonderful surprise ending.

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A Few Nude Day Entries (undue influence be damned!):

A Big Weekend by Ted-E-Bare is a fun, well-characterized story with a surprisingly sweet ending. Really liked this.

Alien Frolic by R Richard has got to be the most unique story I've read for Nude Day yet! It's a sci-fi/fantasy romp. My only complaint is that sometimes I had a hard time keeping all the aliens straight!

The Magic Book by Many Feathers is a group sex story with a totally fun premise. The sex was hot, the idea was great, and I loved the ending.

And last but by no means least, Sexual Politics by Neonlyte is a Romance that really got my juices flowing! This couple is a European version of Mary Matalin and James Carville... only way sexier and more interesting! Boy, opposites sure do attract and create a great deal of heat in the process. This gets a big *yumilicious* from Selena! It's a smart, witty, extremely well-written (and did I mention hot?!) piece of work!

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That's all from me for today... if there are any I missed that you enjoyed, please feel free to mention them! Don't forget to Read, Comment and Vote!

Please also remember to direct any COMMENTS or QUESTIONS about these reviews HERE. Thanks!

 

[Many Feathers]

Wow...

The Writer by Kaereni is a short, non-erotic piece about a fan first seeing from a writer's perspective. Enjoyed this. Writer's Block is another non-erotic offering along these lines as well worth mentioning and reading for those of us who write.

Wall of Hands by Irishboon is a non-human story with a great premise. There's a lot of exposition here, which isn't my style, but it caught my interest and kept me reading until the end. Only the 2nd offering by this author, looking for more great stuff in the future!

Rayne's Charming Adventure Ch. 01 by Danny69 is this author's 2nd story on Lit, and it's not only a fun premise, it's very well-written. The dialogue here is snappy and real and brings both characters to life. This is the start of a fun series, looks like... watch for more from this author.

A Letter to Barbara by Ronnie Wachuka is in Letters/Transcripts and makes for a very sexy read with a wonderful surprise ending.

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A Few Nude Day Entries (undue influence be damned!):

A Big Weekend by Ted-E-Bare is a fun, well-characterized story with a surprisingly sweet ending. Really liked this.

Alien Frolic by R Richard has got to be the most unique story I've read for Nude Day yet! It's a sci-fi/fantasy romp. My only complaint is that sometimes I had a hard time keeping all the aliens straight!

The Magic Book by Many Feathers is a group sex story with a totally fun premise. The sex was hot, the idea was great, and I loved the ending.

And last but by no means least, Sexual Politics by Neonlyte is a Romance that really got my juices flowing! This couple is a European version of Mary Matalin and James Carville... only way sexier and more interesting! Boy, opposites sure do attract and create a great deal of heat in the process. This gets a big *yumilicious* from Selena! It's a smart, witty, extremely well-written and did I mention hot piece of work!

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That's all from me for today... if there are any I missed that you enjoyed, please feel free to mention them! Don't forget to Read, Comment and Vote!

Please also remember to direct any COMMENTS or QUESTIONS about these reviews HERE. Thanks!

Thank you so much for the plug and mention on my story. Much appreciated and glad you enjoyed it.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Saturday's Reviews

There were 24 stories out this morning at 7:40 my time. These Titles and their description tags caught my interest this morning. Please remember this is only my opinion. If you'd like to comment or discuss the reiviews please post Here . Thanks and enjoy the reads and remember. .. if the PC option or email option is on please leave the author a comment and vote. Thanks ~ Red

New Author: (for my establishment only new author's are 3 or less stories)


Billy - by cheto1 - Exhib/Voyeur - 3 - An average title and an average description line, but that is why I chose it. I thought something quick and simple to start my morning; it was quick and it was simple. A story of a man who watches a sketch artist and a non-willing model that suddenly becomes willing with the guy watching??? This didn't make sense to me. She walks away from the one guy and ten feet away she takes another?? There is potential here. I was surprised how the story turned in the middle and went the way it did. PC option was turned off, but email was sent concerning this review.


