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[Britva415]

Speaking of blind, there is a story idea I've been kicking around in my head for a few years about a blind girl where there are no visual descriptions. But I don't think I'm up to doing it justice yet.

 

[Five_Inch_Heels]

A mirror mirror thing, still in the works.

When the alarm went off and Kyle and I woke up, Kimmie wasn’t in her bed. We found her in the bathroom though just staring into the mirror. Her eyes welled up with tears, but she had a huge smile on her face. I walked up behind her and hugged her, looking over her shoulder at us both in the mirror.

“I know sis, I know.”

“How does she do that? She makes me feel things no one else does.”

“Mom’s just that extra kind of terrific, that’s all. She knows our bodies and know what makes us feel good. She’s by far the best lover I’ve ever had.”

“Yeah, but you and I know each other’s bodies and we never hit THAT kind of magic.”

We looked into each other’s eyes in the mirror and just smiled intensely.

“I know Sis, I know. That’s why we love her so much and why we do what she asks without question.”

 

[RoperTrace]

That is really going nuclear, isn't it. You can leave things out of the story without leaving out the entire story.

If it's important to the story, AND the story is being told by a blind character, then, nothing that character isn't aware of should be part of the story, should it.

If the reader needs it that bad, then why would one make a narrator who can't know, tell the story? Another character or an impersonal third-person narrator could tell it, if this info were critical to the story.

Alternatively, the blind narrator could say what IS important to their experience, and narrate how they received that information, if not with eyes. Visual appearance isn't included in that.

What element of plot does the visual appearance drive? That's what I was talking about. It's certainly possible to have a blind POV character narrate a story in which someone's visual appearance was a necessary element of what happened in the story, but, to say that there is no story without including visual appearance which the blind first-person narrator can't perceive is pretty extreme.

Anyway, I don't know whether you're talking about some specific story you actually wrote, or if we're both just speaking in generalizations. I'm generalizing, I'm not trying to say you fucked up specifically.

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