In the shower

[christcat69]

Here's a new one guys. Tell me what you think.

Warm water cascading over our bare skin,
Your silky flesh rubbing against mine,
A thin stream of water pouring down your supple nipples...
I catch it in my thirsty mouth.

As you gently lather my skin, I gasp,
Overwhelmed by the sweet smell of pomegranate and this lucid vision of you,
My body shudders and my mind reels,
As I envision the exquisite things I will do to you.

Now I just need a name.

 

[Rybka]

How About. . .

Warm water cascading over our bare skin,
Your silky flesh rubbing against mine,
A thin stream of water pouring down your supple nipples...
I catch it in my thirsty mouth.

As you gently lather my skin, I gasp,
Overwhelmed by the sweet smell of pomegranate and this lucid vision of you,
My body shudders and my mind reels,
As I envision the exquisite things I will do to you

Too many words for my taste (such as it is). How about:

Warmth cascading over bare skin,
Flesh silkily rubbing,
water pouring down your supple nipples...
I catch it with my lips.

Your lathering makes me gasp,
Overwhelming smell of pomegranate, a vision of you,
Bodies shudder and minds reel,
I envision exquisite things I will do.


Regards, Rybka

 

[Angeline]

Mmmmmmm nothing like a refreshing shower

I love the build up of sexual tension in this poem. Maybe I'm trying to apply my style to it, but I think I would break up some of the lines to even it out and make the images more stark. Not sure this is where you want to go, but i think less is more here.

In the shower's warm waterfall
we rub silky flesh to flesh.
Water beads, glistens, drips
thin stream from your supple nipples
to my thirsty mouth waiting below.

Gently lather me in soap and scent
sweet pomegranate and lucid vision
of you I shudder, mind reeling
gasping with exquisite possibiliy
at the things I'lll do to you.

 

[christcat69]

Re: Mmmmmmm nothing like a refreshing shower

I love the build up of sexual tension in this poem. Maybe I'm trying to apply my style to it, but I think I would break up some of the lines to even it out and make the images more stark. Not sure this is where you want to go, but i think less is more here.

In the shower's warm waterfall
we rub silky flesh to flesh.
Water beads, glistens, drips
thin stream from your supple nipples
to my thirsty mouth waiting below.

Gently lather me in soap and scent
sweet pomegranate and lucid vision
of you I shudder, mind reeling
gasping with exquisite possibiliy
at the things I'lll do to you.

I love your input. The improvements are tantalizing. Angeline, you inspire me. Thank you darling. xoxoxo Rybka, thank you for your input as well. I really like to drag things out. I beleive that if you jump right in you're missing the good stuff (the foreplay involved). But, I do appreciate any and all feedback, so thank you. Now for a name!! What should it be called?

 

[christcat69]

Angeline

I especially liked the waterfall imagery. It's very sexy.


Silent Predator

Candy is dandy but liquor is quicker.

 

[Rybka]

Shhhh!

Rybka, thank you for your input as well. I really like to drag things out. I beleive that if you jump right in you're missing the good stuff (the foreplay involved).

Shhh! Senna Jawa might hear!

Regards, Rybka

 

[christcat69]

hmmm

I think I missed something. Care to fill me in?

Leo Moon

 

[Angeline]

ChristCat

Muah. You're a lovely person, and you have possibly the sexiest avatar I've seen! Happy to help--I had fun doing it.

And Rybka? You're a pretty cute fishy yourself, even if I couldn't figure out all the rules for your darn poem!

 

[christcat69]

Why thank you kindly

Two thumbs up for Carmen Electra!!!

Tropical Storm

 

[smithpeter]

Angeline has a nice AV, but that is not the subject here.

___________________

A shower,
each morning,
has the wet drench
the twist of temp by knob,
my miss of Miss
Ms that
occupied the space between forced drops,
streams, and the shelter of toweling
tiny drops.

drop to knees
to get every
last
one

the occasional mornings
grew slimmer

 

[Angeline]

It's getting kinda crowded in here

Could someone please pass the shampoo?

 

[WickedEve]

Re: It's getting kinda crowded in here

Could someone please pass the shampoo?

Hi. I heard there was a shower orgy in here. Am I too late to get wet?