Smoking Has Its Risks - by surrealerotic - Non/Rel - 5 - When I choose a story to review I read it to the end. I look at it from all angles. Was it well written, descriptive, good sex (whether my preferred sex or not - doesn't matter... I seperate myself from that). So why was it hard to rate. I finished reading it because of my policy to finish reading what I start. I finished reading it to find out if "John" was going to intervene. I finished reading it to find out what was going to happen at the end. That is why this story gets a 5 and that is the only reason. It pulled me in. It made me want to finish it. It made me want to find out what was going to happen to that pain in the ass John and the girl he screwed over. What happened... I like John hoped she enjoyed it, for if she didn't... well you read and you decide. I only ask this... if you choose to read this story, you rate it how you think it deserves. If this story pulls you in and makes you read it to the end, then don't bash it, because the author did their job... they kept you hooked.

One Week - by tipofyourtongue - Anal - 4 - A simple, short, and descriptive read of a woman taking a bit of a trip down memory lane. It was an enjoyable read and speaks of how the "she" in the story came to like Anal.


Ashley on Ectasy - by bandito_slim - Exhib./Voyeur - 2 - A story about a gal at a club on Ectasy. The story is short and can be read in no time. There is some problems with tense jumping that makes the story come across rushed and in a hurry, making the reader see saw back and forth and this is distracting to me. The concept of the story had potential, but it was lost in translation. I was just a guilty as tense jumping when I first submitted to lit., so I hope this writer sticks around and improves the quality of their writing. I would like to see this story redone with more detail and have the writer slow down, take a minute and write as if you are watching it. Then when it comes to the sex... write it as if you are watching and doing it. Paint a picture with your words, don't be in a hurry.




Established (4 or more)



My Sweet Little Crossdresser - by VTDarkAngel - Trans/Cross - 3 - A short, quick, read. This story wasn't arousing in my opinion. It was a bad story either. There was not enough description of the sex act and that may be what makes this story score low. There was also just something lacking... it seemed mechanical.


Sunrise - by Britwitch - NonHuman - 5 - A nice short read about a Witch about to meet her maker... maybe??? This has the telling of a great leading chapter to what I hope is going to be a series. I enjoyed it very much. The sex, minimal, but the potential for a naughty night with Eve is there.


The Bet - im_invisible69 - Group Sex - 5 - A stroke story and a hot one in my opinion. A bit of bondage and a lot of sex. It was a bit tricky to follow with her being tied, but still able to stroke the men in the story, but once I was able to wrap my mind around the "positions" everyone in the story was in, I was able to. That was the only drawback I had, otherwise in my opinion... it was easy to put oneself in the story... easier for me since his characters wife had my name. LOL...That was a SURPRISE. You don't see that name in stories very often.



Reviewer's Stories - If I missed a reviewer my apologies, just let me know and I'll review your story if you desire. Thanks.

Babysitting the Baumgartners Ch. 10 - by SelenaKittyn - Erotic Couplings - 5 - The first paragraph made me want to read Chapter 9! Excellent opening and just enough to let the reader know that this is going to be an interesting read. The folks are hungry... you know where that leads... the kitchen and food... and you won't be disappointed when there is more on the menu then bologna and cheese. The dialog is great the narrative wonderful.

Falling Ch. 20 - FallingToFly - Celebrities - 4 - It is hard to review chapter stories, but I do my best to do so fairly. This is one that I believe has to have the others to support it and so I won't rate it low, since I haven't read the other works. I have to rate it on the question... did it make me want to go back and read more. In my opinion it didn't and that is the reason it gets a 4 from me and not a 5. The dialog is fast paced and quick and if you've kept up with the series you'll know what is going on, if you haven't... you'll be wondering huh? Then you have to decide... do you want to find out more about these characters. It is well written, just didn't pull me in.

 

[Guest]

I had problems getting into Literotica today, so these are late.



Miss Taken
Recidiva

A wonderful short story that had me laughing and smiling as I read. It wasn't what I had expected when I first read the story which made it even more worth reading. A very definite five.



Her Private Oasis
Creamypeaches4u

A short one lit page story about a man and woman professing their love. I enjoyed the work though there were parts that could have used some smoothing over. I happen to enjoy a touch more back story and maybe even some names every once in a while but it was a good stroke story. Definite four.



Garage Gang Rape
Slut4Use

I thought since I was doing reviews I should try out some different categories. So what could be more different. The writing is good, the story moves along fast, definitely doesn't drag. And if your idea of a good stroke story is getting gang banged by five big black men, then this story is for you. While it isn't my cup of tea, I have to admit that if the author were to write something I found interesting I would very definitely read it as there is a flare for writing. I give it a four.



