Letting off some steam

[TheDopefish]

I'm sorry to sound like a no-life jerk, but I have to let this off my chest. I HATE DOPEFISH777!!!!! He writes a Dream story that sucks, and now he's writing a story about Vitamin C that sucks too!! Will a Talented author please step up and tell this no-talent ashole to stop writing until he can at least write an interesting story? When I saw that there was a story about Dream, my eyes lit up! But they fell dark when I read the story. Nothing. No detail , just a half-page suckfest! I hoped that perhaps the second chapter would be better, after all, it was his first story, but to no avail. Now , in the thid chapter of that god-awful Adventures of Jake Barmen, some poor celebrity is going to be fucked by a 1 demensional character because Asshole numero uno got to her before a talented author did.

Dopefish777, if you have any balls, you'll reply to this message. YOU ARE GOING DOWN,BUDDY!!!

 

[Dopefish777]

Try out writing yourself buddy!

You're all talk. Why don't you try writing out if you don't like my stories? I'm positive you'd be singing a different tune! Writing is tough work, so make sure you can back up your talk before complaining to a writer.


P.S. The adventures of Jake Barmen #3 will blow your minds!

 

[cyndiesweet]

Okaaaayyy. Isn't this the place for CONSTRUCTIVE criticism?

 

[Guest]

Nice try cyndiesweet........

But I wouldn't worry about it too much. It's just guys comparing their "thingies".............

 

[cyndiesweet]

A "pissing " contest so to speak? Hmm.. I guess I will never get that particular behavior.

 

[KatPurrs]

Way to go Dopefish777!!!

I loved the fact that you used that idiot's post to plug #3 of your series! Instead of copping your name, he should have named himself "Blowfish".

 

[Natalie Nessus]

 

[cyndiesweet]

I didn't think of that.You are probably right.Of course it seems so obvious NOW.

 

[Dopefish777]

i reveal all... But not to you

You have untagled my tangled web of... of... Damnit! I can't think anything!!!! Yes, this was all a publicity stunt! And You all fell for it!!!! BWAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!

P.S. To those who where not fooled, do not email me. I would like to enjoy this. Oh, and once again, when chapter 3 comes out, Please read it.

 

[KillerMuffin]

First of all, put up a link to your story. See the thread at the top of this forum.

Second of all, a constructive critique.

The character started out very interesting. Good development there, I actually identified with the guy. Keep that up.

The segue into sex, "I'm a nymphomaniac, I can't believe how much I needs sex." It goes downhill from there. The sex is anticlimactic and takes all two paragraphs. From the time you took with the beginning of this story I did expect more out of you than a run of the mill basic description of a softcore blowjow.

There was no human interaction beyond the fact that she sucked his dick. It was like starting out reading a Tom Clancy and ending up with something in the Executioner series. I'm not comparing you to Tom Clancy, but that's the level of expectation you set for me with the quality of the writing in the beginning.

You shouldn't cheat your readers. If you find sex boring, then you should write in another area that you don't find so boring. You'd do extremely well there.

 

[Natalie Nessus]

 

[Guest]

okkaayyyy...

First of all, put up a link to your story. See the thread at the top of this forum.

Second of all, a constructive critique.

The character started out very interesting. Good development there, I actually identified with the guy. Keep that up.

The segue into sex, "I'm a nymphomaniac, I can't believe how much I needs sex." It goes downhill from there. The sex is anticlimactic and takes all two paragraphs. From the time you took with the beginning of this story I did expect more out of you than a run of the mill basic description of a softcore blowjow.

There was no human interaction beyond the fact that she sucked his dick. It was like starting out reading a Tom Clancy and ending up with something in the Executioner series. I'm not comparing you to Tom Clancy, but that's the level of expectation you set for me with the quality of the writing in the beginning.

You shouldn't cheat your readers. If you find sex boring, then you should write in another area that you don't find so boring. You'd do extremely well there.