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It's Monday again, sigh, the beginning of another work week. Here's my take on some of todays stories. If you have any problems or wish to comment on my comments, please use the Link found in my signature. Happy Reading!
How to Get Your Characters Naked
Sack
It's so great to see something new posted by this author. Sack has been wonderful when it comes to getting out advice for the new author and this "how to" is no different. I, too, have read many stories where the couple get naked without taking off thier clothes. While some of the examples are a trifle corny and long winded, talk about long paragraphs, I found this "how to" to be helpful and well expressed,and in some areas, very funny. Glad to see you back, Sack. A five from me.
Hannah's Decision
SelenaKittyn
This short story is erotic in the extreme if you are into Doctor/patient stories. It also teases into the realm of financial domination but never steps directly over the line. Well written as are most all of Selena's work, the only problem I had with it was it seemed to end awfully quick. I would have liked to have seen what the next process would have been. A four from me.
Oh My God! Is It Mine?
Brit40g
I do my darndest not to write bad reviews because my mother always beat into me the golden rule, so maybe I should have back clicked out of this story. But since her bio said new author and a high school senior to boot, I felt the need to put in my two cents. The author has some sense of the erotic, but needs to learn the dos and don'ts of writing. Also, even though this story is in the humor/satire cat, I really didn't find anything funny about it. My advice would be to do some more reading, check out the different styles of different authors and keep writing. Writing is partially natural talent and a lot of learned style and grammar. Good luck. I gave this a 2.
The Desktop
SweetWitch
Well, wow, this story was definitely put into the right category though it could have gone into Loving Wives as well. Though I believe there, it would have been trolled into extinction. A one and a half page well told extremely erotic tale about a woman who gets pushed to the edge by responsibilities, work, house, kids, sick husband. I was impressed with the quality of the story as well as the quality of the sex scenes, though I'm not a big one on anal. Good job to an author I think we'll probably see a lot more out of. I gave it a five.
Love Discovered
Katyusha
I'm reviewing this one because the author asked, though I doubt I will do that again. This story was erotica broken up with flashbacks into how the relationship started. For a lot of readers out there looking to find a stroke story, this chopping up of the sex scene will piss them off. I found it an interesting way to tell a story about a relationship in small pieces. The paragraphs were a little long and hard to read, the first paragraph I had to read three times before I could finally get through it. I enjoyed the fact that the hero wasn't the muscled stud whose rock hard body was described in detail but a normal man with a pudgy middle. I think this author has some talent and could do much better with practice. It got a three from me.
Spin The Bottle
Poker1
If you're looking for a wank and like teenage girls and boys getting it on, this is the story for you. The author does a good job at keeping the details of who is who and who did what together, something that I've seen get screwed up more than once. I will admit that this isn't my normal type of story that I like to read, there was very little emotion shown. But if you like stroke stories, you won't be disappointed by this one. I gave it a four.
And the lucky spinner pick for random viewing...
Tonight's The Night
Celesti
This was an incredibly cute story about a girl's romance and decision to lose her virginity with her boyfriend of eight months. Written in the first person, the author really knows how to use words to express her nerves and excitement at anticipating what she has planned. If I had one criticism it would be that the story was rushed, and ended before the actual event happened. I noted that this was the author's only story and she hasn't posted another one since last year. I gave it a four.
That's it for me today, thanks for taking the time to read my reviews. As always if you have any comments to be made about my comments, please leave them at the link in my sigline. Thanks again, Danielle.
It's Monday again, sigh, the beginning of another work week. Here's my take on some of todays stories. If you have any problems or wish to comment on my comments, please use the Link found in my signature. Happy Reading!
How to Get Your Characters Naked
Sack
It's so great to see something new posted by this author. Sack has been wonderful when it comes to getting out advice for the new author and this "how to" is no different. I, too, have read many stories where the couple get naked without taking off thier clothes. While some of the examples are a trifle corny and long winded, talk about long paragraphs, I found this "how to" to be helpful and well expressed,and in some areas, very funny. Glad to see you back, Sack. A five from me.
Hannah's Decision
SelenaKittyn
This short story is erotic in the extreme if you are into Doctor/patient stories. It also teases into the realm of financial domination but never steps directly over the line. Well written as are most all of Selena's work, the only problem I had with it was it seemed to end awfully quick. I would have liked to have seen what the next process would have been. A four from me.
Oh My God! Is It Mine?
Brit40g
I do my darndest not to write bad reviews because my mother always beat into me the golden rule, so maybe I should have back clicked out of this story. But since her bio said new author and a high school senior to boot, I felt the need to put in my two cents. The author has some sense of the erotic, but needs to learn the dos and don'ts of writing. Also, even though this story is in the humor/satire cat, I really didn't find anything funny about it. My advice would be to do some more reading, check out the different styles of different authors and keep writing. Writing is partially natural talent and a lot of learned style and grammar. Good luck. I gave this a 2.
The Desktop
SweetWitch
Well, wow, this story was definitely put into the right category though it could have gone into Loving Wives as well. Though I believe there, it would have been trolled into extinction. A one and a half page well told extremely erotic tale about a woman who gets pushed to the edge by responsibilities, work, house, kids, sick husband. I was impressed with the quality of the story as well as the quality of the sex scenes, though I'm not a big one on anal. Good job to an author I think we'll probably see a lot more out of. I gave it a five.
Love Discovered
Katyusha
I'm reviewing this one because the author asked, though I doubt I will do that again. This story was erotica broken up with flashbacks into how the relationship started. For a lot of readers out there looking to find a stroke story, this chopping up of the sex scene will piss them off. I found it an interesting way to tell a story about a relationship in small pieces. The paragraphs were a little long and hard to read, the first paragraph I had to read three times before I could finally get through it. I enjoyed the fact that the hero wasn't the muscled stud whose rock hard body was described in detail but a normal man with a pudgy middle. I think this author has some talent and could do much better with practice. It got a three from me.
Spin The Bottle
Poker1
If you're looking for a wank and like teenage girls and boys getting it on, this is the story for you. The author does a good job at keeping the details of who is who and who did what together, something that I've seen get screwed up more than once. I will admit that this isn't my normal type of story that I like to read, there was very little emotion shown. But if you like stroke stories, you won't be disappointed by this one. I gave it a four.
And the lucky spinner pick for random viewing...
Tonight's The Night
Celesti
This was an incredibly cute story about a girl's romance and decision to lose her virginity with her boyfriend of eight months. Written in the first person, the author really knows how to use words to express her nerves and excitement at anticipating what she has planned. If I had one criticism it would be that the story was rushed, and ended before the actual event happened. I noted that this was the author's only story and she hasn't posted another one since last year. I gave it a four.
That's it for me today, thanks for taking the time to read my reviews. As always if you have any comments to be made about my comments, please leave them at the link in my sigline. Thanks again, Danielle.
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