The Belle of Coeur D'Alene
Dynamite Jack

Wow, and I do mean wow. A seven page story that kept me glued to my computer as I read. The author put a lot of blood sweat and tears into this one and it shows. An interesting story about a woman who is raped and becomes pregnant and how she finds true love in the end. I enjoyed the work and find it a definite five. Good job, DJ.



That's it for me today, thanks for reading my reviews. Any comments you may have about the review or about anything I have said may be added into the link that is on my signature. Have a good evening.

 

[FallingToFly]

Tuesday Reviews for 6-20-06

No idea how many new stories there are, this is just what I read.

If Clothes Make the Man
Salvor-Hardon
Reviews and Essays

A really introspective and very realistic look at nudity and all its meanings. Non erotic, but very thoughtful, and it provokes thought as well. I enjoyed it because it made me personally review some of my choices in my writing, as to clothing vs. nudity. Very nicely written, and a short, easy read.

Rough Tongues and Sharp Teeth
AvayaNox
NonHuman

This is a first offering for this author, and while it's very engaging, it cuts you dead in the middle of the story. It also could use a good going over by a competent editor. I'm assuming this is the start of a series, because of the way it ended, and I hope to get to read more of this. It looks like it will be fun, once the preliminaries are out of the way and the plot starts rolling a little faster.

Eastside Vampires Ch. 1
joeys-oven
Gay Male

This story is set up like a roleplay scenario, each character taking a turn at telling the story from their viewpoint. It even includes Bio sheets at teh top of the story! I read through and was highly amused, despite the formatting problems where the words run into the borders, by the story. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Will add more later... must go rescue the cat from the kids...

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

1st Review Today:

In Laws In Charge by The Dark Cloud
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261007

Category: Incest/Taboo

Review:

Between the cheating, the incest, and the lesbian bondage, this was a guilty pleasure. Well, the cheating was the guilty part. The rest was a pleasure. I didn't care for the husband's mousy, weak approach to the marriage or his failure to confront his wife, but it was still hot! It would have been more realistic had he made some move to announce himself, but I suppose that he will at some point. I just hope that he asserts himself in the sequel, and finds his balls at last, instead of being a cuckold.

Then again, that's a personal opinion. All in all, it was still a steamy tale of lesbian, in-law fun. The title and description certainly caught my eye, as did the story itself. I'll give this one 5 points for overall heat as a stroke story. It doesn't deserve to be judged for its moral or ethical issues, after all. It was a solid stroke story, with plenty of sensuality and suspense (like the last part about the mother being involved too). I really enjoyed reading about Denise topping Kelly. It was quite the turn-on, particularly the anal part.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

2nd Review:

Taking Amy Ch. 01 by extraone
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261175

Category: BDSM

Review:

This story was a little shorter than I would prefer, but it was still very intense and sexy. The image of Amy getting into a slutty outfit and presenting her body for her new Master's video camera was extremely sexy. I particularly enjoyed the oral part at the end. It was pure stroke, without question, but worth my time nonetheless. I'd have to give it a 4, only taking a point off for its abrupt end. I would recommend this story anyway, as great stroke, and I will definitely read more by this author. The paragraph where her cheeks are spread apart also aroused me a lot.

I'm about to let him or her know that his or her story has been reviewed.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Richard’s Time by SEVERUSMAX - BDSM - 3 - Reviewing a reviewer’s work is hard, but I do my best to read it and treat it like all the other things I have read for the review thread.

I think there was too much time spent on explaining the callus attitude of Richard. The attitude of the character was already explained in the author’s opening note concerning the character’s selfishness, so to spend so much time explaining it in detail, to me was not necessary. The interaction between the characters seemed rushed and unrealistic, granted this is fantasy so having the main characters come together quickly happens all the time in stories. I think more time should have been spent on the “service” the girl provided and more detail as to how Richard was aroused. The story comes across clinical, in my opinion.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

3rd Review Today:

Hieros Gamos by sarahhh
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261172

Category: BDSM

Review: This story didn't really belong in BDSM. It fit MC or NC/reluctance more. It was also very much into preaching and quoting Scripture back and forth. However, it was thoughtful about religious cults (the ones that really qualify as cults, due to bizarre and abusive practices and demands by a single leader, as well as brainwashing and other sinister methods). The hypocrisy of the leader, demanding "repentance" for Sapphic sex, while insisting that it was good to brainwash women into servicing him, seemed to make him a real villain.