I like the all of the suggestions you've received. I made some changes on your poem but didn't post it. I decided it sucked. lol I like many of the suggestions Angeline made. And smithpeter, as usual, did his own unique thing.

Now will someone please soap me up!

 

[JUDO]

Without Hands

The temperature is just right for
Drops of crystal that cling to silver handles.
Their cousins dancing in the air
In the gentle ballet of a warm tease.

The metallic squeak echoes across the tiled room
Forcing the tingling spray to splash its continuous journey
Down, around and under -
Dripping through the valleys, nobs and crannies
Of what, when and who we are.

Mutual invitation has brought us to the precipace.
You with you curves, short hair and sexy body -
Me with my boyish build, long hair and lustful thoughts,
But the spark in our eyes; yours brown, mine blue
Grant untold yes's to our closed borders.

Standing toe-to-toe in the tight confines,
I lick a drop from your cheek
As you attempt to pass the soap
Without using your hands.

 

[WickedEve]

Once again, Judo gives us one of her mediocre poems. (damn that hussy and her great poetry! ) I really need a shower now!

 

[JUDO]

Feeling dirty, are we?


- Judo

 

[WickedEve]

I feel dirty most of the time, Judo.

As soon as I get a moment, I'm going to attempt to write a shower poem. cat69's thread has inspired me!

 

[WickedEve]

I bathe in your flow
that streams down slick skin,
drink in water with a twist of you.

Suds and ecstasy slide between us
and down the drain.

 

[stargirl32]

Bubbles blown by breaths heat
lubricious suds slide past our bodies
Hands grasp at clinging curtains
Gasps drowned in the water's fall

Reality crashing in coldly.
As the washer turns to rinse.
Confused screams , ecstasy,
Or shock? ,, you choose.

 

[Blue Dolphin]

Fingers
reaching, exploring
blind waves through the mist
tips touching granite, caressing to pull
fingernail
scratch at the surface, teeth ever ready to bend
slipping and sliding
ride
over the mound
open the door to desire
spread wide inside and manuever
thrusts that pulsate through the mind
hardness expanding
left leg in the air, wrapping and pulling
driving now onward
up ever up
moaning
screaming
muscle re tighten toes curl away
clutching scarring
suffocated spasms to strangle the cry
slowing
softened sighs abound
relax warmth
sink
into the glow

 

[Angeline]

Christcat? You have written

one inspiring thread, girlfriend! Seems that many of us fixated with gusto on the sexy shower concept By God, we're sexy AND clean, aren't we?

Well, I'm gonna take a bath.

Sea of Soapy Love

Step delicately in, back straight,
hair pinned with tortoiseshell
in raven twist atop my head.
My hair is as you wanted.
Well I know that your delight
is in the artifice we make tonight,
this lovers’ game, this waterplay
in sloping clawfoot porcelain.

The Nag Champa burns sweet,
its mild scent imbues the humid air,
and all the room aglow in candlelight
reflecting on the bubbles, fair and
insubstantial prismic orbs that
foam in fragile rainbow eddies,
clinging drifting every tiny breath
or shift revealing or concealing
tender heat-pinked shining flesh.

The rivulets are slipping, sliding
snaking beads of steaming moisture
streaming down the arc of silk
or pattering in drip and drops of
gentle sparkling rain that falls in
plips and plops of little splashes
from the sponge you hold above.
And Oh your eyes are shining on
my arching smile seraphic senses
swimming in a sea of soapy love.

 

[christcat69]

I'm just happy to be here.

I'm glad I've inspired so many of you. As for Eve, I knew I could lure you in with a little wet inspiration. But noone has suggested a name yet. Help. Infinite Connection

 

[WickedEve]

Re: I'm just happy to be here.

I'm glad I've inspired so many of you. As for Eve, I knew I could lure you in with a little wet inspiration. But noone has suggested a name yet. Help. Infinite Connection

I hear wet sounds and cum running!

 

[stargirl32]

Re: I'm just happy to be here.

I'm glad I've inspired so many of you. As for Eve, I knew I could lure you in with a little wet inspiration. But noone has suggested a name yet. Help. Infinite Connection

umm ok

how about

steam clean

or soapy heaven

or suds to you ,,

umm ill be back with more

 

[smithpeter]

a name by any other name...

Shower Stalling
~
Cum Clogged Drain

 

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