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[Beth87]

You have all excited me in different ways

 

[Deleted member 1177770]

When a girl is willing, all a man can do is satisfy

 

[Beth87]

i like that rule Well it should be a rule

 

[garetho]

i prefer the rule
you can take a horse to water but a pencil must be lead

or
time spent on reconnaisance is seldom wasted

 

[garetho]

or however it is spelt

 

[geronimo_appleby]

i prefer the rule
you can take a horse to water but a pencil must be lead

or
time spent on reconnaisance is seldom wasted

time spent in recce is never wasted.

 

[Beth87]

Not for a while yet. I have to make it publish material..dont want to get flamed this time..my ego is far too sensitive

Thanks I ll randomly keep slotting them in and hopefully you will see an improvement over time as I practise my drawing techniques

 

[Beth87]

I like this one too

 

[Beth87]

Lol i know! Well actually I asked for feedback, so it was presumed unfinished.

Yeah its not normally my style either but I realised a lot of my comments for somewhere else were coming from the male perspective and wanted to try it out.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

Take your time and perfect your writing before it gets published here or anywhere. If you published something that wasn't perfect you deserved to get flamed. I mean that in a kind constructive way. Drafts belong on your desk or the desk of your editors and cowriters. So much of the stuff on lit is total crap. Such poor writing and spelling that it barely makes sense. some writing takes years, so a few weeks on a project is nothing. Good luck with it. Not my type of subject, so I likely wouldn't read it, but its a good writing experience, and if you want to perfect the craft you need to go to unusual places sometimes.

well, i've never been so insulted!

... actually, i have ...

beth's writing? let's have a look?

 

[Beth87]

Most of the replies were constructive. I only had one or two spelling mistakes

Im not going to ignore you for honesty! I might be sensitive but im not THAT sensitive. Mostly my work was 'cliched'

But the rest of the comments I will take on board and do a full edit. I need to focus on fleshing out the surroundings, acknowledge some things..not too bad a review for my first attempt at erotic writing.

 

[Beth87]

Here is my story for those of you who don't want to flick through my profile etc Tiffany

And yes..her name will be one of the things I am reworking

 

[Beth87]

Lol sounds good.

Btw you don't have to only say nice things.. that's not constructive to my writing process. But can you keep criticism brief for me? If its like a page long..kinda get half way through and think 'make it stop!'

Maybe bite size chunks for me

 

[niceguys1st]

It figures you're online the minute that I'm walking out the door to go to work. Have a good day hun.

 

[jnibroc88]

It has been a while Beth, how are you?

 

[Beth87]

It figures you're online the minute that I'm walking out the door to go to work. Have a good day hun.

ive been online all morning! where've you been mr??

 

[Beth87]

It has been a while Beth, how are you?

Im good thanks u?

 

[Beth87]

GTG. Have a great day/night. I'll think about the bite sized chunks. I love it when you talk dirty like that.

giggles

Ill have more dirt for you later hunni. Speak soon have a good one

 

[geronimo_appleby]

you mention dialogue isn't your forte - that would be an area to really concentrate on. rather than 'fear' dialogue, confront it. dialogue can help your characters tell the story.

the opening scene ... make it a hook. that's your chance to pull the reader in. a lot of readers will decide at that point if they want to bother reading on, give them a mystery; a shock; or tantalise them in some way that makes them continue.

it's difficult in a short piece to give the characters any personality - this is where dialogue can help. make the things they say mirror their personality.

... erm, sorry, i'm going on and on here, but i've learned a lot of this stuff the hard way - by writing a piece and reading the feedback.

each time, aim to improve.

 

[All_n_GoodFun]

Good Day to you Beth... Hope things are well. I know you should be working as should I. But have missed your lovely presence on here

 

[Beth87]

thanks for looking for me

Yeah dialogue is something i need to work on. Oddly enough in my novel, dialogue comes out naturally..i don't need to think about it because the characters do it for me. Maybe I need to hook into the characters myself more??

 

[jnibroc88]

Im good thanks u?

I am good. Better now that you are talking to me.

 

[Beth87]

Good Day to you Beth... Hope things are well. I know you should be working as should I. But have missed your lovely presence on here

Hey

Ive missed being on here

 

[geronimo_appleby]

thanks for looking for me

Yeah dialogue is something i need to work on. Oddly enough in my novel, dialogue comes out naturally..i don't need to think about it because the characters do it for me. Maybe I need to hook into the characters myself more??

i've recently started making notes on characters' life histories - nothing too intense, just a bit of background. i found that my characters are 'samey', and that makes them bland.

anyway, good luck with tiffany. nowt wrong with the name either.

 

[Beth87]

I am good. Better now that you are talking to me.

Whats plan 4 today?