I am not generally a sarahhh fan, I'll admit, but she did well this time. Between the nasty fun of the hypnotized sex and the wonderful revenge she took, I liked it a lot. I particularly enjoyed the ending, for reasons that are obvious. I recommend this story, give it a 5 in spite of its shortness and preachiness, and will let sarahhh that she has been reviewed here.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Final New Review Today:

A Couples View On Swinging by Wes99
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261153

Category: Group Sex

Review:

I really enjoyed this he said/she said story, though there was far more emphasis on her fucking around than on him doing so. The lopsidedness and lack of dialogue were the only real complaints that I have. However, I am only taking points off for the latter, not the former. The former just reflects the man's voyeurism and the wife's exhibitionism. The latter is an actual defect. I give it a 75 out of a 100 for that.

The scenes with the other couples, a form of swinging known as "swapping", were very hot, despite being abbreviated. Reading about all of that mixed cum and the lack of condoms turned me on more. However, I was also glad that they were reasonably selective in their choice of partners, especially due to the absence of condoms. Orgies are always a turn-on for me, and the autobiographical style helped.

Their opinions and arguments made sense, and were familiar as the same basic mindset that my slave and I have about jealousy and love. Of course, there is the difference, that they were prompted by boredom, unlike my girl and myself. In any case, I could relate to the desire for variety and fun with others.

They could have used more dialogue, however. I let them know that they were being reviewed, of course.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Old Review: Holdover from yesterday.

...since I ran out of time yesterday to do my older story review, here it is-

Awakenings by RedHairedandFriendly
http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=239225

Category: BDSM

Review:

Magnificent! I loved it. I particularly like how the sub serviced him while he was on the phone. I also loved that the protagonist was not a supermodel or physically flawless. As someone who loves a woman who worries a lot about her weight, I can appreciate what having a curvy lover is like. I'm glad that your male character not only topped her (as I do with my girl), but also insisted that she show him her body instead of hiding it in shame. I also liked that they had a safeword, and that he flogged her and used orgasm denial as punishments for her disobedience. Most of all, it was a love affair, as well as a BDSM relationship, which adds another level of intensity to it. I was very turned-on by it.

 

[Guest]

Greetings and good Thursday morning/afternoon to you....
Ah yes another thursday comes around again....
Today I will review what strikes my fancy and then do a few story spinner reviews in various categories that might strike my fancy. I will note if someone is a new author, old author and where the spinner stories are located.

Have a wonderful day and now for the rest of the story....

Naked and Public
Author: Rassendyll
Category: Exhibitionist & Voyeur
My thoughts: I started reading this story just ho humming along and then I realized that I was completely and utterly lost. I have no idea what direction this was supposed to be taking but I believe the author missed the mark of where they were going. There was a lot of talking in this story and not much story. When the author got to the story part there wasn't really any of that. I think that there was a good intent here, a good theory about what the author wished to do but simply did not get there. If the author goes on to make another chapter of this I hope that they expend on the idea that is obviously there just not so greatly executed.

Banished to Purgatory
Author: dass4450
Category: Mature
My thoughts: I had to giggle at the opening of this one where the man is married to some hot wet dream babe but destested it... every BBW alive cheered seeing that one. I had to frown at some words that although they would get through spell checker were not what the author intended (mail instead of male). However, spelling faux pas aside I enjoyed this hearty romp thoroughly. It was fun and had a nice story embedded under the sex. I loved that the author used REAL women in the story instead of super model wanna-bes. It was a good giggle fest and a happy tingle between the thighs. Kudos.

"Gasoline" Special
Author: Decayed Angel
Category: Gay Male
My thoughts: And the best laid plans come back to bite a person in the behind. I loved the premise of this story. It is very timely as well since most in the US are dealing with for the first time gasoline prices that are unbelievable. Woohoo, hot to trot after reading this story. I truly enjoy a good gay male story and this one was a treat. I will leave the particulars out so the story is not spoiled but it is definitely a fun read. Yippee!

The Search
Author: shavenswimmer **new author**
Category: Anal
My thoughts: Well the story is written in second person POV. Ack. I think my big issue with this POV is that I think it should be reserved for letters or a story written to ONE specific person. I have a hard time reading a story that is saying "you" through the entire thing because it is not actually me and I may not be able to fit into the niche that the 'you' implies. That being said, I enjoyed the telling. It was a cute story without really a story more like it was a scene from a story or novel. I would fit as a great filler piece for a novel or as the sexual scene in a longer story. I did enjoy it however and think others would as well. The author has public comments turned off.

Benefits of Divorce
Author: angelomysterioso **new author**
Category: Erotic Couplings
My thoughts: First... a woman student teaching in a black mini skirt, purple sweater and high heels...um no. This story made me think of soul mates. It also brought back the argument that seems to crop up between friends and I all the time about whether people marry their true soul mate or just settle because they are afraid of being alone. This story made me think that the universe had tilted for both of them but had finally righted itself. I think I missed something in the story. The characters speak as if they have known each other for years and years, but (unless I am really off) the author sets it up as if they had only been talking through IM for a short period. Kudos also to this author for placing the use of a condom in the story. This author has public comments turned off.

Thawing the Ice Queen
Author: GrampyWriter **new author**
Category: First Time
My thoughts: About half way down the page there is an author's note in the dead middle of the story. I had to admit I was laughing heartily reading it. Although the author is being truthful and thumbing their nose at the 'norm' on some stories I thought it was highly amusing. The ending is just OUTSTANDING. I can't tell... I just can't but it is absolutely hysterical. And since I am HUGE fan of Terrible Towels I gave this one a 5 on that alone. WOOHOO!!

Dori Comes to Visit
Author: Ghostwalker
Category: Erotic Couplings
My thoughts: Nice stroke story. I actually truly liked the storyline. I agree with another commenter that this could indeed be an ongoing storyline if the author chose to and seeing this author's other works I can see that it might very well be headed that way. Don't read this wanting virtious sex, read it because it was just good sex.

Blind Draw
Author: jack_straw
Category: Loving Wives
My thoughts: This category... le sigh. However with the way that the story turned out, the herione Judy is in fact a loving wife, just not in the sense that the name of the category implies. I enjoyed this story, I enjoyed the description of her and of the scene. The tenderness touched my heart and I was happy to read it. I happily gave it a 5. This story made me feel good and I am glad that I read it.

Happy
Author: snfl_grl
Category: Nonconsent/Reluctance
My thoughts: I was confused as to the beginning of this story. It is a reluctance/BDSM story. It is a short bit of stroke fiction. It might get you going but your going to have to finish on your own.

Tempted
Author: flamekitten
Category: Incest/Taboo
My thoughts: I have to say that I enjoyed this story. It is not your typical brother/sister incest story. There is a plot, thought, feeling, and love here. There is a teeny tiny little moment of a fetish slip in there but it should not be a turn off to any of the readers. It was another feel good story that made me happy to read it.

NOW... for the story spinner:
My first spin brought up "Helene Blackmailed" by dr_mabeuse; I do not feel that I am a good enough writer to critique someone of his caliber so I spun the stories again.

Wedding Night Blues
Author: nasty_dan
Category: Incest/Taboo
My thoughts: I have read a few things by this author before so I felt fairly comfortable reading and reviewing one of their older pieces. This might not appeal to everyone. It tends to fall in line with some of the my husband isn't man enough or around enough storylines. I enjoyed it for what it was a good piece of erotica.

Have a lovely day.
Lizzy

 

[Selena_Kitt]

75 new stories... here are the ones that tickled me today:

Going Home by Dinsmore is a well-told Romance tale. There’s a little too much exposition here for me, especially in the beginning, but that may be more a style preference of mine than a complaint. Once the story gets rolling, it doesn’t stop. Tear-jerker, this one. Bring your Kleenex.

Walking in my World by Sean Renaud is in Humor/Satire. I really enjoyed this character and the “character steps off the page” style from this author's Earth Day entries, and this continuation of Karen’s world merging with her author's is just delightful. Only complaint is that it could have used an editor’s hand (you’re instead of your etc.)

The Game Ch.01 by Gentlebutfirm is in Romance (I question the category choice at this point, but perhaps it gets more romantic in later chapters?) The characterization and voice of this piece drew me in. There’s a sarcastic, wry edge that’s quite enjoyable. It needed an editor, and a few more tags with the dialogue, and it ventures more into a “nonconsent/reluctance” territory than I’d expect in romance… but all that said, it’s well-done, sexy and intriguing.

Harmony by ForeverNAlways is in Romance and it’s a short but well-written piece of work. This is a new author to Lit, and this offering shows promise. The description is lovely, finely plucked and played, like music. I was enthralled.

Everyone Should Get Divorced by Tattooed John is in Reviews/Essays. This is bitterness through and through, so wear something flame retardant, I warn you. Still, it does have a sense of dark humor, very “War of the Roses” (if I’m not dating myself with the reference) that’s almost breathtaking in its pain--like the missing space where a tooth was that you have to keep pressing with your tongue, or slowing down at the scene of an accident… it’s compelling.

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Back In Time Review:

Raison d'etre by CharleyH in Non-Erotic

This is an incredibly dark piece of work, and truly not non-erotic, although the eroticism that takes place is not intended to titillate. This author paints pictures with words and metaphor that are so deep and profound that it’s often difficult to even look at them. They are breathtaking and beautiful at the same time they are disturbing and dark. It is a very fine and difficult line to walk, but this writer makes it look effortless. Not many authors can do what is done here in this short piece, and by the end, you are staggered by not only the events, but the talent that brought you there.

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That's all from me for today... if there are any I missed that you enjoyed, please feel free to mention them! Don't forget to Read, Comment and Vote!

Please also remember to direct any COMMENTS or QUESTIONS about these reviews HERE. Thanks!

 

[Guest]

I'm taking over for Red today who had to be out of town. Drive safely Red.



Jane Doe
Extreme Bohunk

I haven't read any of this author's work in a while so when I saw his name on today's stories, I had to choose his. Now I know I'll have nightmares tonight. The author captured one of my biggest fears with this piece, the horror of everyone thinking your dead but you still being able to feel. It was scary and grizzly and creepy. If you like horror, this is the story for you. I give it a resounding five with a ten on the creep factor.



Right Place, Wrong Time
Peppermintcrisp

Hmmm, it started out good, a fairytale with a bent towards humor. Then it just suddenly stopped. I'd love to read the rest of it to be able to give it a fair review but with what I have read, if she continues in the same vein, it should be good. I give this one a four for premature evacuation.



That Ain't No Way To Go
Rob Conner

This is a writer that I've never read. His style was refreshing though the sudden change of the wife's personality in almost midsentence was a little too abrupt I thought. Most women will continue to deny and fool if they are going to try to do what this woman did. It might have been drawn out just a bit more. But besides that, it was an interesting and well put together Loving Wives story that will do what all stories in that cat do. I gave it a five.



The Secret of Bond Manor
inkandchalk

This is a stroke story from the word go and a first story for this author. Three 18 year old girls get to take on a town full of men. Oh and of course they are all virgins, the girls not the men. The writing was okay and if you are looking for a quick wank (just gotta love that word) than this is the story for you. I gave it a four.



The Little People
OldandNew

This is the first story by this author and very well written. I enjoyed the cuteness of the tale as well as the imagination shown in the premise. I've always been a big fan of magic and magical creatures and this one I found very enjoyable. It just goes to show it's better to be a believer than a naysayer. Good job. I gave it a five.



And for the wonderful Random Spinner Pick of Old stories....

The Thirst: From 'Bridget's Nights'
Patricia51

Lucky me, my spinner stopped on a story that I hadn't read by an author that I admire greatly. Her work never fails to draw you in and hold you. She can write different genres so easily and so well that, to tell the truth, it's a little irritating. I guess that's jealousy. This story was a well written Vampire story that has intrigue and sex and blood, or course. At two lit pages I read it quickly and wished for more. It tells the tale of a 400 year old Vampiress and the trouble she gets herself into. The author has a way of humanizing that really makes you root for the Vampire in this story. Great job, Pati, I enjoyed it. Five from me.

That's it for today, I'm off to bed.

 

[OrgasmStick]

Who farted?

 

[Captain Midnight]

Who farted?

Not me.
Not me.
Not me.
Not me.
Not me.
My, what nice weather we're having!

 

[LadyCibelle]

Hello everyone on this nice and sunny Sunday. It's 12:44 PM Atlantic time and the temperature is 70 degreee presently, supposed to reach a high of 75.

There's only 15 new stories on my screen presently and nothing that catches my fancy so I'll come back later and see if more appears.

 

[Quinn71]

Hello everyone on this nice and sunny Sunday. It's 12:44 PM Atlantic time and the temperature is 70 degreee presently, supposed to reach a high of 75.

There's only 15 new stories on my screen presently and nothing that catches my fancy so I'll come back later and see if more appears.

Indeed a gorgeous day in Moncton